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1.9.1 Entry12 total reviews
Comment from writer723
I really enjoyed reading your intriguing poem. It drew me in and held my attention throughout. Your description of this scenario was quite thought-provoking and emotional. Your writing skills are excellent and you have a wonderful gift of expression.
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I really enjoyed reading your intriguing poem. It drew me in and held my attention throughout. Your description of this scenario was quite thought-provoking and emotional. Your writing skills are excellent and you have a wonderful gift of expression.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
Comment from samantha0930
I like the poem itself, but the colors and the picture don't fit together very well. The picture is nice I think, but I don't really like the text in the picture because it felt like it was supposed to be part of the poem. The green and the red don't really look good together either, and are far too dark. It would help if you were to make the font and background lighter colors, or try to make them similar colors to ones that are used in the picture. Maybe the font could stay red to match her dress, but the background I think should maybe be a light blue to go with the sky color. And you should capitalize the beginning of your second line so that it matches your other two lines. :)
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I like the poem itself, but the colors and the picture don't fit together very well. The picture is nice I think, but I don't really like the text in the picture because it felt like it was supposed to be part of the poem. The green and the red don't really look good together either, and are far too dark. It would help if you were to make the font and background lighter colors, or try to make them similar colors to ones that are used in the picture. Maybe the font could stay red to match her dress, but the background I think should maybe be a light blue to go with the sky color. And you should capitalize the beginning of your second line so that it matches your other two lines. :)
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
Comment from Nicholas Guay
This is beautiful.
I feel it could be more profound in the 9 syllable section but the message has a wonderful meaning so the simplicity might be what is needed.
very nice.
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This is beautiful.
I feel it could be more profound in the 9 syllable section but the message has a wonderful meaning so the simplicity might be what is needed.
very nice.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
Comment from pookietoo
I love that cute photo. It is true. Age is a number that does not define you. It does not matter your age. I wish you a lot of luck in this contest. Smile.
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I love that cute photo. It is true. Age is a number that does not define you. It does not matter your age. I wish you a lot of luck in this contest. Smile.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
Comment from Mimi Linny
Sometimes it's hard to write a meaningful poem with just using 11 syllables... You nailed it! I love the artwork that you have chosen to accompany this dear little piece of philosophy! Wishing you much luck in the contest!
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Sometimes it's hard to write a meaningful poem with just using 11 syllables... You nailed it! I love the artwork that you have chosen to accompany this dear little piece of philosophy! Wishing you much luck in the contest!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
Comment from Wendy G
You are right. Your words are wise and thoughtful, and the fun image associated with your poem is a good choice. I wish you the best for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
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You are right. Your words are wise and thoughtful, and the fun image associated with your poem is a good choice. I wish you the best for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
Comment from amahra
I really love the artwork that you chose for this 1-9-1 poem. It is so playful and funny. I really loved this poem and the message which was so truthful. And I did vote. Wink Wink.
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I really love the artwork that you chose for this 1-9-1 poem. It is so playful and funny. I really loved this poem and the message which was so truthful. And I did vote. Wink Wink.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and
presentation.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic.
-I like the use of one
continuous thought that
has a very good message.
-I agree with your message, too!
-Good luck in the contest.
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-Nice artwork and
presentation.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic.
-I like the use of one
continuous thought that
has a very good message.
-I agree with your message, too!
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2021
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Your poem is great, and the message is clear and attractively written.
The problem is the format. You need to study what colours of font vs. background work, and the pairings that are never used. Red-Blue, closely followed by red-green are the worst offenders, showing as blurred and extremely difficult to decipher the words.
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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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Your poem is great, and the message is clear and attractively written.
The problem is the format. You need to study what colours of font vs. background work, and the pairings that are never used. Red-Blue, closely followed by red-green are the worst offenders, showing as blurred and extremely difficult to decipher the words.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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Thanks for your review. I have changed the background colour, hopefully easier on the eyes.
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Much easier. Thanks. Kate
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This 1-9-1 Poem writing prompt entry speaks age is undefined, for it is just a number as it cannot define you while young is an attitude; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
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This 1-9-1 Poem writing prompt entry speaks age is undefined, for it is just a number as it cannot define you while young is an attitude; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 11-Oct-2021
