Flight of the leaf
Revere the leaf; maker of soil; giver of life39 total reviews
Comment from Terry Broxson
Excellent! It is interesting how you observe the dying leaves giving them almost human characterlike qualities as they "dive" toward their death. Great imagery. The only thing I can think you might consider, because you said you said you wanted to offer hope through your work, is that the tree does not dye, only the leaves, and in doing so, provide the soil and food for the tree to continue to live and start the next cycle. Just a thought, great job.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2021
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Excellent! It is interesting how you observe the dying leaves giving them almost human characterlike qualities as they "dive" toward their death. Great imagery. The only thing I can think you might consider, because you said you said you wanted to offer hope through your work, is that the tree does not dye, only the leaves, and in doing so, provide the soil and food for the tree to continue to live and start the next cycle. Just a thought, great job.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2021
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Thanks bro much Terry, another person has commented on the same thing. My intension was for the leaves to be the things dying. Maybe my wording could be clearer.. thank you for your kind review
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Thanks bro much Terry, another person has commented on the same thing. My intension was for the leaves to be the things dying. Maybe my wording could be clearer.. thank you for your kind review
Comment from Carlos' girl
Most compelling writing, beginning with the title and ending with the author's notes. I too love autumn, as did my mother. In fact, her.wedding was on.October 30th. No June wedding for her. The leaves and their counterparts the trees are a part of the ecosystem. Beautiful
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2021
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Most compelling writing, beginning with the title and ending with the author's notes. I too love autumn, as did my mother. In fact, her.wedding was on.October 30th. No June wedding for her. The leaves and their counterparts the trees are a part of the ecosystem. Beautiful
Comment Written 09-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2021
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A big warm thank you for your kind review
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Xoxo
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your poem is very moving, expressive, and vividly descriptive of the glory of autumn fulfilling its God-given purpose as we look on in awe. A lovely blend of literal and figurative language
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Your poem is very moving, expressive, and vividly descriptive of the glory of autumn fulfilling its God-given purpose as we look on in awe. A lovely blend of literal and figurative language
Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Very deep thoughtful review - thank you
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Very deep thoughtful review - thank you
Comment from Janet Foor
I too love October and the autumn season.
You paint with vivid imagery this beautiful and yet somber time of year as the leaves wither and die but...... we know the rest of the story and that the rebirth that is coming.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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I too love October and the autumn season.
You paint with vivid imagery this beautiful and yet somber time of year as the leaves wither and die but...... we know the rest of the story and that the rebirth that is coming.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much Janet for your kind review
Comment from papa55mike
We must never forget that all things work together in life and death. What a wonderfully written poem. I wish I had a six for you. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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We must never forget that all things work together in life and death. What a wonderfully written poem. I wish I had a six for you. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much Mike.
Bless you too
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Thank you very much Mike.
Bless you too
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Thank you very much Mike.
Bless you too
Comment from SMASH52
Such depths and varieties of the human experience are expressed in this autumnal project. The personification is a work of art. The poem sings through the alliterations, e.g., "...mingling with the morning mists." Flight of the Leaf will make you fall in love with fall.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Such depths and varieties of the human experience are expressed in this autumnal project. The personification is a work of art. The poem sings through the alliterations, e.g., "...mingling with the morning mists." Flight of the Leaf will make you fall in love with fall.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Thank you so much!
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Thank you so much!
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You're welcome.
Comment from Wendy G
I like the thought of the role of leaves in the environment. They become "tomorrow's soil", and I like the fact that though dying they have been painted in beautiful colours by death - with grace and dignity (choosing their own manner of descending on their first and final flight) - which in the cycle brings renewal of life and growth. Carefully and thoughtfully written with an excellent engagement of senses and emotions.
Typo? "Wispy"
Beautiful writing.
Wendy
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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I like the thought of the role of leaves in the environment. They become "tomorrow's soil", and I like the fact that though dying they have been painted in beautiful colours by death - with grace and dignity (choosing their own manner of descending on their first and final flight) - which in the cycle brings renewal of life and growth. Carefully and thoughtfully written with an excellent engagement of senses and emotions.
Typo? "Wispy"
Beautiful writing.
Wendy
Comment Written 07-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Yes you're right - edit make thanks
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Yes you're right - edit make thanks
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your autumn poem is beautifully presented in words and image. Your lines read smoothly and create great imagery. I could see everything as I read. I agree that autumn is my favorite season with its colors, smells, activities, and all. You are right about how important the leaves are in the ecosystem. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Your autumn poem is beautifully presented in words and image. Your lines read smoothly and create great imagery. I could see everything as I read. I agree that autumn is my favorite season with its colors, smells, activities, and all. You are right about how important the leaves are in the ecosystem. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 07-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Big thanks Jan. Yep the humble leaf plays an important part in the ecosystem
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Big thanks Jan. Yep the humble leaf plays an important part in the ecosystem
Comment from PoemsOfDD
I really enjoyed reading this poem on autumn and the beautiful
changes that it brings - life fallen, colour remains, ground nourished.
Just a couple of tiny edits, as shown in ( ).
Do you strive for distance, an adventurous type, or dive like a dart and go out in style(?)
Thank you for sharing this descriptive read.
And as you wither and evaporate, the golden sun warming your face, a martyr you disintegrate, a death no less than full of grace(.)
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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I really enjoyed reading this poem on autumn and the beautiful
changes that it brings - life fallen, colour remains, ground nourished.
Just a couple of tiny edits, as shown in ( ).
Do you strive for distance, an adventurous type, or dive like a dart and go out in style(?)
Thank you for sharing this descriptive read.
And as you wither and evaporate, the golden sun warming your face, a martyr you disintegrate, a death no less than full of grace(.)
Comment Written 07-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Thanks for pointing the punctuation mistakes out. I have edited
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My pleasure :-)
Comment from tfawcus
A most evocative poem and one that puts death in its proper context, as part of a larger cycle of continuing life. I was particularly taken with your phrase, "thick with tomorrow's soil".
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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A most evocative poem and one that puts death in its proper context, as part of a larger cycle of continuing life. I was particularly taken with your phrase, "thick with tomorrow's soil".
Comment Written 07-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Thank you for your kind review
