Builder Of My Love
A Mansion For Us5 total reviews
Comment from Irish Rain
Well this is just lovely!
I like the theme, the words and the picture.
Building a mansion of love!
What a delightful idea!
Loved this,
blessings...
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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Well this is just lovely!
I like the theme, the words and the picture.
Building a mansion of love!
What a delightful idea!
Loved this,
blessings...
Comment Written 26-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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Thank you
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Have a great week!
Comment from Paul McFarland
A fine example of a loop poem. I tried to respond with a small loop poem, but had no success. I'll try again sometime. You have done a good job with it.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021
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A fine example of a loop poem. I tried to respond with a small loop poem, but had no success. I'll try again sometime. You have done a good job with it.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021
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Thank you for your positive review
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is a gorgeous poem. I love the form, rhyme and meter. It reads in a very lyrical manner and the imagery is vivid and sensual. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021
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This is a gorgeous poem. I love the form, rhyme and meter. It reads in a very lyrical manner and the imagery is vivid and sensual. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021
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Thank you Mary
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You are welcome.
Comment from karenina
Not sure how you accomplished it, but you've managed to write a loop poem which does not scream "Look! I'm repeating the end word of the line above!"
This flows so naturally and the theme felt so very true I was well into it before I began to notice it was a loop..
For that alone you're deserving of six stars --which I do not have until we get more in our "account" on Sunday.
Awesome write here...
Karenina
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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Not sure how you accomplished it, but you've managed to write a loop poem which does not scream "Look! I'm repeating the end word of the line above!"
This flows so naturally and the theme felt so very true I was well into it before I began to notice it was a loop..
For that alone you're deserving of six stars --which I do not have until we get more in our "account" on Sunday.
Awesome write here...
Karenina
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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Thank you karenina.
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I always get tangled in my "loops"--you wrote this without a single snag!
Karenina
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All in the words lol
Comment from James Milici1
For some reason I seem to gravitate toward your poems. This may be the third or fourth I've commented on in a short period of time. "A Builder of My Love" is another good one that got me to think of how love really does require patience over the long haul. It must hover above the chaos of daily life. I like the idea that love is poised somewhere above the chaos and beneath the shining skies. There's a certain architecture to love so you've employed a good metaphor. Though the poem rhymes it has a free verse feel, a looseness that makes it pleasant to read.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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For some reason I seem to gravitate toward your poems. This may be the third or fourth I've commented on in a short period of time. "A Builder of My Love" is another good one that got me to think of how love really does require patience over the long haul. It must hover above the chaos of daily life. I like the idea that love is poised somewhere above the chaos and beneath the shining skies. There's a certain architecture to love so you've employed a good metaphor. Though the poem rhymes it has a free verse feel, a looseness that makes it pleasant to read.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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You are the BOMB! Nice that you get my ideas and how i express them. Thank you sincerely
