Comment from strandregs

Excellent

Roy I like the rolling of what my daughter calls the existential question.
Or existential existence.
The format is an opening to explore.
I wonder what I will explore. :-))Z.

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2021

Thanks so much for these great comments, and a super review, blessings Roy,

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

For those children who did not experience a good childhood as their innocence was taken from them, we hope they will still plant seeds to grow into understanding adults without scars and regrets, a poignant write, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2021

Thanks Dolly, for these excellent comments and review, blessings Roy

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Roy,
This is a well rhymed religious hepastitch about how Christ came into the world and how his sacrifice saved us from sin.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021

Thanks Joan for these great comments and super review, blessings Roy

reply by dragonpoet on 26-Oct-2021

You're welcome on both accounts, Roy.
Joan

Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Excellent

A fine example of the form. The verse flows well, with elegant phrasing and excellent rhyme. Clever title is apt for the theme. I'm astounded you continue to conjure fresh imagery!

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021

Thanks Liz, for these great comments and super review, blessings Roy

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Amen! Praise Jesus for paying our "ransom's toll." Praise the Father for His perfect plan that He implemented to make us His children. Praise the Holy Spirit Who "styles" our goodness according to His will.

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021

Thanks Helen, for these great comments and super review, blessings Roy

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

An interesting and thought provoking poem with many "What if?" questions, which you have answered in the final lines. Thoughtfully written, and in an interesting format.
Wendy

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021

Thanks Wendy, for these great comments and super review, blessings Roy

Comment from Anne Johnston

Excellent

I have been out of town for a week, so it will take me awhile to get caught up on here. Well done on this poem, Roy. I shudder to think what life would be like of Jesus had not come to this world to bring redemption

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021

Thanks again Anne, for these fantastic comments and review, blessings Roy

reply by Anne Johnston on 26-Oct-2021

You are welcome, Roy

Comment from Mary Vigasin

Excellent

I truly like how you used "if" as a teaching tool to have your reader think "what if " we never had our intelligence to build, be a child to learn and the most "what if" of all: What if Christ had never come and died for our sins.
Very powerful writing Roy.
Blessings,
Mary

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021

Thanks Mary, for these great comments and super review, blessings Roy

Comment from Sherry Asbury

Excellent

I am so glad Jesus is in my life. I try hard to do the right thing, but it isn't always easy - having been raised by atheists. The one memory I have from childhood that pleases me is a huge calendar in the living space behind her grocery store. It showed Jesus astride the world and I imagined his feet as being on our house. It was comforting.

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021

Thanks Sherry, for these great comments and super review, blessings Roy

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

This is lovely. I like all the "If" beginnings. Each one seems to build on the previous. The last stanza asks what it would have been like if Christ had not come. People would be lost in sin, but Christ came to save. Excellent rhyme and flow. I di wonder about switching back and forth between you and we. You might see how it sounds to you if you use "you" consistently. judi

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021

Thanks Judy, for these great comments and super review, blessings Roy