Cool Creek Creaks
5/6/5 Modern Autumn Haiku18 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A bridge carrying a horse and cart during the Autumnal season here maybe? You brought the scene to life with your ambient words and fine presentation, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
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A bridge carrying a horse and cart during the Autumnal season here maybe? You brought the scene to life with your ambient words and fine presentation, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much, Dolly. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mark D. R.
Gypsy,
As you know I like the freedom to use alliteration in my contemporary Haiku. Your verse sprinkles this idea throughout. Very good post for your Haiku club event entry.
Not really enamored with a 'creaking' creek, but of course, you went for the alliteration! The bridge might creak, but the creek I am not sure it does; it bubbles and ripples, or gurgles and guggles.
Mark
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Gypsy,
As you know I like the freedom to use alliteration in my contemporary Haiku. Your verse sprinkles this idea throughout. Very good post for your Haiku club event entry.
Not really enamored with a 'creaking' creek, but of course, you went for the alliteration! The bridge might creak, but the creek I am not sure it does; it bubbles and ripples, or gurgles and guggles.
Mark
Comment Written 04-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much for your feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Debra White
Hello Gypsy :)
The imagery in your modern haiku is lovely and stirs the senses. I can hear everything you mention and the sight is easily brought to mind (no artwork required here - albeit lovely!)
Beautifully done!
Best wishes as always, Debra :)
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Hello Gypsy :)
The imagery in your modern haiku is lovely and stirs the senses. I can hear everything you mention and the sight is easily brought to mind (no artwork required here - albeit lovely!)
Beautifully done!
Best wishes as always, Debra :)
Comment Written 04-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Debra, thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy 😊
Comment from PoemsOfDD
This is a good modern haiku with the theme of autumn.
The alliteration works well to give this piece extra visual.
Love the colours in the picture - very vivid, almost electrifying.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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This is a good modern haiku with the theme of autumn.
The alliteration works well to give this piece extra visual.
Love the colours in the picture - very vivid, almost electrifying.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from jenintorre
I am not familiar with this type of modern Haiku format but I really enjoyed reading this poem. The artwork and presentation are superb. Best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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I am not familiar with this type of modern Haiku format but I really enjoyed reading this poem. The artwork and presentation are superb. Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
I always wonder how you come up with amazing Haiku poems covering so many topics. Brilliant. I love this one too. In few words, you create a wonderful imagery. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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I always wonder how you come up with amazing Haiku poems covering so many topics. Brilliant. I love this one too. In few words, you create a wonderful imagery. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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Comment from Pam (respa)
-A very nice image
and presentation, Gypsy.
-You have written a good
haiku using the modern version.
-Effective seasonal and nature imagery
with the creek, bridge, and woods.
-I like the satori line, too.
-Well done.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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-A very nice image
and presentation, Gypsy.
-You have written a good
haiku using the modern version.
-Effective seasonal and nature imagery
with the creek, bridge, and woods.
-I like the satori line, too.
-Well done.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
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You are welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from Wendy G
Beautiful and thoughtful presentation. The alliteration is very effective, also the play on creek/creaks. We can hear the crunch of the leaves under the horses' hooves, so you have engaged both sound and sight. A lovely Haiku.
Wendy
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Beautiful and thoughtful presentation. The alliteration is very effective, also the play on creek/creaks. We can hear the crunch of the leaves under the horses' hooves, so you have engaged both sound and sight. A lovely Haiku.
Wendy
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from juliaSjames
Excellent haiku. Its word strokes paint a vivid picture of horse riders in the autumn woods. Bold use of poetic licence in "creek creaks". Nicely done.
Be safe
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Excellent haiku. Its word strokes paint a vivid picture of horse riders in the autumn woods. Bold use of poetic licence in "creek creaks". Nicely done.
Be safe
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I love alliterative poetry and, modern Haiku is full of it, I suppose. I love the double words of the creek and creak put in succession in the same line of the poem. Each said the same, but with different meanings, of course.
And every line is loaded with similes and alliteration. That works for me!
I also love the picture choice!
Thank you for posting, and have a good evening,
Jesse
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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I love alliterative poetry and, modern Haiku is full of it, I suppose. I love the double words of the creek and creak put in succession in the same line of the poem. Each said the same, but with different meanings, of course.
And every line is loaded with similes and alliteration. That works for me!
I also love the picture choice!
Thank you for posting, and have a good evening,
Jesse
Comment Written 02-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Jesse.
Extra Gypsy hugs :)
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You're welcome, Gypsy.
Thanks for the extra hugs!
Take care,
Jesse
