Wheels Of Life
A personal lamentation- sonnet54 total reviews
Comment from June Sargent
Yes, we all would love to spend just a little more time on this earth. Despite the ups and downs, tears and frowns, we want to continue on this journey for as long as there's another sunrise...
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Yes, we all would love to spend just a little more time on this earth. Despite the ups and downs, tears and frowns, we want to continue on this journey for as long as there's another sunrise...
Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You have done well with what I know of your life shared on FS. Your poem reads well with good rhymes, smooth flow, and great imagery. You give great advise, too.
Respectfully, Jan
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You have done well with what I know of your life shared on FS. Your poem reads well with good rhymes, smooth flow, and great imagery. You give great advise, too.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
Comment from Raul1
I think what you mean that life sometimes can be rough or kind. I like your message. It is clear and concise. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!
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I think what you mean that life sometimes can be rough or kind. I like your message. It is clear and concise. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
Comment from dragonpoet
Jay,
This sounds like a good mind set in which to live your life. It is true that we always want more time if we are healthy.
I think knowing should be knew because all other verbs a past tense and then soon can be sooner and be more grammatically correct and still be the correct syllable count.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
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Jay,
This sounds like a good mind set in which to live your life. It is true that we always want more time if we are healthy.
I think knowing should be knew because all other verbs a past tense and then soon can be sooner and be more grammatically correct and still be the correct syllable count.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
Comment from Susan Newell
It's amazing how fast the wheels of time turn, and how with every rotation we lose a little more of our physical selves. We contemplate why we are here and how we can be a teenager one day and an elderly person the next. In God's time it all can't amount to a single breath. And soon we will understand.
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It's amazing how fast the wheels of time turn, and how with every rotation we lose a little more of our physical selves. We contemplate why we are here and how we can be a teenager one day and an elderly person the next. In God's time it all can't amount to a single breath. And soon we will understand.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
Comment from RaynaHarleenQuinns
I couldn't agree with you more sit.
I just lost my job but finished my job so it's every rose has its thorn..
I could relate to what you spoke in rhyme
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I couldn't agree with you more sit.
I just lost my job but finished my job so it's every rose has its thorn..
I could relate to what you spoke in rhyme
Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
Comment from Sherry Asbury
My walk will begin and I will wish to be stalwart like you. Dying isn't the hard part - it is leaving and never seeing lilacs or creeks or the smile of babies. I believe I am going to a different place and hope I will find you there. Excellent poetry - finest presentation.
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My walk will begin and I will wish to be stalwart like you. Dying isn't the hard part - it is leaving and never seeing lilacs or creeks or the smile of babies. I believe I am going to a different place and hope I will find you there. Excellent poetry - finest presentation.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I know I do. My children need me although I need them more. LOL Life is previous and no one in their right mind gives it up willingly. This is a well written poem on love of life. Good day to you, Bill. Nancy:)
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I know I do. My children need me although I need them more. LOL Life is previous and no one in their right mind gives it up willingly. This is a well written poem on love of life. Good day to you, Bill. Nancy:)
Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
Comment from Ulla
Of course we do, Jay. As long as we have our faculties we want to be around for that bit longer. You express bit so very well in this lovely poem. I so enjoyed reading it and I'm truly on your side. Ulla:)))
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Of course we do, Jay. As long as we have our faculties we want to be around for that bit longer. You express bit so very well in this lovely poem. I so enjoyed reading it and I'm truly on your side. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
Comment from amahra
I know Sonnets are not the only poems that end with couplets, but I love couplets for how they sum up the true meaning of the poem. I like the one below.
In closing I ask the powers that be-
Walk along this long, lonely road with me.
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I know Sonnets are not the only poems that end with couplets, but I love couplets for how they sum up the true meaning of the poem. I like the one below.
In closing I ask the powers that be-
Walk along this long, lonely road with me.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
