Surprising Spring!
Miracles Happen in Life.27 total reviews
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is an excellent piece of flash fiction, RPSaxena. You've used good imagery and action verbs. And the ending was definitely a surprise. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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This is an excellent piece of flash fiction, RPSaxena. You've used good imagery and action verbs. And the ending was definitely a surprise. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Hello Judy Lawless,
Thank you very much for reading, reviewing, so thoughtful and morale boosting comments backed by Good Luck in the contest.
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from amada
I enjoyed reading this fast action non fiction short story. I found it very believable, my kids, when small always scared me dumping on the pool and disappearing underneath...I like your use of strong verbs, and the picture enhances sp we;; the semto,emt pf your story.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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I enjoyed reading this fast action non fiction short story. I found it very believable, my kids, when small always scared me dumping on the pool and disappearing underneath...I like your use of strong verbs, and the picture enhances sp we;; the semto,emt pf your story.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Hello Amada,
Thank you very much for reading, reviewing, so thoughtful and morale boosting comments.
With best wishes,
~RP
Comment from amahra
The first paragraph spooked me. I had to scroll to the top to see if it were non-fiction. When I saw it was fiction, I relaxed and read the whole thing. But then, the kid didn't drown anyway, so all is well. Thank you for a convincing little story. Great entry.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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The first paragraph spooked me. I had to scroll to the top to see if it were non-fiction. When I saw it was fiction, I relaxed and read the whole thing. But then, the kid didn't drown anyway, so all is well. Thank you for a convincing little story. Great entry.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Hello Amahra,
Thank you very much for reading, reviewing, so thoughtful and morale boosting comments backed by Good Luck in the contest.
With best wishes,
~RP
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Good picture to go with a surprising story. The boy disappearing would have sent many people looking for him, but he used a surprising talent to fool everyone. Well done.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Good picture to go with a surprising story. The boy disappearing would have sent many people looking for him, but he used a surprising talent to fool everyone. Well done.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Hello Carol Hillebrenner,
Thank you very much for reading, reviewing, so thoughtful and morale boosting comments.
With best wishes,
~RP
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
This is such a great story, that I almost thought it was true. Only by glancing at the classification at the top, did I realize that it's actually "flash fiction"! Very convincing.
Before that, I was considering writing in this review box, how remarkable it was that you witnessed such a phenomenon; and I was debating in my mind whether or not you would be offended, if I were to ask: is this really true? Apparently, not! It is, in this case, more of a compliment.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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This is such a great story, that I almost thought it was true. Only by glancing at the classification at the top, did I realize that it's actually "flash fiction"! Very convincing.
Before that, I was considering writing in this review box, how remarkable it was that you witnessed such a phenomenon; and I was debating in my mind whether or not you would be offended, if I were to ask: is this really true? Apparently, not! It is, in this case, more of a compliment.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Hello Mary Kay Bonfante,
Thank you very much for reading, reviewing, so thoughtful and morale boosting comments.
With best wishes,
~RP
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You're very welcome, RP. It's all well deserved. God bless you. - Mary Kay
Comment from Gloria ....
This is quite the flash fiction. I can imagine people frantically waiting on shore for the boy to emerge.
All the required parts of a fiction story are in place, and a good twist at the end, as most of us can't hold our breath that long.
Wishing you great luck with the Committee. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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This is quite the flash fiction. I can imagine people frantically waiting on shore for the boy to emerge.
All the required parts of a fiction story are in place, and a good twist at the end, as most of us can't hold our breath that long.
Wishing you great luck with the Committee. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 06-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Hello Gloria,
Thank you very much for reading, reviewing, so thoughtful and morale boosting comments backed by Good Luck in the contest.
With best wishes,
~RP
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
This kind of experience, when diving and swimming, end up as a disaster. Many drown when they lose their footage and get swept away in the waves. Flash fiction always brings a twist toward the end.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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This kind of experience, when diving and swimming, end up as a disaster. Many drown when they lose their footage and get swept away in the waves. Flash fiction always brings a twist toward the end.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Hello Rosemary Everson1,
Thank you very much for reading, reviewing, so thoughtful and morale boosting comments.
With best wishes,
~RP
Comment from Raul1
It is definitely a miracle the boy survived and in circumstances it is rare. I have enjoyed your story. It has a happy ending. Excellent work! No mistakes. Thank you for sharing! Good luck!
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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It is definitely a miracle the boy survived and in circumstances it is rare. I have enjoyed your story. It has a happy ending. Excellent work! No mistakes. Thank you for sharing! Good luck!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Hello Raul1,
Thank you very much for reading, reviewing, so thoughtful and morale boosting comments backed by Good Luck in the contest.
With best wishes,
~RP
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You're welcome!
Comment from Cass Carlton
The artful scallywag! I'll bet it wasn't the first time he'd done it either. Still, he was clever enough to not put himself at risk and who knows, that piece of information might stick in someone's mind and save their life one day.cheers Cass
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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The artful scallywag! I'll bet it wasn't the first time he'd done it either. Still, he was clever enough to not put himself at risk and who knows, that piece of information might stick in someone's mind and save their life one day.cheers Cass
Comment Written 06-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Hello Cass,
Thank you very much for reading, reviewing, so thoughtful and morale boosting comments.
With best wishes,
~RP
Comment from Ric Myworld
I do believe in miracles. And a boy holding his breath for three minutes is a true miracle far as I'm concerned. LOL. But I'm sure all were glad to see him resurface. Thanks for sharing another fine post. I wish I had a six.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2021
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I do believe in miracles. And a boy holding his breath for three minutes is a true miracle far as I'm concerned. LOL. But I'm sure all were glad to see him resurface. Thanks for sharing another fine post. I wish I had a six.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2021
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Hello Ric,
Thank you very much for reading, reviewing, and uplifting comments backed by VIRTUAL SIX!
I could not see you here this week. Hope all's well there.
With best wishes,
~ RP
