Our Love
A Site Contest Entry28 total reviews
Comment from Paul McFarland
Nicely done. The picture and poem construction are great. Throwing in some rhyme was quite effective. Good job in going through the chronology of a loving marriage.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Nicely done. The picture and poem construction are great. Throwing in some rhyme was quite effective. Good job in going through the chronology of a loving marriage.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much, yes the rhyme was a gamble, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is a very lovely poem. It is lyrical and the form in interesting. It is a beautiful love poem. I've never written anything with a shape before. It must have taken quite a bit of work. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
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This is a very lovely poem. It is lyrical and the form in interesting. It is a beautiful love poem. I've never written anything with a shape before. It must have taken quite a bit of work. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Thank you so very much, your comments are very encouraging, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork
and presentation, kahpot.
-You wrote a very good love poem.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-You also tell a story about
this love, how it began, and
how it grew to what it is now.
-I like this line that shows togetherness:
"with love in one name."
-I also like the comparison
to a diamond that is shown
in the shape of the poem.
-Very good concluding lines, too.
-A good entry; good luck.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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-Very nice artwork
and presentation, kahpot.
-You wrote a very good love poem.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-You also tell a story about
this love, how it began, and
how it grew to what it is now.
-I like this line that shows togetherness:
"with love in one name."
-I also like the comparison
to a diamond that is shown
in the shape of the poem.
-Very good concluding lines, too.
-A good entry; good luck.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Thank you so very much for your wonderful comments and review, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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You are very welcome, kahpot.
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I looked at your poem and read my review. Some of it didn't make very good sense so I changed it a little, and also took out the suggestions.
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Dear Pam, your suggestions did help, I like to change my work as your help comes-before I answer your review-in case you check if I am taking notice-I will always take notice of help such as yours, always appreciate your reviews****kahpot
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Your reply means a lot, and is very much appreciated. Have a good day and weekend, too!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
To me this looks like a double nonet, one inverted above a normal one (I counted the syllables and still came to the same conclusion). In this context, referring to corner stones and diamonds is very pertinent, bringing the shape of the text into the actual (well-written) poem. Well done!
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To me this looks like a double nonet, one inverted above a normal one (I counted the syllables and still came to the same conclusion). In this context, referring to corner stones and diamonds is very pertinent, bringing the shape of the text into the actual (well-written) poem. Well done!
Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much-good eye-I tried this for to get loves strength to that of the diamond, your comments are so very encouraging, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Ricky1024
"Our Love"
This is a Love Poem Contest Entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It talks of true love and then an eventual outcome being of course the family created as if a diamond in a rough come to life.
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This was rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
I like this and it works for me. Good luck in the contest.
Doctor Ricky 1024
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"Our Love"
This is a Love Poem Contest Entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It talks of true love and then an eventual outcome being of course the family created as if a diamond in a rough come to life.
...
This was rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
I like this and it works for me. Good luck in the contest.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much for your wonderful and encouraging comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Wendy G
Beautiful poem and very skilfully crafted with the two Nonets combined to make a diamond shape. It is lovely to read of this enduring marriage with love as the corner stone, like a diamond never misplaced.
Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
Suggestion: "our perfect lives begin", without an apostrophe.
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Beautiful poem and very skilfully crafted with the two Nonets combined to make a diamond shape. It is lovely to read of this enduring marriage with love as the corner stone, like a diamond never misplaced.
Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
Suggestion: "our perfect lives begin", without an apostrophe.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much, have corrected my ooops! your comments are very encouraging, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Giftedone.Eric Wallace .
Excellent love poem I was captivated from the start already all the way to the end bravo bravo you had me stuck I loved it perfectly worded to me only thing I want more stay blessed
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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Excellent love poem I was captivated from the start already all the way to the end bravo bravo you had me stuck I loved it perfectly worded to me only thing I want more stay blessed
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Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Thank for your wonderful and encouraging comments and review, very much appreciated****kahpot
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Thank you very much
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You are more than welcome
Comment from lyenochka
A beautiful romance story in your well formed double nonet with rhyme! You tell about commitment and a faithful love that grew over time. Best wishes in the contest!
live's begin. (lives) if you mean the plural. But perhaps you mean "our perfect life's begun?" for life is begun.
our jouneys feat (journey's)
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A beautiful romance story in your well formed double nonet with rhyme! You tell about commitment and a faithful love that grew over time. Best wishes in the contest!
live's begin. (lives) if you mean the plural. But perhaps you mean "our perfect life's begun?" for life is begun.
our jouneys feat (journey's)
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Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much, only two helps, I am proud of myself Ha! Ha!
and thank you for explaining why it really does help, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
