Facing The Sun
Sijo Poem for the Japanese Poetry Club16 total reviews
Comment from Mark Schardine
All is good except for the expression "water damage" because you can use your imagination and writing skills to find a better way to show the harm done, and present a stronger image.
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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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All is good except for the expression "water damage" because you can use your imagination and writing skills to find a better way to show the harm done, and present a stronger image.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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Thank you
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Facing The Sun', is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. It was a privilege to both read and review this talented poet's work.
I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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'Facing The Sun', is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. It was a privilege to both read and review this talented poet's work.
I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Gypsy, you certainly deserved both. :)))
Hugs the Duchess x
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This poem encompasses excellent visual description. The reader can really see the scene and enter into the story. I enjoyed reading this very much and will not hesitate to read more of these poems.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2021
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This poem encompasses excellent visual description. The reader can really see the scene and enter into the story. I enjoyed reading this very much and will not hesitate to read more of these poems.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from royowen
I love the contrast of the results of creatorial malaise, and herons playfully going about life, almost as if nothing had actually happened. An excellent post Gypsy, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2021
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I love the contrast of the results of creatorial malaise, and herons playfully going about life, almost as if nothing had actually happened. An excellent post Gypsy, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 19-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much, Roy. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy hugs
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A privilege
Comment from Ulla
Hi Marival, this is certainly a new form to me. I've obviously never heard about it before. I'm not even sure I like that form very much. But it's early days, so I have to familiarise myself to it. I'm sure you've written a lovely poem. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2021
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Hi Marival, this is certainly a new form to me. I've obviously never heard about it before. I'm not even sure I like that form very much. But it's early days, so I have to familiarise myself to it. I'm sure you've written a lovely poem. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 19-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2021
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Thank you, ulla
Comment from Sherry Asbury
Are you here in the states? We have the Columbia river just a blink away. I love herons and you have written this so well. Your artwork is so pretty. A very nice presentation all around.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2021
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Are you here in the states? We have the Columbia river just a blink away. I love herons and you have written this so well. Your artwork is so pretty. A very nice presentation all around.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2021
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Yes. I live in Pasadena in southern California.
Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mary Shifman
I like this poem's conflicting perspective on the river. It's flooding and doing damage to the human world, yet much of nature is unaffected. I like the picture, too. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2021
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I like this poem's conflicting perspective on the river. It's flooding and doing damage to the human world, yet much of nature is unaffected. I like the picture, too. Nicely done.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I like the title Facing The Sun very much, but I know, that herons cannot jump on logs...let alone ride on logs for sure!
This is an interesting poem with a Japanese style that I am not aware of so I will leave it at that and just say,
Have a beautiful day,
Jesse
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2021
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I like the title Facing The Sun very much, but I know, that herons cannot jump on logs...let alone ride on logs for sure!
This is an interesting poem with a Japanese style that I am not aware of so I will leave it at that and just say,
Have a beautiful day,
Jesse
Comment Written 19-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Extra Gypsy hugs
Comment from Hitcher
That is a stunning piece of art Gypsy, truly gorgeous : )) And the colorful presentation of your sijo is something else too friend. A very creative, well written and enjoyable read. I'm gonna have to try one now : ))
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2021
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That is a stunning piece of art Gypsy, truly gorgeous : )) And the colorful presentation of your sijo is something else too friend. A very creative, well written and enjoyable read. I'm gonna have to try one now : ))
Comment Written 19-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2021
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Yes, I look forward reading your sijo.
Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Hitch.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Jasmine Girl
What a beautiful and peaceful poem about the Columbia river. I like the surreal atmosphere in the first art work. The lady was dropping a net while heron was about to fly away.
Well done.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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What a beautiful and peaceful poem about the Columbia river. I like the surreal atmosphere in the first art work. The lady was dropping a net while heron was about to fly away.
Well done.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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Yes, I love that picture too. I found it in DeviantArt.com they have some interesting pictures. I also use pinterest.com and sometimes Google.
Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
