Autumn flings down leaves
Haiku28 total reviews
Comment from jenintorre
I really like this Haiku. Your words are very descriptive of the artwork that you've chosen. I think you should have entered this in the Haiku competition. Best wishes. Jen
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
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I really like this Haiku. Your words are very descriptive of the artwork that you've chosen. I think you should have entered this in the Haiku competition. Best wishes. Jen
Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from SMASH52
The personification is superb! The fall leaves ARE decked out for "their last dance". The trees remind me of the "wall flowers" at a Junior High School dance (back in the day).
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
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The personification is superb! The fall leaves ARE decked out for "their last dance". The trees remind me of the "wall flowers" at a Junior High School dance (back in the day).
Comment Written 07-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
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thank you very much.You have brought a new twist to it .i loved that ..
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You're welcome. Poetry can present interpretive options.
Comment from Wendy G
Good contrast of movement and activity, and dancing and falling, with the ensuing stillness of the trees. Lovely image and Haiku. Good wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
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Good contrast of movement and activity, and dancing and falling, with the ensuing stillness of the trees. Lovely image and Haiku. Good wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 07-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from lyenochka
I like your use of words here. The verb "flings" bring to mind the noun "flings" for brief, casual relationships that some couples have. The dancing leaves fall from the trees. And the word "detached" reflects that emotional detachment in such "flings." Enjoyed the deeper meaning of your poem!
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
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I like your use of words here. The verb "flings" bring to mind the noun "flings" for brief, casual relationships that some couples have. The dancing leaves fall from the trees. And the word "detached" reflects that emotional detachment in such "flings." Enjoyed the deeper meaning of your poem!
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 07-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
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Thank you .Each poem can have many interpretations..I loved yours .
I thought of the season -autumn- as one to teach us to let go ...
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is an excellent Haiku, with good description. Just one suggestion 'detached trees' on the last line reads a little strangely. I think I would have written 'naked trees'.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
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This is an excellent Haiku, with good description. Just one suggestion 'detached trees' on the last line reads a little strangely. I think I would have written 'naked trees'.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The winter chill is on its way and your autumnal leaves falling is just the start of the changes yet to come, a fine scene described here as the trees are left like lonely sentinels, love Dolly x
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The winter chill is on its way and your autumnal leaves falling is just the start of the changes yet to come, a fine scene described here as the trees are left like lonely sentinels, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much
Comment from Paul McFarland
Nice Haiku, but all the trees in the picture are evergreen trees. That is a nice picture though. "Detached trees" is an interesting term, and "last dance" is a unique usage.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
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Nice Haiku, but all the trees in the picture are evergreen trees. That is a nice picture though. "Detached trees" is an interesting term, and "last dance" is a unique usage.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from royowen
I like this fine post, a good satori line with "detached trees stand tall." I like the description of the autumn flinging down leaves and it does seem a little like that too, well done Sanku, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
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I like this fine post, a good satori line with "detached trees stand tall." I like the description of the autumn flinging down leaves and it does seem a little like that too, well done Sanku, blessings Roy
Comment Written 06-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much .And happy Birthday to you..People are writing poems to wish you .You are really blessed.
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Yes I am Sanku, and thank you too for this honour., bless you Roy
Comment from karenina
I am a fan of traditional haiku and so love that this is about nature and with a seasonal reference. It does seem like the leaves strip the trees naked as they whirl their final dance! With their brilliant colors, they go out in flaming glory though! Very nice.
Karenina
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
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I am a fan of traditional haiku and so love that this is about nature and with a seasonal reference. It does seem like the leaves strip the trees naked as they whirl their final dance! With their brilliant colors, they go out in flaming glory though! Very nice.
Karenina
Comment Written 06-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much .I used the word 'detached' to convey that autumn teaches us to let go of past..
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Yes, it certainly does that...
Karenina
Comment from dragonpoet
Sanku,
This words and artwork match well. This haiku uses personificiation well for the movement of trees and leaves. The last line gives a feeling of loneliness. I like the orange background for Autumn.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
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Sanku,
This words and artwork match well. This haiku uses personificiation well for the movement of trees and leaves. The last line gives a feeling of loneliness. I like the orange background for Autumn.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 06-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
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thank you very much.
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You are most kindly welcome, Sanku.
Joan
