One breath
How would the world look if love led the way5 total reviews
Comment from Ric Myworld
In a world where people protest and fight about their few real differences, I do hope that someday, they will learn to celebrate their many similarities and love one another as the unit they are meant to be. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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In a world where people protest and fight about their few real differences, I do hope that someday, they will learn to celebrate their many similarities and love one another as the unit they are meant to be. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Thank you for reading. So true that our differences are slight at best, we're all brothers and sisters people
Comment from Henry White II
Awesome. I love the beauty of being present, being in the moment. "One body One breath" clearly speaks being in the moment, enjoying the present, being at peace with who you are and enjoying what is around you. It was just a beautiful way that you were able to eloquently simplify concepts that whole philosophies and some religions are built on. Good work. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2021
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Awesome. I love the beauty of being present, being in the moment. "One body One breath" clearly speaks being in the moment, enjoying the present, being at peace with who you are and enjoying what is around you. It was just a beautiful way that you were able to eloquently simplify concepts that whole philosophies and some religions are built on. Good work. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2021
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Thank you for your kind review.
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from pookietoo
Please change your poem.. I asked everyone to put some rhyming in this poem, yours does not have any. Enjoy life.. Smile and have a great day. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2021
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Please change your poem.. I asked everyone to put some rhyming in this poem, yours does not have any. Enjoy life.. Smile and have a great day. Best wishes.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2021
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Oh darn I missed that in the instruction, I'll try to amend
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Ok
Comment from PoemsOfDD
This is a good entry for the - Self improvement free verse poem contest.
I like that it incorporates positivity but at the same time it includes a prayer for all.
...I wish these peaceful prayers not only for myself but for us all
- for we are all one body
all one breath .... beautifully expressed.
Thank you for sharing and best of luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2021
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This is a good entry for the - Self improvement free verse poem contest.
I like that it incorporates positivity but at the same time it includes a prayer for all.
...I wish these peaceful prayers not only for myself but for us all
- for we are all one body
all one breath .... beautifully expressed.
Thank you for sharing and best of luck in the competition.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2021
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Thank you
Comment from lancellot
This very good and well within the rules of the contest. I would ask Tom to change the post from prose to poetry. I think that may help. I wouldn't want the contest committee to think this is more prose (as it is listed) than poetry. But it's up to you.
Good luck.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2021
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This very good and well within the rules of the contest. I would ask Tom to change the post from prose to poetry. I think that may help. I wouldn't want the contest committee to think this is more prose (as it is listed) than poetry. But it's up to you.
Good luck.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2021
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The guidelines were to write a free verse poem l believe. I think my poem fits that preface. Thanks for your review
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The guidelines were to write a free verse poem l believe. I think my poem fits that preface. Thanks for your review
