Traffic
Traffic is the worst.5 total reviews
Comment from writer723
I really enjoyed reading your intriguing poem. It drew me in and held my attention throughout. Your description of this scenario was quite thought-provoking and emotional. Your writing skills are excellent and you have a wonderful gift of expression.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
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I really enjoyed reading your intriguing poem. It drew me in and held my attention throughout. Your description of this scenario was quite thought-provoking and emotional. Your writing skills are excellent and you have a wonderful gift of expression.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from samantha0930
I like the poem, and the picture does a good job displaying bad traffic that you really wouldn't want to be in, and the colors work well too like boring pavement colors. The only thing I would have you change is in your description line it should say "The traffic is the worst." not "worse". It would also sound better if you took out "the" so it says "Traffic is the worst.", but technically it isn't wrong it just sounds weird, so it doesn't matter too much if you leave "the" there or you take it out.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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I like the poem, and the picture does a good job displaying bad traffic that you really wouldn't want to be in, and the colors work well too like boring pavement colors. The only thing I would have you change is in your description line it should say "The traffic is the worst." not "worse". It would also sound better if you took out "the" so it says "Traffic is the worst.", but technically it isn't wrong it just sounds weird, so it doesn't matter too much if you leave "the" there or you take it out.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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Thank you! I did what you suggested. Thank you for your help!
Comment from Nicholas Guay
The feeling of happiness from not being in traffic is definitely felt here. However I think it could have been worded differently. Like:
Freed
from traffic and all its stressors, brings
peace.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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The feeling of happiness from not being in traffic is definitely felt here. However I think it could have been worded differently. Like:
Freed
from traffic and all its stressors, brings
peace.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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Thank you for your help! Is it better now for five stars rating?
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I wasn't aware that you could change your entry like that. I don't think you should use my version as your entry.
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Aren't you helping?
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I'm helping with constructive criticism. I believe you should take my advice and learn from it for next time.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Interesting 1-9-1 poem with a picture that puts additional meaning to the words. I am so thankful that I never have to face that much traffic. Does it make the millions who do a little crazy?
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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Interesting 1-9-1 poem with a picture that puts additional meaning to the words. I am so thankful that I never have to face that much traffic. Does it make the millions who do a little crazy?
Comment Written 11-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from SMASH52
Where I live, the lack of traffic to get to the closest of places definitely IS peace. You nailed the form and spoke a word. The photo is amazing.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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Where I live, the lack of traffic to get to the closest of places definitely IS peace. You nailed the form and spoke a word. The photo is amazing.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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Thank you!
