Thanksgiving Baby
I was at my grandsons home birth.35 total reviews
Comment from Ricky1024
This is a true story contest entry rich in theme and imagery.
It's one of those things that make you want to cry.
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I went through something with my youngest daughter Dana
But she was born with the cord wrapped around her neck.
Well fortunately, the nurse listen to me.
They inserted a internal monitor inside my wife and realized the baby was in distress.
Yes, and would need a cesarian birth immediately.
As, I was getting prepared to go into the operating room. They were already contacting a doctor who fortunately was able to take care.
Yes, without the cesarean or C-section.
And, Dana just celebrated her 37th birthday September 30th
Good luck with this.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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This is a true story contest entry rich in theme and imagery.
It's one of those things that make you want to cry.
...
I went through something with my youngest daughter Dana
But she was born with the cord wrapped around her neck.
Well fortunately, the nurse listen to me.
They inserted a internal monitor inside my wife and realized the baby was in distress.
Yes, and would need a cesarian birth immediately.
As, I was getting prepared to go into the operating room. They were already contacting a doctor who fortunately was able to take care.
Yes, without the cesarean or C-section.
And, Dana just celebrated her 37th birthday September 30th
Good luck with this.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 20-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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Thanks, Ricky nice to hear from you.
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A great experience for sure in spite of worry it all turned out in the end.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Wonderful story! Taut narration is perfectly suited for the tension of the event.
I was at my [Grandsons=>grandson's] home birth.
"What if something goes wrong I thought."
(What if something goes wrong?) I thought. (no quotation marks around thoughts--use parentheses or italics.
She was crying it hurts, tears came to my eyes,
She was crying, "It hurts!" Tears came to my eyes.
"Yes", I exclaimed. "It's coming" she shouted.
"Yes!" I exclaimed. "It's coming!" she shouted.
Breathe we shouted
"Breathe!" we shouted
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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Wonderful story! Taut narration is perfectly suited for the tension of the event.
I was at my [Grandsons=>grandson's] home birth.
"What if something goes wrong I thought."
(What if something goes wrong?) I thought. (no quotation marks around thoughts--use parentheses or italics.
She was crying it hurts, tears came to my eyes,
She was crying, "It hurts!" Tears came to my eyes.
"Yes", I exclaimed. "It's coming" she shouted.
"Yes!" I exclaimed. "It's coming!" she shouted.
Breathe we shouted
"Breathe!" we shouted
Comment Written 20-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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Thank you for your help with the grammar, and review, much appreciated.
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Glad to help!
Comment from Ben Colder
Wow! Seeing and being part of this marvelous miracle our creator performs every minute of the day is awesome. Makes you appreciate God just a little bit more. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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Wow! Seeing and being part of this marvelous miracle our creator performs every minute of the day is awesome. Makes you appreciate God just a little bit more. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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Thanks Ben, yes it was an awesome day. PTL
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
WOW! What an inspiring story. I enjoyed your contest entry. I'm thrilled everything went well, and your son was there to deliver the baby alone. Your lines read well with great details. Great picture.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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WOW! What an inspiring story. I enjoyed your contest entry. I'm thrilled everything went well, and your son was there to deliver the baby alone. Your lines read well with great details. Great picture.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
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Comment Written 20-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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Thanks so much Jan.
Comment from Raul1
This is an interesting story. I think that it is well written. I did enjoy reading it. Thank you for sharing! Exceptional work! No grammatical errors. Best wishes in the contest! Good job!
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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This is an interesting story. I think that it is well written. I did enjoy reading it. Thank you for sharing! Exceptional work! No grammatical errors. Best wishes in the contest! Good job!
Comment Written 20-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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Thanks very much Raul.
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You're welcome! Happy writing!
