Gold Leaf
My favorite parts of this season11 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
And a very clever last line Deb as the golden autumn leaf falls to the ground. The black and yellow presentation works well. Good luck with the contest. Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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And a very clever last line Deb as the golden autumn leaf falls to the ground. The black and yellow presentation works well. Good luck with the contest. Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 05-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Thank you, Valda!
Blessings,
Deb
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and
presentation, Debora.
-You have written a good
haiku with effective
nature and seasonal imagery.
-The scene is peaceful with
the leaf and "peaceful breeze."
-A good satori line, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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-Nice image and
presentation, Debora.
-You have written a good
haiku with effective
nature and seasonal imagery.
-The scene is peaceful with
the leaf and "peaceful breeze."
-A good satori line, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Thank you so much. I enjoyed writing the poem but that image... Oi! It took longer to edit other leaves out of the photo than to come up iwth the entire haiku! lol
Thanks again and blessings,
Deb
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You are welcome. I know what you mean about pictures taking time. Was it your own photo? If not, you couldn't find a gold leaf by itself?
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I looked for a single gold leaf but have to admit I got impatient. S, instead of look a little longer, I took 25 minutes removing leaves and replacing sky and tree trunk. lol. Probably would have been quicker to keep looking! HA!
Thanks -
Deb
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You are welcome, Deb, and probably right, too!
Comment from Wendy G
Very clever last line! A stunning photo in its simplicity, and good choice of font colour. Your Haiku is very lovely, one can almost feel the chill in the air. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Very clever last line! A stunning photo in its simplicity, and good choice of font colour. Your Haiku is very lovely, one can almost feel the chill in the air. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Thank you so much. I enjoyed writing the poem but that image... Oi! It took longer to edit other leaves out of the photo than to come up iwth the entire haiku! lol
Thanks again and blessings,
Deb
Comment from roof35
This is an excellent entry for the Haiku Poetry Contest. Your illustration is, of course, perfect and it sets the stage beautifully for your words. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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This is an excellent entry for the Haiku Poetry Contest. Your illustration is, of course, perfect and it sets the stage beautifully for your words. Nicely done.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Thank you so much and please forgive me for my late response. I enjoyed writing the poem but that image... Oi! It took longer to edit other leaves out of the photo than to come up with the entire haiku! lol
Thanks again and blessings,
Deb
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is an excellent haiku, Debora. You have the perfect number of syllables and the imagery that your words evoke. I like the image of the breeze causing the leaf to wave. Nicely, done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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This is an excellent haiku, Debora. You have the perfect number of syllables and the imagery that your words evoke. I like the image of the breeze causing the leaf to wave. Nicely, done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Thank you, Mary!
Much appreciated.
Blessings,
Deb
Comment from Anne Johnston
"Cooling, peaceful breeze
Gently caresses gold leaf
waving to the fall"
Great entry for this contest. Your last line is effective, can be taken a couple of ways - waving until it falls, or - waving goodbye to the fall.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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"Cooling, peaceful breeze
Gently caresses gold leaf
waving to the fall"
Great entry for this contest. Your last line is effective, can be taken a couple of ways - waving until it falls, or - waving goodbye to the fall.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Thank you, Anne. Please forgive my late response.
I'm glad you found the double meaning of the last line effective. :)
Blessings,
Deb
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You are welcome, Debora
Comment from lyenochka
I like the double meaning of the last line, "waving to the fall" of autumn and of the fall of the golden leaf. And your title also brings to mind the super thin sheets of gold which are also called "gold leaf." Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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I like the double meaning of the last line, "waving to the fall" of autumn and of the fall of the golden leaf. And your title also brings to mind the super thin sheets of gold which are also called "gold leaf." Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 02-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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Thank you, Helen. :) I love both kinds of gold leaf.
Blessings,
Deb
Comment from Dr. Nad
Very nicely done concerning something I dread seeing. That is a beautiful picture, but personally, I like the color green best. LOL The one wonderful thing, about fall, is football.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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Very nicely done concerning something I dread seeing. That is a beautiful picture, but personally, I like the color green best. LOL The one wonderful thing, about fall, is football.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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OH, come on now! Fall is the bomb! But... Spring is the bomb, too. They're just both too short here.
And football... YES! Texas just beat TCU, to my delight and my hubby's disappointment. But he'll be okay. It looks like TX Tech is going to come out on top n their skuffle. :)
Blessings!
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Agreed. It is really winter I don't like. I have lived in Georgia, USA for the past 16 years and the winters are not tttttooooo bad here. LOL
Comment from AJ McCall
Aww, I love how you used the wind in this poem Deb!! And the leaf... gorgeous picture! But when I first saw the title I was thinking gold leaf the gold material, lol. Lovely poem; I wish I had six for it. Hope you win!!!
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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Aww, I love how you used the wind in this poem Deb!! And the leaf... gorgeous picture! But when I first saw the title I was thinking gold leaf the gold material, lol. Lovely poem; I wish I had six for it. Hope you win!!!
Comment Written 02-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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Thanks AJ. :) I hoped people would think of both meanings of the title. Nice to know it worked. :)
And thank you for the virtual 6. :)
Blessings!
Oh -- the editor (Kelley) loved all of your stories but LOVED Etched in Stone. When I told her you were in high school, she wondered which of your parents you'd lost. lol. You captured that so well!
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Well, first off, Deb, you're welcome!! Second, THAT"S AWESOME!! Etched in Stone is my favorite out of all the stories, I'm glad it came through to her so well. And I hoped you reminded her that I have both my parents, LOL. Continue to keep me updated please!
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Of course, i will! YOu started all of this with that one story. We have Kelley and another reader of horror who are making selections. I think its fair if they make a 1 stack, a 2 stack and a no stack k. If we have enough '1 stories', the 2 stack will be discarded. If not, they'll choose from the 2 stack. Does that make any sense? I hope so! Those are the directions I gave them! lol
And, if you'd like to read, too, feel free to throw your hat in that ring. :)
Later, kiddo,
Deb
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:) Thanks, Deb, and yeah, that sounds good and makes sense, lol. Okay, talk later! :)
Comment from Zhen Xuan Liu
This is great haiku! I love the simplicity and sophistication of this poem. It illustrate the beauty of fall in 3 simple lines. Imagery is outstanding! Keep up the amazing work!
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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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This is great haiku! I love the simplicity and sophistication of this poem. It illustrate the beauty of fall in 3 simple lines. Imagery is outstanding! Keep up the amazing work!
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Comment Written 02-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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Thank you, Zhen! I appreciate your kind and encouraging words. :)
Blessings to you and yours,
Deb
