Those summer roses
Modern haiku25 total reviews
Comment from Senyai
Hi Sanku,
Oh this is a lovely modern haiku you've penned. I love the satori :
" Sharp thorns"
The satori makes or breaks a haiku and yours was the perfect asset, in my laymen's opinion.
Hope Gypsy likes this one. I really do. Your presentation and image to enhance does just that... much enjoyed reading this gem :))
Always,
Senyai
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2021
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Hi Sanku,
Oh this is a lovely modern haiku you've penned. I love the satori :
" Sharp thorns"
The satori makes or breaks a haiku and yours was the perfect asset, in my laymen's opinion.
Hope Gypsy likes this one. I really do. Your presentation and image to enhance does just that... much enjoyed reading this gem :))
Always,
Senyai
Comment Written 28-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much
She suggested some modifications which I.accepted
Comment from lauralumummu
This is a lovely poem. I can almost smell the roses. Sometimes I am so tempted to pick roses in other people's gardens but I never do. lol. I admire Meryl Street as well. All the best, Laura
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2021
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This is a lovely poem. I can almost smell the roses. Sometimes I am so tempted to pick roses in other people's gardens but I never do. lol. I admire Meryl Street as well. All the best, Laura
Comment Written 27-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much for your sweet words.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine upbeat write about our roses that provide a double edged sword of beauty and thorns, much enjoyed, a fine poem for the club, a fabulous painting too, love Dolly x
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A fine upbeat write about our roses that provide a double edged sword of beauty and thorns, much enjoyed, a fine poem for the club, a fabulous painting too, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much for your encouraging words
Comment from Boogienights
Thorns or not, they are so beautiful. I love the different colors of roses and wonder how they were able to be grown that way. Your short poem has me longing for summer...thanks for sharing. :)
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2021
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Thorns or not, they are so beautiful. I love the different colors of roses and wonder how they were able to be grown that way. Your short poem has me longing for summer...thanks for sharing. :)
Comment Written 27-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Those Summer Roses', is short, succinct and delightfully descriptive. Woven through each short line are the golden threads of truth. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2021
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'Those Summer Roses', is short, succinct and delightfully descriptive. Woven through each short line are the golden threads of truth. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much for your kind words.
You definitely deserved the kind words.
Comment from mermaids
Your words draw the reader in and then the mention of the thorns is a surprise. Your use of words creates a clear picture of nature that brings forth feelings, nature is beautiful but also harsh. Excellent haiku form.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2021
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Your words draw the reader in and then the mention of the thorns is a surprise. Your use of words creates a clear picture of nature that brings forth feelings, nature is beautiful but also harsh. Excellent haiku form.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much for the thoughtful review
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I like it all, Sanku, it is enjoyable enough but the ending kind of leaves me in the dumps!
Sharp thorns, is not a way to end if you want plenty of reviews that is for sure!
Modern Haiku is lots of fun yet the ending is not the way that I would go, my friend, if you don't mind me telling you so! So, I will leave it at that my interesting one,
I have other fish in the sea!
Take care, my friend I wish you all the best!
Jesse
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2021
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I like it all, Sanku, it is enjoyable enough but the ending kind of leaves me in the dumps!
Sharp thorns, is not a way to end if you want plenty of reviews that is for sure!
Modern Haiku is lots of fun yet the ending is not the way that I would go, my friend, if you don't mind me telling you so! So, I will leave it at that my interesting one,
I have other fish in the sea!
Take care, my friend I wish you all the best!
Jesse
Comment Written 26-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2021
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Haikus are supposed to.have a 'satori" which would provide food for thought.
It was meant as a cautious warning -applies to life situations as well.
Thank you for stopping by and reading and reviewing.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Fresh and elegant. Are modern haiku allowed to have more than 17 syllables--yours has 19. Good use of contrast between dainty and sharp. Fine work in the form.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2021
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Fresh and elegant. Are modern haiku allowed to have more than 17 syllables--yours has 19. Good use of contrast between dainty and sharp. Fine work in the form.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2021
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The club entry required 4 lines and minimum syllables as possible
Thanks for stopping by.
Comment from lyenochka
I like your haiku with a romance warning. Just like the enticing roses have thorns, enticing dainty love attractions could also result in some pain. It's great you are learning this modern haiku form!
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I like your haiku with a romance warning. Just like the enticing roses have thorns, enticing dainty love attractions could also result in some pain. It's great you are learning this modern haiku form!
Comment Written 26-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2021
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Thank you for understanding that I am.sorry for the delayed reply. It is Diwali.time here
Crackers are being burst causing my asthma to flare up.4th and 5th would be very bad.
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Diwali is happening already? Please take good care of yourself. Do you have an air purifier at home? Please try to use masks, if possible. Hugs and a prayer for protection for your lungs! 🙏💕💖
Comment from Paul McFarland
A very nice modern Haiku. I'm looking at this poem as a metaphor. Something that you desire must be studied very carefully. It may contain sharp thorns.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2021
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A very nice modern Haiku. I'm looking at this poem as a metaphor. Something that you desire must be studied very carefully. It may contain sharp thorns.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much for stopping by..
