The Chronicals Of Bethica: The Rise
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "The Chronicles Of Bethica"Abram must defeat a deadly humanoid race of beings
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Comment from Judy Lawless
A beautiful ending to an adventurous story, Amahra. This is not the type of story I'd normally read, but I was drawn into it with your imaginative descriptions and characters. Well done.
One little tip: "If there is ever anything me(I) or my people can do for you..." - if you think of this sentence using each subject separately, you will see the problem. ...anything me can do for you? or I can do for you?
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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A beautiful ending to an adventurous story, Amahra. This is not the type of story I'd normally read, but I was drawn into it with your imaginative descriptions and characters. Well done.
One little tip: "If there is ever anything me(I) or my people can do for you..." - if you think of this sentence using each subject separately, you will see the problem. ...anything me can do for you? or I can do for you?
Comment Written 18-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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Thank you, Judy, I'm glad you caught it. And thank you for the stars.
Comment from Giftedone.Eric Wallace .
Once again I was intrigued pretty good read to the writer beautiful rewritten thank you for sharing this keep doing you stay riding and inspired have a beautiful day
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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Once again I was intrigued pretty good read to the writer beautiful rewritten thank you for sharing this keep doing you stay riding and inspired have a beautiful day
Comment Written 18-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much for your review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi amahra, you've written a beautiful continuation to the story. And now they've reached and are about to settle in Bethica. I loved the tender scene between Brehira and Gangus. It's so lovingly written. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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Hi amahra, you've written a beautiful continuation to the story. And now they've reached and are about to settle in Bethica. I loved the tender scene between Brehira and Gangus. It's so lovingly written. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 18-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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Thank you, Ulla. I'm so glad you felt Brehira and Gangus moment tender. It's what I was going for.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This Chapter 13 of the Fantasy Fiction speaks about the Promised Land, Lord Abram. After the Oracle, had to go and destroy the Nordoxz, a race of humanoids controlled by evil forces and settle in Bethica a land of dragons for about 750 people took risk of their lives for land and freedom; well said, well done; thanks for sharing, happy reviewing this; God Bless you, my good writer, post more, dear. October, Festive, Flood Fearing, Watery Month Here! ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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This Chapter 13 of the Fantasy Fiction speaks about the Promised Land, Lord Abram. After the Oracle, had to go and destroy the Nordoxz, a race of humanoids controlled by evil forces and settle in Bethica a land of dragons for about 750 people took risk of their lives for land and freedom; well said, well done; thanks for sharing, happy reviewing this; God Bless you, my good writer, post more, dear. October, Festive, Flood Fearing, Watery Month Here! ALCREATOR
Comment Written 18-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much for your review.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I've missed this story. I'm glad to have caught this post. I am hoping since they've reached Bethica that the story will continue. I would hate to loose my friends. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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I've missed this story. I'm glad to have caught this post. I am hoping since they've reached Bethica that the story will continue. I would hate to loose my friends. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
Oh! I seem to have missed previous fantasy episodes. But I enjoyed reading this as a standalone story. It is a well-written romance drama and the dialogues carry the story forward. Well done. Thanks for sharing!
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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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Oh! I seem to have missed previous fantasy episodes. But I enjoyed reading this as a standalone story. It is a well-written romance drama and the dialogues carry the story forward. Well done. Thanks for sharing!
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Comment Written 18-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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Yeah, I thought you forgot me. LOL! I'm happy for your review. Thank you.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
"You did it, love," she whispered--her eyes sparkling with tears. "You brought hundreds of settlers through a monstrous ocean, over treacherous lands. I never doubted you for a moment. I've always believed in you." She paused then said in a tearful whisper, "I love you."...Call me a softie, but I cried a little at this point! What a beautiful, engaging mix of adventure and romance! I would love to play one of the games you help to write, this felt almost like being immersed in a gaming simulation of very high quality- well done I look forward to seeing more from you love Meia x
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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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"You did it, love," she whispered--her eyes sparkling with tears. "You brought hundreds of settlers through a monstrous ocean, over treacherous lands. I never doubted you for a moment. I've always believed in you." She paused then said in a tearful whisper, "I love you."...Call me a softie, but I cried a little at this point! What a beautiful, engaging mix of adventure and romance! I would love to play one of the games you help to write, this felt almost like being immersed in a gaming simulation of very high quality- well done I look forward to seeing more from you love Meia x
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Comment Written 18-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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Thank you so much, Meia. A tear in the heart was what I was aiming for. You've made my day, my dear.
