Football - A Novel
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Comment from Sankey
Another great chapter. Not a spag anywhere to be found. I did the review then I had to go out so here I am back again. Always looking forward to where it is going and you know I am always interested in how your wrist and stuff is doing.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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Another great chapter. Not a spag anywhere to be found. I did the review then I had to go out so here I am back again. Always looking forward to where it is going and you know I am always interested in how your wrist and stuff is doing.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Charming banter. A tad of jealousy to spice it up. I laud you for making them mature adults rather than devolving into stereotypical misunderstanding leading to break-up and make-up and yada yada. To much pap out there. Fine work here!
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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Charming banter. A tad of jealousy to spice it up. I laud you for making them mature adults rather than devolving into stereotypical misunderstanding leading to break-up and make-up and yada yada. To much pap out there. Fine work here!
Comment Written 31-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
Great characterization. I think Katherine is doing the same thing she did with her late husband. She's letting Gabriel take over. He may be well-meaning and in love with her, but has he ever thrust himself into her life. He's used to getting his own way. She shouldn't have any problems about keeping custody of the boys. Just a thought--the statement about "After the boys were fed" seems a bit off. It make them sound like they were pre-K and had to have help with their food. Maybe "After the boys had eaten" would be more in keeping with their age. judi
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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Great characterization. I think Katherine is doing the same thing she did with her late husband. She's letting Gabriel take over. He may be well-meaning and in love with her, but has he ever thrust himself into her life. He's used to getting his own way. She shouldn't have any problems about keeping custody of the boys. Just a thought--the statement about "After the boys were fed" seems a bit off. It make them sound like they were pre-K and had to have help with their food. Maybe "After the boys had eaten" would be more in keeping with their age. judi
Comment Written 31-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review. Will make that correction.
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You're very welcome. That probably is the way parents feel, even if the boys are teenagers. judi
Comment from Judy Lawless
I like the way you've thrown a bit of drama into this one, Barbara, throwing Gabriel just slightly off his game. It will keep him on his toes. Now we'll see what the lawyer has to say. I still enjoy reading this novel.
One little thing: "I know. The only options I see are to stop(ping) seeing each other..." - remove the ping.
I'm glad to hear your gradually healing, but I can understand the frustration. It seems to take forever. I broke my hip five years ago.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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I like the way you've thrown a bit of drama into this one, Barbara, throwing Gabriel just slightly off his game. It will keep him on his toes. Now we'll see what the lawyer has to say. I still enjoy reading this novel.
One little thing: "I know. The only options I see are to stop(ping) seeing each other..." - remove the ping.
I'm glad to hear your gradually healing, but I can understand the frustration. It seems to take forever. I broke my hip five years ago.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review. I made that correction.
Comment from Doug Quinn
I like the easy way your words fit together. This stand-alone half chapter was a great read. You portrayed very believable interaction between Katherine and Gabriel. My fear came in seeing the list of characters; there are so many. I don't do well with a book I have to annotate the characters to keep them straight. Sounds like a personal problem because it is. Very nice work. I look forward to more.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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I like the easy way your words fit together. This stand-alone half chapter was a great read. You portrayed very believable interaction between Katherine and Gabriel. My fear came in seeing the list of characters; there are so many. I don't do well with a book I have to annotate the characters to keep them straight. Sounds like a personal problem because it is. Very nice work. I look forward to more.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review. Because I only post part of chapters only once a week and it takes over a year to post the entire book. I do it. The completed novel will not have that or will need it.
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Understood. My fear is gone!!
Comment from BethShelby
I think it is funny taht Gabriel is jealous of the man with the rose at Katherine's door. I see that you've added his name as a possible new suiter in spite of the fact she says she isn't interested. I wonder how he will work into the story.
Did you realize you have Frank Collins name twice unter characters?
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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I think it is funny taht Gabriel is jealous of the man with the rose at Katherine's door. I see that you've added his name as a possible new suiter in spite of the fact she says she isn't interested. I wonder how he will work into the story.
Did you realize you have Frank Collins name twice unter characters?
Comment Written 31-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review. No I didn't. I'll correct it.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Another wonderful chapter which I have come to expect of your writing. (no pressure :)) I liked the boyfriend's jealously. You showed it to me nicely. The story is easy to read and the storyline easy to follow. Have a great afternoon. Shirley
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2021
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Another wonderful chapter which I have come to expect of your writing. (no pressure :)) I liked the boyfriend's jealously. You showed it to me nicely. The story is easy to read and the storyline easy to follow. Have a great afternoon. Shirley
Comment Written 31-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Ulla
Oh, this is a wonderful new chapter. That Gabriel is just something else. She is solucky to have met him. I ;ove thsstory and I can't wait to see when they are fully out in the open. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2021
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Oh, this is a wonderful new chapter. That Gabriel is just something else. She is solucky to have met him. I ;ove thsstory and I can't wait to see when they are fully out in the open. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 31-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from robyn corum
Barb,
I like this. They are just easing into that natural rhythm that couples do. He's figuring out his place and she's figuring out her own. They're making it work into a 'new normal'. It's clear that all the kids are on board, too. You have a super way of allowing the reader to get into the heads and hearts of your characters. They become quite real - pretty much flesh and bone. That's an exceptional talent.
Thanks!
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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2021
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Barb,
I like this. They are just easing into that natural rhythm that couples do. He's figuring out his place and she's figuring out her own. They're making it work into a 'new normal'. It's clear that all the kids are on board, too. You have a super way of allowing the reader to get into the heads and hearts of your characters. They become quite real - pretty much flesh and bone. That's an exceptional talent.
Thanks!
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Comment Written 31-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the encouraging review. It warms my heart.
Comment from royowen
It seems that Gabriel thinks he has a rival, but He need not worry, even though he's feeling a little envious of this new suitor, his name is Melton Ivory, a lawyer, Gabriel is still a little miffed, I wonder if Melton is a "ring-in", beautifully written Barbara, it's good to see your wrist is getting better, albeit slowly, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : I don't want to do (that) either
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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2021
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It seems that Gabriel thinks he has a rival, but He need not worry, even though he's feeling a little envious of this new suitor, his name is Melton Ivory, a lawyer, Gabriel is still a little miffed, I wonder if Melton is a "ring-in", beautifully written Barbara, it's good to see your wrist is getting better, albeit slowly, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : I don't want to do (that) either
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Comment Written 31-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2021
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Mr. Ivory will have a role. Thank you for the kind review and I've fixes that error.
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I?m sure Barbara
