THE CURSE
Viewing comments for Chapter 84 "Damaged Goods"The six book of the Novels of the Breedline
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Comment from royowen
I know how you think these days Shana, your writing has ma remarkable evolutionary step, and I hope and pray that your work gets some broad and progressive viewing, in fact that's my prayer, because people are always looking for hope in their personal, and really in the stories they read, I don't believe for a minute their hope lies in hopelessness, although they can feel that way. Beautifully written Shana, outstanding episode, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
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I know how you think these days Shana, your writing has ma remarkable evolutionary step, and I hope and pray that your work gets some broad and progressive viewing, in fact that's my prayer, because people are always looking for hope in their personal, and really in the stories they read, I don't believe for a minute their hope lies in hopelessness, although they can feel that way. Beautifully written Shana, outstanding episode, blessings Roy
Comment Written 04-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much, Roy :)
I appreciate your prayers. It would be fantastic if my stories could get noticed more. I'm like a needle in the haystack of many independent authors. It is an accomplishment in itself just to write the books. It gives me a sense of purpose if one person says they enjoyed the stories. And as long as I enjoy writing, I will keep it up.
Thanks for all your support my friend.
Always your fan,
Shana :)
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Me too, well done
Comment from AJ McCall
WHEW! I really thought Dr. Medoza was going to play the recording, but like the Shadow said (and I hate to agree with him) he got lucky or... in my words, God answered his prayers. Somewhat, lol. I can't wait to see what happens next or what Joseph ends up doing. Will the next chapter be about Carrie? Oh, and I can't forget about the Breedline who's still facing the Biters! Oh, my gosh, you have so much going on I'M SO EXCITEDDD!
SIX STARS!
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
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WHEW! I really thought Dr. Medoza was going to play the recording, but like the Shadow said (and I hate to agree with him) he got lucky or... in my words, God answered his prayers. Somewhat, lol. I can't wait to see what happens next or what Joseph ends up doing. Will the next chapter be about Carrie? Oh, and I can't forget about the Breedline who's still facing the Biters! Oh, my gosh, you have so much going on I'M SO EXCITEDDD!
SIX STARS!
Comment Written 04-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
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Awww... Thanks, AJ :)
I'm so thrilled you enjoyed this one. I was hoping it had a bit of excitement in it. So glad I finished it. Whew... it seems to be getting harder to write each chapter as I get closer to the end of the book. A lot of drama between so many characters. LOL!
Next week, I will take you back to the Breedline fighting the remaining Biters. More action and funny scenes, especially with Jace.
Thanks again for your support and encouragement. It means a lot to me.
Hugs,
Shana :)
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YAY! And you're welcome! Don't give up Shana! If you ever need to brainstorm an ending for it, I'm right here. :)
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Thank you so much! :)
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You're welcome! ;)
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This Chapter 82 of the Supernatural Science Fiction in continuation speaks about the damaged goods thru a narrative plot, fostered by balanced plot development, dialogues realistic; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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This Chapter 82 of the Supernatural Science Fiction in continuation speaks about the damaged goods thru a narrative plot, fostered by balanced plot development, dialogues realistic; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 04-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Thanks Alcreator :)
It's nice to hear from you. I appreciate the review and kind words.
Sincerely,
Shana :)
Comment from SimianSavant
You did a great job of creating suspense, wondering if he is going to kill the therapist or already killed his girlfriend. The conversation is somewhat mundane and predictable, and while you could opt to spice it up a little, the simplicity aids the reader in moving quickly to see what's coming next. So I think you could go either way. The only thing I would change is to get rid of a couple cliches: * he found himself caught between a rock and a hard place. Either do the time or be forced to go back. His choices were few and far between.*
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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You did a great job of creating suspense, wondering if he is going to kill the therapist or already killed his girlfriend. The conversation is somewhat mundane and predictable, and while you could opt to spice it up a little, the simplicity aids the reader in moving quickly to see what's coming next. So I think you could go either way. The only thing I would change is to get rid of a couple cliches: * he found himself caught between a rock and a hard place. Either do the time or be forced to go back. His choices were few and far between.*
Comment Written 04-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Thanks for the helpful review and generous stars. I will definitely take your advice. I appreciate the feedback.
Sincerely,
Shana :)
Comment from robyn corum
Shana,
Nice work. Great chapter revealing a lot of pain and heartache on the part of this guy. You can tell he's torn between believing everything the shadow is telling him and trying to grow strong enough to kick him out. It's a thin line but you tell it in a believable way. Nice job!
A small note:
--> He didn't like the way things ended last night, realizing he'd broke(n) her heart.
Thanks!
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Shana,
Nice work. Great chapter revealing a lot of pain and heartache on the part of this guy. You can tell he's torn between believing everything the shadow is telling him and trying to grow strong enough to kick him out. It's a thin line but you tell it in a believable way. Nice job!
A small note:
--> He didn't like the way things ended last night, realizing he'd broke(n) her heart.
Thanks!
Comment Written 04-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Thanks Robyn :)
I appreciate your kind words and helpful feedback. I was on the fence with this chapter, deciding if I wanted Joseph to reveal the Shadow to Dr. Mendoza. I was hoping the chapter would give the reader some suspense and also the heartache Joseph carries.
Thanks again!
Sincerely,
Shana :)
