Eternal Music
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Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Eternal Music', is short, succinct and delightfully descriptive. Woven through each short line are the golden threads of truth. It was a privilege to read and review this talented poet's work. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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'Eternal Music', is short, succinct and delightfully descriptive. Woven through each short line are the golden threads of truth. It was a privilege to read and review this talented poet's work. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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I appreciate your continured support, Duchess.
Joan
Joan as always you're very welcome.
the Duchess
Comment from Sherry Asbury
Oh, so romantic!! Just so wonderful, and you did a fine job of representing this. The picture is great too - imagine being there...sigh! I am tempted to join this club.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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Oh, so romantic!! Just so wonderful, and you did a fine job of representing this. The picture is great too - imagine being there...sigh! I am tempted to join this club.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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Thanks, Sherry
Joan
Comment from PoemsOfDD
This is a well thought out piece for the picture this club.
Although written as a 5-7-5 it may be effective if written
as a free verse and laid out differently. For example -
Let's dance
from lake to pier,
then home,
to eternal music
of our souls
Just a suggestion. A pleasant read, either way. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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This is a well thought out piece for the picture this club.
Although written as a 5-7-5 it may be effective if written
as a free verse and laid out differently. For example -
Let's dance
from lake to pier,
then home,
to eternal music
of our souls
Just a suggestion. A pleasant read, either way. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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Thanks for the review and editing help
Joan
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your few words, DP, speak volumes of a couple in love and in love with dance. I like the smooth flow--just like a waltz across time into eternity.
Thank you for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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Your few words, DP, speak volumes of a couple in love and in love with dance. I like the smooth flow--just like a waltz across time into eternity.
Thank you for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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Thank you so very much, Jan for your continued support. It is much appreciated
Joan
Comment from Liz O'Neill
I never thought of Haiku as having the rhythm and cadence of a waltz. It said slowly it does. I can also hear maracas with the placement and sounds of the words. This poem is entertaining.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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I never thought of Haiku as having the rhythm and cadence of a waltz. It said slowly it does. I can also hear maracas with the placement and sounds of the words. This poem is entertaining.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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Liz,
Thanks for the kind comments. I am glad you liked it.
Joan
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Just a short poem from you for this picture Joan, but it's a beautiful interpretation of this picture as they dance from lake, to pier, into the rest of their lives, two souls entwined. Nicely done,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2021
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Just a short poem from you for this picture Joan, but it's a beautiful interpretation of this picture as they dance from lake, to pier, into the rest of their lives, two souls entwined. Nicely done,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 21-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much, Pearl, for the kind comments and generous rating.
Joan
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This poem speaks simply, easily, lovingly, naturally and concondingly the lovers wish to dance, dance and dance at each place of movement, visit to eternal music of their souls; well said, well done; thank you for this, happy to review this; God Bless you, my dear good writer, wish read more. ALCREATOR, October, Festive Month...
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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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This poem speaks simply, easily, lovingly, naturally and concondingly the lovers wish to dance, dance and dance at each place of movement, visit to eternal music of their souls; well said, well done; thank you for this, happy to review this; God Bless you, my dear good writer, wish read more. ALCREATOR, October, Festive Month...
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Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Thanks for your reviews and encouragement, Al.
Joan
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A good poem to
go with the image, Joan.
-Effective imagery with
the lake, pier, and home.
-I like the musical theme
and the concluding line, too.
-You have a typo in from.
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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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-A good poem to
go with the image, Joan.
-Effective imagery with
the lake, pier, and home.
-I like the musical theme
and the concluding line, too.
-You have a typo in from.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Thanks, Pam, for the nice review and editing aid.
Joan
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You are welcome, Joan.
