THE CURSE
Viewing comments for Chapter 88 "The Biters/Part Six"The six book of the Novels of the Breedline
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Comment from AJ McCall
Okay. I AM SIKED ABOUT THIS CHAPTER! I saw what you started to do Shana at the beginning where you put some of the last chapter, but I think today's was a good enough length. For now. (LOL.) And I'm glad Frank's alright, at least for the moment being. Hopefully, he doesn't change or turn invincible, lol. On the bright side, the detectives now have Maximum and Adrian or the remains of Adrian. But, yeah, how will they explain all of that? "Hey, boss, met some vampires and had some help from some beautiful and handsome werewolves on our case. Oh, and we also found a bloody torso of one of the guys that had a warrant. What do you think we should do?" THAT'D BE INSANE!
But you're not gonna write that in, lol. Right now, I'm just really looking forward to the next chapter to see where it'll take off!!!
Two suggestions tho:
1. "Within the next twenty-four hours, you'll have an insatiable craving for blood. (Human blood)." - Italize this.
2. If it weren't for Jena and your brother, (we'd have been)..." -- This line confused me. I guess its just how you put the words. It could be like, We would've been, instead of what you have there because it had me a little... befuddled.
But I hope you're having a great evening, and I can't wait TIL NEXT MONDAYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY!
P.S. I liked the little variation of 'Damn' you used but I would suggest stretching it like: Dayummm....
Okay, that's it! ;)
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2021
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Okay. I AM SIKED ABOUT THIS CHAPTER! I saw what you started to do Shana at the beginning where you put some of the last chapter, but I think today's was a good enough length. For now. (LOL.) And I'm glad Frank's alright, at least for the moment being. Hopefully, he doesn't change or turn invincible, lol. On the bright side, the detectives now have Maximum and Adrian or the remains of Adrian. But, yeah, how will they explain all of that? "Hey, boss, met some vampires and had some help from some beautiful and handsome werewolves on our case. Oh, and we also found a bloody torso of one of the guys that had a warrant. What do you think we should do?" THAT'D BE INSANE!
But you're not gonna write that in, lol. Right now, I'm just really looking forward to the next chapter to see where it'll take off!!!
Two suggestions tho:
1. "Within the next twenty-four hours, you'll have an insatiable craving for blood. (Human blood)." - Italize this.
2. If it weren't for Jena and your brother, (we'd have been)..." -- This line confused me. I guess its just how you put the words. It could be like, We would've been, instead of what you have there because it had me a little... befuddled.
But I hope you're having a great evening, and I can't wait TIL NEXT MONDAYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY!
P.S. I liked the little variation of 'Damn' you used but I would suggest stretching it like: Dayummm....
Okay, that's it! ;)
Comment Written 01-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2021
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Thanks so much, AJ :)
You crack me up. I just love your reviews. Ha! It just made my day. I like how you think. You see the humor in my writing where most people don't or they don't care for it. I like to bring in the comedy. It keeps the story from being so grim and morbid. And a big hug for the suggestions. I do agree with them. You are such a motivator and so helpful. I appreciate you! Now... I better find some time to write the next chapter. So far, just a few lines. I have writers block again. Uggg!
Big hugs,
Shana :)
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Aww, you're welcome, Shana! Anytime! Yes, comedy relief is a must! Thank you for the praise but I'm only being myself. Let me know if you need some writing prompts that can help you. I can shoot you some if you like. ;)
Comment from royowen
As always you've managed to write another unique episode dear Shana. These stories are still becoming more creative and inventive in their essence. You've done a marvellous thing, with this one, creating real drama for Frank, and a
Though we don't know what will happen to him, i hope he'll be fine, but then, you will find a clever way...beautifully written A's always my friend, blessings Roy
Typo : About the bit(e) marks on his neck.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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As always you've managed to write another unique episode dear Shana. These stories are still becoming more creative and inventive in their essence. You've done a marvellous thing, with this one, creating real drama for Frank, and a
Though we don't know what will happen to him, i hope he'll be fine, but then, you will find a clever way...beautifully written A's always my friend, blessings Roy
Typo : About the bit(e) marks on his neck.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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Thank you, Roy :)
So happy you enjoyed it. Poor Frank. I just love his character. He is a good person who loves his wife, his niece Carrie, and his job. I think he'll be just fine. :)
And thanks for catching my typo. You are the best my friend!
Always you fan,
Shana :)
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I think you?re right?somehow!
Comment from Shirley McLain
I like reading your story. It is full of action and your characters believable. I did not find any mistakes. I look forward to reading the next chapter. One thing about reviewing frustrates me, and that's the fact I can't read all of a story I want to. Always leaves me wanting more. Have a great afternoon. Shirley
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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I like reading your story. It is full of action and your characters believable. I did not find any mistakes. I look forward to reading the next chapter. One thing about reviewing frustrates me, and that's the fact I can't read all of a story I want to. Always leaves me wanting more. Have a great afternoon. Shirley
Comment Written 01-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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Thanks so much, Shirley :)
BTW... that's my mom's name too! Great name :)
I'm glad you enjoyed another Breedline adventure. Now I need to get busy and write the next one. I've been busy getting some of my books in audiobook. Hopefully The Curse will be out next year. This one has taken me the longest to get completed. I'm hoping to have this one finished in maybe five more chapters. Time will tell.
Thanks again! I appreciate your review and kind words.
Sincerely,
Shana :)
Comment from Iza Deleanu
The making of a werewolf :) bite the bitter with bitterns, and there is no cure or prevention in place, so you must go through hell to live again. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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The making of a werewolf :) bite the bitter with bitterns, and there is no cure or prevention in place, so you must go through hell to live again. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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Thank you, Iza :)
Glad you enjoyed another Breedline adventure. Hopefully I will have another completed by next Monday. There's not enough hours in the day. LOL!
Thanks again!
Sincerely,
Shana :)
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This Supernatural Science Fiction, a novel of the Breedline series, the Curse, Chapter the biters part six, speaks tough taletelling, concordized dialogues; ends with good wishes; well said, well done; thanks for sharing, happy reviewing this; God Bless You, my good writer, post more, fast, time precious dear, November Winter. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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This Supernatural Science Fiction, a novel of the Breedline series, the Curse, Chapter the biters part six, speaks tough taletelling, concordized dialogues; ends with good wishes; well said, well done; thanks for sharing, happy reviewing this; God Bless You, my good writer, post more, fast, time precious dear, November Winter. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 01-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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Thanks so much, Alcreator :)
I appreciate the great review and generous stars. I hope you continue to enjoy my Breedline adventures.
Thanks again!
Sincerely,
Shana :)
