Plodding.
Senryu18 total reviews
Comment from oliver818
There's a lot going on in the background of this poem, I
enjoyed reading it. The unspoken speaks for itself here as people go on, unloving, into the future. Thanks for sharing this and have a great day
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There's a lot going on in the background of this poem, I
enjoyed reading it. The unspoken speaks for itself here as people go on, unloving, into the future. Thanks for sharing this and have a great day
Comment Written 02-Oct-2021
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Thank you for stopping by.
Comment from pookietoo
A very very nice senru poem. The poem described the photo so very well. Keep up the great work writing your poems. Enjoy the little things that matter most.
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A very very nice senru poem. The poem described the photo so very well. Keep up the great work writing your poems. Enjoy the little things that matter most.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much
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Welcome
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
This is a truth that many deny but is nonetheless so.
For those who do, I feel great admiration for their sacrifice. It does follow... the tenet "What God has joined together, let no man put asunder."
Ralf
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This is a truth that many deny but is nonetheless so.
For those who do, I feel great admiration for their sacrifice. It does follow... the tenet "What God has joined together, let no man put asunder."
Ralf
Comment Written 01-Oct-2021
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True .The present generation hdo not have much patience too.Thank you very much for stopping by
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Devastating. You nailed the nature of a dead marriage on life-support. Heads up--line two is only five/six syllables--is that acceptable in the senryu contest?
https://www.howmanysyllables.com/words/traipsed (ONE)
https://www.syllablecount.com/syllables/traipsed (TWO)
https://www.poetrysoup.com/syllables/traipsed (TWO)
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Devastating. You nailed the nature of a dead marriage on life-support. Heads up--line two is only five/six syllables--is that acceptable in the senryu contest?
https://www.howmanysyllables.com/words/traipsed (ONE)
https://www.syllablecount.com/syllables/traipsed (TWO)
https://www.poetrysoup.com/syllables/traipsed (TWO)
Comment Written 30-Sep-2021
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Yes .They said it can be lesser syllables. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Anne Johnston
"Without holding hands
they traipsed their weary way
silence in between"
Your word accurately describe the picture. How awful it must be to stay in a marriage where there is no love or affection.
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"Without holding hands
they traipsed their weary way
silence in between"
Your word accurately describe the picture. How awful it must be to stay in a marriage where there is no love or affection.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much.
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You are welcome
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Plodding.
by Sanku
Thank you for participating in our Haiku Club event. I love your senryu. Good syllables count and connection between lines. Nice alliteration of 'S'. Well done!
Without holding hands
they traipsed their weary way (--) add a dash
silence in between
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Plodding.
by Sanku
Thank you for participating in our Haiku Club event. I love your senryu. Good syllables count and connection between lines. Nice alliteration of 'S'. Well done!
Without holding hands
they traipsed their weary way (--) add a dash
silence in between
Comment Written 30-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from lyenochka
So very true and often it's because of social standards deeply ingrained since childhood. I remember when my oldest daughter first started university, the half of her dormmates had their parents divorce - as if they waited until the last child left home. It's sad. But perhaps it's sad, too, if the couple just wearily plod along without love. Great observation in your poem!
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So very true and often it's because of social standards deeply ingrained since childhood. I remember when my oldest daughter first started university, the half of her dormmates had their parents divorce - as if they waited until the last child left home. It's sad. But perhaps it's sad, too, if the couple just wearily plod along without love. Great observation in your poem!
Comment Written 30-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this club entry with us. I have known many couples who stayed together for the children, but I've wondered about that because if you're not happy the children know that. They deserve to have happy parents role modeled for them.
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Thank you for sharing this club entry with us. I have known many couples who stayed together for the children, but I've wondered about that because if you're not happy the children know that. They deserve to have happy parents role modeled for them.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Paul McFarland
You have painted a very clear picture here.
Some couples who have tied the knot,
Their wedding vows, they have forgot.
They stay together for the kids,
And put their out there for bids.
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You have painted a very clear picture here.
Some couples who have tied the knot,
Their wedding vows, they have forgot.
They stay together for the kids,
And put their out there for bids.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2021
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very true. Thanks for stopping by.
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I messed up the last line. It should be "And put their love out there for bids."
Comment from Mary Shifman
Yes, this is a sad truth. Many times I've been in a restaurant and watched people and noticed that some eat their entire meals without a word passing between them. Sometimes they're on their cell phones and other times simply sitting there. It fills me with great sadness for them. Well done.
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Yes, this is a sad truth. Many times I've been in a restaurant and watched people and noticed that some eat their entire meals without a word passing between them. Sometimes they're on their cell phones and other times simply sitting there. It fills me with great sadness for them. Well done.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2021
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You are very welcome.
