Wheels Of Life
A personal lamentation- sonnet54 total reviews
Comment from Kooky Clown
What a lovely and thoughtful poem, and it rhymes which I liked a lot, Like you although I confess not quite as old, I have led a good fun life and done a lot of small things that I have enjoyed. I am now getting a bit slower in my movements due to arthritis in my knees and shoulders, but still enjoying the simple things in life and long may I continue to do so. Take care and God Bless. Kooky.
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What a lovely and thoughtful poem, and it rhymes which I liked a lot, Like you although I confess not quite as old, I have led a good fun life and done a lot of small things that I have enjoyed. I am now getting a bit slower in my movements due to arthritis in my knees and shoulders, but still enjoying the simple things in life and long may I continue to do so. Take care and God Bless. Kooky.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2021
Comment from Jasmine Girl
You are doing something right. You have lived a long life and is healthy and self-reliance. May I suggest that you can do Yoga to straighten your back. Not sure about the eyesight. You are still writing sonnets.
Well done.
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You are doing something right. You have lived a long life and is healthy and self-reliance. May I suggest that you can do Yoga to straighten your back. Not sure about the eyesight. You are still writing sonnets.
Well done.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2021
Comment from DeboraDyess
I agree -- you've done an excellent job with the years God has given you. I love every part of the poem, but the visual of 'another inning' was perfect.
And, rest assured, God is walking those long, lonely roads with you, my writing friend.
Blessings,
Deb
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I agree -- you've done an excellent job with the years God has given you. I love every part of the poem, but the visual of 'another inning' was perfect.
And, rest assured, God is walking those long, lonely roads with you, my writing friend.
Blessings,
Deb
Comment Written 25-Oct-2021
Comment from Mia Twysted
Very encouraging. It tells the reader that though time on Earth is limited it is important somewhat because it is limited. Live each day as if it was your last.
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Very encouraging. It tells the reader that though time on Earth is limited it is important somewhat because it is limited. Live each day as if it was your last.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2021
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Jaybird1,
Nice piece of poetry in the form of 'Sonnet' meeting the desired norms, having impressive phraseology, smooth flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, and beautifully depicting the poet's lamentation as well as WISH.
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Hello Jaybird1,
Nice piece of poetry in the form of 'Sonnet' meeting the desired norms, having impressive phraseology, smooth flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, and beautifully depicting the poet's lamentation as well as WISH.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2021
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Your note and poem
are appreciated, jaybird.
-You wrote a very good sonnet
expressing your feelings.
-I like the image of "wheels of life"
and the "inning" reference, too.
-You do an excellent job of
summing up your life experiences
as you saw them when you were
writing this.
-I like the line about "serving your time."
-A very good concluding couplet.
-Thanks for sharing this and have
a good evening and week ahead.
-I consider you a very good friend.
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-Your note and poem
are appreciated, jaybird.
-You wrote a very good sonnet
expressing your feelings.
-I like the image of "wheels of life"
and the "inning" reference, too.
-You do an excellent job of
summing up your life experiences
as you saw them when you were
writing this.
-I like the line about "serving your time."
-A very good concluding couplet.
-Thanks for sharing this and have
a good evening and week ahead.
-I consider you a very good friend.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2021
Comment from karenina
It is a sign of a life well lived, that you are ready and willing to gather as many future days as possible! I know so many half your age that do nto have the stamina, nor the exuberance to hope to keep their wheels spinning! Perhaps God is listening? I'm sure of it.
Karenina
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It is a sign of a life well lived, that you are ready and willing to gather as many future days as possible! I know so many half your age that do nto have the stamina, nor the exuberance to hope to keep their wheels spinning! Perhaps God is listening? I'm sure of it.
Karenina
Comment Written 25-Oct-2021
Comment from royowen
From what I'm led to believe, you're well into your nineties, you are a fine example of a man who has seen it all, plus some, and hopefully will see a lot more. You're a fine writer with lots of experience, and you exercise it with skill and alacrity. Well done, blessings Roy
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From what I'm led to believe, you're well into your nineties, you are a fine example of a man who has seen it all, plus some, and hopefully will see a lot more. You're a fine writer with lots of experience, and you exercise it with skill and alacrity. Well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 25-Oct-2021
Comment from jake cosmos aller
Another masterful traditional verse on life, death, and our purpose in this world. I like the feeling, the power, and the simple yet majestic images and feeling of this poem.
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Another masterful traditional verse on life, death, and our purpose in this world. I like the feeling, the power, and the simple yet majestic images and feeling of this poem.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2021
Comment from Sally Law
Life is precious and on a day -to-day basis. I'm glad you have so much to live for. You must be the envy of many. Sending you my best and blessings for always,
Sally :))
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Life is precious and on a day -to-day basis. I'm glad you have so much to live for. You must be the envy of many. Sending you my best and blessings for always,
Sally :))
Comment Written 25-Oct-2021
