An Echo of the Slap!
The tragic-cum-comic-incident is engraved on my mind.27 total reviews
Comment from Judy Lawless
RP your writing is good, but I don't understand the essence of this story. I'd like to see it written as a longer piece with more hints as to what is going on. I know for this contest it wouldn't qualify, but it could have a good chance in a different category.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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RP your writing is good, but I don't understand the essence of this story. I'd like to see it written as a longer piece with more hints as to what is going on. I know for this contest it wouldn't qualify, but it could have a good chance in a different category.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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Hello Judy,
In the light of your comments, one fact is crystal clear: Had I described the background of the story and its characters, things would have been quite different.
Keeping in mind all the limitations, I might have used the Author Note for this purpose. Anyways, thanks for your suggestions.
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from lancellot
Your writing is fine and so is your editing. The story itself is very confusing. The actions and reactions to an assault from your brother to you, right in front of your new wife. I'm at a loss. Even if a misunderstanding happen, that act alone, again in front of your woman, would usually result in a fight or the police, not a laugh.
I think this story would be better served if in a contest that allowed you to provide more information.
"Who's the heroine?"
What is the context for this question?
"Am I lecherous?" Thundering, he forcibly slapped!
-This reply and act, are also without context.
"Sweetheart, I'm in a dilemma. Cry or laugh?" I said, smiling.
- I'm not even sure of this part. Why would you ask this of your new wife?
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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Your writing is fine and so is your editing. The story itself is very confusing. The actions and reactions to an assault from your brother to you, right in front of your new wife. I'm at a loss. Even if a misunderstanding happen, that act alone, again in front of your woman, would usually result in a fight or the police, not a laugh.
I think this story would be better served if in a contest that allowed you to provide more information.
"Who's the heroine?"
What is the context for this question?
"Am I lecherous?" Thundering, he forcibly slapped!
-This reply and act, are also without context.
"Sweetheart, I'm in a dilemma. Cry or laugh?" I said, smiling.
- I'm not even sure of this part. Why would you ask this of your new wife?
Comment Written 02-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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Hello Lancellot,
In the light of your comments, one fact is crystal clear: Had I described the background of the story and its characters, things would have been quite different.
Keeping in mind all the limitations, I might have used the Author Note for this purpose. Anyways, thanks for your suggestions.
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I'm not quite sure what happened here but your brother didn't like your words so he slapped you! Perhaps you deserved it and your wife was sympathetic and you both laughed about it in the end, I hope I understood, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2021
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I'm not quite sure what happened here but your brother didn't like your words so he slapped you! Perhaps you deserved it and your wife was sympathetic and you both laughed about it in the end, I hope I understood, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2021
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Hello Dolly x,
Thank you very much for reading and your comments backed by 5 Stars.
[Dear Friend, He completely misunderstood me, and his reaction was QUITE unexpected. ACTUALLY, I myself couldn't understand all this - so sudden! A lot of words are needed to express the whole 'tragic-cum-comic-incident.' Please accept my heartfelt THANKS. ]
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from pookietoo
This is a cute little true story flash entry. I wish you a lot of luck in the contest. I entered this contest too. I hooe all is well with you. Keep smiling and best wishes.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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This is a cute little true story flash entry. I wish you a lot of luck in the contest. I entered this contest too. I hooe all is well with you. Keep smiling and best wishes.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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Hello Pookietoo,
Thank you very much for your so LOVELY and MORALE BOOSTING words backed by "a lot of luck in the contest."
I wish you better Luck!
With best wishes,
~ RP
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Please read my contest entries.
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Sure! Pookietoo.
Comment from l.raven
Hi RP, anyone had ever slap me like that...elder brother
or otherwise...better be able to run...fast...
well I would say pretty much he didn't like
your answer...which was still not a good enough
reason to slap you my sweet friend...but you
seemed to have taken it all in stride...and laughed
about it...I hope you and the wife had a great evening...
a great story told sweet guy...made me laugh as well...
good luck in the contest you...love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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Hi RP, anyone had ever slap me like that...elder brother
or otherwise...better be able to run...fast...
well I would say pretty much he didn't like
your answer...which was still not a good enough
reason to slap you my sweet friend...but you
seemed to have taken it all in stride...and laughed
about it...I hope you and the wife had a great evening...
a great story told sweet guy...made me laugh as well...
good luck in the contest you...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 01-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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Hello L. Raven,
What a FANTASTIC review this is! MARVELOUS Indeed!!
Thank you very much for your so LOVELY and MORALE BOOSTING words backed by SIX STARS plus Good luck in the contest.
With best wishes,
~ RP
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Hi sweet guy, Thank You for an awesome reply
you...always makes me smile...
and you are always sooooooooo very welcome...
best wishes back at ya...love xxoo
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
" An Echo of the Slap!", is a well-written and entertaining piece. I'm still smiling while I write this review. Good luck in the contest. Please let me know how you get on?
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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" An Echo of the Slap!", is a well-written and entertaining piece. I'm still smiling while I write this review. Good luck in the contest. Please let me know how you get on?
Comment Written 31-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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Hello the Duchess,
Thank you very much for your so LOVELY and MORALE BOOSTING words backed by Good luck in the contest.
With best wishes,
~ RP
~RP~, it was a pleasure to read your work again.
Best wishes,
the Duchess
Comment from Goodadvicechan
This is an interesting short story. Slapping is not the right way to express one's feeling.
I am glad you can smile at life. Not taking things too seriously or to revenge is the right attitude.
Thanks for sharing this with us. It is entertaining.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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This is an interesting short story. Slapping is not the right way to express one's feeling.
I am glad you can smile at life. Not taking things too seriously or to revenge is the right attitude.
Thanks for sharing this with us. It is entertaining.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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Hello Goodadvicechan,
Thank you very much for your so LOVELY and MORALE BOOSTING words backed by veiled Good luck in the contest.
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a story about an unexpected reaction to an innocent statement, "I'm not interested in heroines." It sounds as though your brother thought you were insinuating he showed excessive sexual interest by asking about the heroin (lecherous). Your reaction was best...laugh it off but remember. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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This is a story about an unexpected reaction to an innocent statement, "I'm not interested in heroines." It sounds as though your brother thought you were insinuating he showed excessive sexual interest by asking about the heroin (lecherous). Your reaction was best...laugh it off but remember. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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Hello LJbutterfly,
Thank you very much for your so LOVELY and MORALE BOOSTING words backed by "Best wishes in the contest."
[Dear Friend, You are 100% right. He completely misunderstood me, and his response was QUITE unexpected. ACTUALLY, I myself couldn't understand all this - so sudden!
[ A lot of words are needed to express the whole 'tragic-cum-comic-incident.' Please accept my heartfelt THANKS. ]
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from BethShelby
Wow! That sounds like quite an overreaction. He much have been a very sensitive person to make him believe you considered yourself above him by not being attracted to a movie heroine. Thus this much make him lecherours in contrast. I'm amazed you didn't react other than to feel the sting of his slap. It was wise of you to think about it and see the humor in the situation. The memory of that slap is still there but hopefully this didn't keep you and your brother apart.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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Wow! That sounds like quite an overreaction. He much have been a very sensitive person to make him believe you considered yourself above him by not being attracted to a movie heroine. Thus this much make him lecherours in contrast. I'm amazed you didn't react other than to feel the sting of his slap. It was wise of you to think about it and see the humor in the situation. The memory of that slap is still there but hopefully this didn't keep you and your brother apart.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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Hello BethShelby,
Thank you very much for your so LOVELY and MORALE BOOSTING words backed by "Best wishes in the contest."
[Dear Friend, You are 100% right. He completely misunderstood me, and his response was QUITE unexpected. ACTUALLY, I myself couldn't understand all this - so sudden!
[ A lot of words are needed to express the whole 'tragic-cum-comic-incident.' Please accept my heartfelt THANKS. ]
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Ulla
Hi Rhaghuvir. I'm so sorry that you had this bad experience. But as you say it's better to laugh it off than breaking down crying.Thank you so much for sharing this with us. Good luck in the contest. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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Hi Rhaghuvir. I'm so sorry that you had this bad experience. But as you say it's better to laugh it off than breaking down crying.Thank you so much for sharing this with us. Good luck in the contest. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 31-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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Hello Ulla,
Thank you very much for your so LOVELY and MORALE BOOSTING words backed by "Good luck in the contest."
[Dear Friend, You are 100% right. He completely misunderstood me, and his response was QUITE unexpected. ACTUALLY, I myself couldn't understand all this - so sudden!
[ A lot of words are needed to express the whole 'tragic-cum-comic-incident.' Please accept my heartfelt THANKS. ]
With best wishes,
~ RP
