Comment from Shirley McLain

Good

The story of full of action and the dialogue excellent. It was very easy to follow even though this was my first chapter to read. I found a line which was a little unclear (expression, it had reached its limits.) I wasn't clear on what hadn't reached it's limit. Have a great afternoon. Shirley

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2021

Thank you, Shirley.
I will go back and make a few changes on the line that didn't seem clear. Sorry about that. Thanks for pointing it out. I appreciate it!

Sincerely,
Shana :)

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Your chapter in the book THE CURSE
The Biters/Part Five
scongrove,
What an amazing chapter I just finished reading. I read it so fast,
I went back to make sure I did'nt miss any thing. All I can say you did so well. I wished I could rate you with a six.
Gert

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021

Awww... thanks so much, Gert :) So happy you enjoyed this one too. It took me a week to finish this scene. It gets hard writing when you have more than a few characters in a fight scene. That used to be one of my difficult things to write about. It gets better with time and practice.

Thanks again!
Sincerely,
Shana :)

reply by Gert sherwood on 26-Oct-2021

scongrove You are most welcome
Gert

Comment from AJ McCall

Exceptional

SHANAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!
I don't know how you come up with these suspenseful and funny chapters, but THEY'RE AWESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSOME! I love the Breedline, especially Roman. (I don't know why, for some reason, lol.) The way you describe fighting the Biters makes me shiver and read it over and over again. I can't imagine what the next chapter will be like. And, I am glad for once that you didn't start this post off with the ending of the last one, lol. The length was PERFECT!

I did spot one typo though: Every (head) turned toward the guy and then shifted their eyes on Tim as though they were waiting for him to come up with a solution.

I'm thinking of a story that's inspired by this if you don't mind. And, soon, I'll be buying all of your novels, and then hopefully you can sign them!! But in the meantime, see ya next MONDAY!

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021

Awww... thanks so much, AJ :)
Glad you enjoyed this one too. Whew! I didn't think I would have it completed in time. This one had me stumped for a while. Thanks for catching the typo :) I also went back and added a few lines. Changed Jace's lines a bit. I guess I thought he needed more say. LOL!
I sure appreciate your reviews. It does help and encourages me. I would be so honored if you purchased my books. You can get signed copies (and cheaper) off my website: shanacongrove.com

Thanks again!
Big hug,
Shana :)

reply by AJ McCall on 26-Oct-2021

Awesome! Thanks! And, you're welcome!! Hey, I get it when you say when you think they need to say more. Jace is one complex character lol. And don't stress, just let the chapter flow to you. I heard Writer's Block is when your imaginary friends won't talk to you, LOL.

Comment from Mary Shifman

Excellent

I was so excited to find another chapter in this amazing book. Those guys sure do get into some messes. Is the chained up guy going to become a vampire, too? Keep them coming, Songrove!

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021

Thank you, Mary :)
So glad to hear from you again. I didn't think I would have this one completed yesterday. It was a difficult scene to write. I did go back this morning and add a few things. It does answer your question about the guy that is chained. I forgot that he had been bitten. That one went over my head. LOL!
Thanks again for the awesome review and generous stars. I really appreciate you!

Sincerely,
Shana :)

reply by Mary Shifman on 26-Oct-2021

Thank you so much. I love your work. As I wrote my novel I had to make notes on what I had to check and what had to be added, and when I finished it, I had to go back and take care of loose threads. It's hard to keep track of all the sub-plots sometimes. You do a great job!

reply by the author on 27-Oct-2021

Thanks so much, Mary! :)

Comment from royowen

Exceptional

As I've said before dear Shana, no one but no one writes better action scenes than you, and this episode is the perfect example of that propensity that you have. Your ability matched many of the host of writers of sci fi fiction and fantasy that I've read, and it's a lot, I hope you become really successful, but it won't be because of ability, just plain luck, beautifully done my friend, most absorbing, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021

Awww... thanks so much, Roy :)
This one took me over a week to write. Whew! Glad I finally finished it. Now to move on with Frank and the others. So thrilled you did enjoy this one. It was a bit gory, but that is just how it goes when you write supernatural with vampires. LOL!

Thanks again my friend.
Always your fan,
Shana :)

reply by royowen on 25-Oct-2021

To read the demise of, what seems like monsters doesn?t bother me, it?s underserving humans, good to see Roman?s reaction. well done.

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This Chapter of the Supernatural Science Fiction about the Biters, part five, speaks a solid narrative taletelling thru a nice plot development fostered by dialogues realistic; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this, happy reviewing this; God Bless you, my good writer, post more, dear. ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021

Thanks so much, Alcreator :)
So happy you like this one too! It took me a while to write it. But I'm off to another chapter, trying to finish this book.

I appreciate you!
Sincerely,
Shana :)