Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Your chapter inyour book THE CURSE
The Biters/Part Four
scongrove ,
Indeed you have a very vivid imagination to be able to write this chapter about how Karina turned her into a vampire. Then Frank realized that Karina bit him
Gert

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021

Thanks so much, Gert :)
It was fun to create. And of course, someone has to have been bitten. LOL! Glad you enjoyed. Thanks for the review and generous stars. I appreciate it.

Sincerely,
Shana :)

reply by Gert sherwood on 25-Oct-2021

scongrove
You are most welcome
Gert

Comment from Mary Shifman

Excellent

Wow! Intense. I love this story. It's got my two favorite monsters in it. I wish I could write fight scenes the way you do. It's amazing and feels so real. I'm ready for the next chapter.

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021

Thank you, Mary :)
Glad to hear you enjoyed another Breedline adventure! The creepy scenes are my favorite to create. When I started writing, my hardest part was the fight scenes. I had no idea how to do that. I could see it all in my head, but when it came to putting it to pen and paper, it seemed so difficult for me. So, after years of practice, I finally got better. I'm definitely going back to rewriting my first two books after I finish publishing this one. The fight scenes are cut real short and don't have much descriptions. It's true what they say. Practice makes perfect... or close enough. LOL!
Thanks for reviewing my chapter and for the awesome stars. I appreciate it.

Sincerely,
Shana :)

reply by Mary Shifman on 21-Oct-2021

You are very welcome. I'm really enjoying the book.

Comment from AJ McCall

Exceptional

SHANAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!
How could you end it like that, with Frank, getting bit!?!?!?!?! Is he gonna change now?? What's going to happen!!? And what will be the reactions of the others?! Amelia and Augustus should've acted faster in my opinion.

I did catch one typo: "The guy shifts into a seven-foot creature that's (a) cross between...

Well, I guess I'll just have to be praying for Frank until next Monday. I don't think I can wait THAT long! BUT OMG I LOVEEEEEEEEEE THIS STORY!!!!

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2021

Thanks so much, AJ :)
Sorry about the Frank thing. Hee-hee! But don't worry, I'm sure he'll be all right. Remember, they killed his maker. Now all he has to do is resist the urge to drink blood until the venom is gone from his body. Stay tuned... more action to come.

Thanks so much for the awesome review and generous stars. You are super!!! And thanks for catching the typo too! :)

Hugs,
Shana :)

reply by AJ McCall on 19-Oct-2021

When will the venom leave his body?!?! I have to know!! LOL. Looking forward to the action! You're most welcome!! ;)

reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021

It takes a few agonizing weeks for vampire venom to be processed and broke down. But if Frank doesn't fed on human blood, he will be fine. That's IF he doesn't. Hee-hee!

reply by AJ McCall on 20-Oct-2021

OMG SHANA!! You're killing me!!! LOL. But then, he could always feed on animal blood IF you write that in, LOL.

Comment from royowen

Exceptional

I wonder what will happen to Frank after being bitten by Karina, although she won't be around to see the fruit of her villainy? Nobody but nobody does these action scenes as well as you Shana, but I do know they create imagery unseen by most readers.. this is a most fantastic episode, well done my talented friend, blessings Roy
Typo : in a matter (of) seconds

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2021

Thanks so much, Roy :)
I was wondering who would ask about Frank after he'd been bitten. Thankfully, they killed Karina. I'm sure the Breedline will watch over poor Detective Frank. He's definitely going to need it.

Thanks for the great review and generous stars. I'm so glad you caught my typo. How did I miss that. HAHA! I think I read this chapter a hundred times. Good catch my friend.

Always your fan,
Shana :)

reply by royowen on 19-Oct-2021

Frank will be interesting, you?ve got plans for Frank I think Dear Shana,

Comment from Anne-Marie brison

Excellent

Dear author,


Amazing job on this very good piece!!!! Thanks for sharing this with fanstory!!

May God bless you and your family!!

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021

Thanks so much, Anne :)
So thrilled you enjoyed the chapter. Although it was a bit creepy, I did have creating it. I appreciate your feedback and generous stars.

SIncerely,
Shana :)

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This Chapter of the Supernatural Science Fiction, part 4 about the Biters, speaks the order of curse thru nice taletelling and plot development backed by dialogues realistic; well said, well done; thanks for sharing, happy reviewing this; God Bless you, my good writer, post more, dear. October, Festive, Flood Fearing, Watery Month Here! ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021

Thanks so much, Alcreator :)

Your feedback is very encouraging. I do look forward to your input. And thanks for the generous stars my friend.

Sincerely,
Shana :)

Comment from Sherry Asbury

Excellent

Turn on all the lights, get garlic, stakes...wow, this is wicked! A very fine story that is chill-inducing. This is a great genre story and certainly kept my attention from word one to the after notes. Great job, dear writer.

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021

Thanks so much, Sherry :)

So thrilled you enjoyed this chapter. I agree, it is a bit wicked, but I do love writing about the supernatural. It's fun to make up your own world. I appreciate your kind words and generous stars.

Sincerely,
Shana :)

Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)

Excellent

Karina's face spun around like the swiftness of an owl's head, her eyes flaring with rage, and her chin and lips coated with blood. Frank's blood.
Manuel nearly gagged the instant she bared her fangs in his face and hissed. Her foul breath was beyond measure, like something had crawled down her throat and died...WOW you captured the scene so clearly I was THERE! I love the rawness and power of your writing. I will certainly be reading more as every breedline segment I read I am amazed at what a great writer you are...virtual six. Well done love Meia x

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021

Thanks so much, Meia :)

So glad you enjoyed! I had fun creating it. I think I like writing creepy scenes like this one more than the romantic ones. Haha! Go figure. It gives me great pleasure to hear someone say they were entertained by my story. That is priceless. You made my whole day.

Sincerely,
Shana :)