The Round-up Cafe
1,200 words. Everyone knows a place like this.12 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Thanks a beautiful story, PapaMike! If only those in such desperate need can always be directed to loving, generous and faithful people like at the Round-up Cafe.
I really liked " jeans so tight you can see her future. " That really made me chuckle!
Suggestion: It seems they are addressing Dave who has Steph's lipstick on his cheek:
"Well, Steph, better get that lipstick off of your cheek, (Dave not 'Steph')
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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Thanks a beautiful story, PapaMike! If only those in such desperate need can always be directed to loving, generous and faithful people like at the Round-up Cafe.
I really liked " jeans so tight you can see her future. " That really made me chuckle!
Suggestion: It seems they are addressing Dave who has Steph's lipstick on his cheek:
"Well, Steph, better get that lipstick off of your cheek, (Dave not 'Steph')
Comment Written 09-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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Hello, my friend, Thank you for your kind words and help with this story!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from BethShelby
It would be lovely if this story wasn't fiction. I thought it was real at first the way you were describing these people. I can't imagine anyone taking a robbery so calmly or giving momey so freely and beautiful girls in their twenties okey with working in their parents restaurant and praying or the patrions but it certainly would be a dream come true. Now those town names are unique but I can believe that. In Ooltewah, near Chattanooga we have a very expensive restaurant called the Local Goat and it doesn't have goat on the menu. I enjoyed your story.
Beth
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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It would be lovely if this story wasn't fiction. I thought it was real at first the way you were describing these people. I can't imagine anyone taking a robbery so calmly or giving momey so freely and beautiful girls in their twenties okey with working in their parents restaurant and praying or the patrions but it certainly would be a dream come true. Now those town names are unique but I can believe that. In Ooltewah, near Chattanooga we have a very expensive restaurant called the Local Goat and it doesn't have goat on the menu. I enjoyed your story.
Beth
Comment Written 06-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Thanks again!
Comment from BethShelby
It would be lovely if this story wasn't fiction. I thought it was real at first the way you were describing these people. I can't imagine anyone taking a robbery so calmly or giving momey so freely and beautiful girls in their twenties okey with working in their parents restaurant and praying or the patrions but it certainly would be a dream come true. Now those town names are unique but I can believe that. In Ooltewah, near Chattanooga we have a very expensive restaurant called the Local Goat and it doesn't have goat on the menu. I enjoyed your story.
Beth
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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It would be lovely if this story wasn't fiction. I thought it was real at first the way you were describing these people. I can't imagine anyone taking a robbery so calmly or giving momey so freely and beautiful girls in their twenties okey with working in their parents restaurant and praying or the patrions but it certainly would be a dream come true. Now those town names are unique but I can believe that. In Ooltewah, near Chattanooga we have a very expensive restaurant called the Local Goat and it doesn't have goat on the menu. I enjoyed your story.
Beth
Comment Written 06-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Hi, beth. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is a wonderful family story, Mike. It's nice to read these messages of random acts of kindness, especially in these days of division. Well done.
A few little fixes: "Stephan cries out, "Country fried steak, slathered in the window." - I think you mean, Stephan cries out from the window, "Country fried steak, slathered."
"Steph comes around the corner with (an) order and yells..."
"Steph reaches (into) her pocket and says..."
"I know who brought (you) here today."
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2021
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This is a wonderful family story, Mike. It's nice to read these messages of random acts of kindness, especially in these days of division. Well done.
A few little fixes: "Stephan cries out, "Country fried steak, slathered in the window." - I think you mean, Stephan cries out from the window, "Country fried steak, slathered."
"Steph comes around the corner with (an) order and yells..."
"Steph reaches (into) her pocket and says..."
"I know who brought (you) here today."
Comment Written 06-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2021
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Hi, Judy. Thank you for your kind words and help with this story!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from estory
I think you painted a wonderful scene here that illustrates how events can change if we answer tension with love. I thought you did a great job characterizing everyone in this, waitress, who disarms the would be robber, and the robber himself, a picture of desperation who breaks down when his desperation is answered by the kindness of the patrons and the waitress. Nice dialogue, real emotional estory
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2021
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I think you painted a wonderful scene here that illustrates how events can change if we answer tension with love. I thought you did a great job characterizing everyone in this, waitress, who disarms the would be robber, and the robber himself, a picture of desperation who breaks down when his desperation is answered by the kindness of the patrons and the waitress. Nice dialogue, real emotional estory
Comment Written 06-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2021
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Hello, my friend. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from nancy_e_davis
This is a wonderful story, Mike. You always have something uplifting for us to read and think on. What a wonderful world it would be if there were more people like the family at the Round-up Café. Well dine my friend. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2021
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This is a wonderful story, Mike. You always have something uplifting for us to read and think on. What a wonderful world it would be if there were more people like the family at the Round-up Café. Well dine my friend. Nancy:)
Comment Written 06-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2021
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Hi, Nancy. Thank you for your kind words! I have chapter 7 written and need to read for it.
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Ric Myworld
What a great little feel good story. And it's right: just a little kindness goes a long way. Where are those darn sixes when I need one most. Thanks for sharing another fine story.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2021
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What a great little feel good story. And it's right: just a little kindness goes a long way. Where are those darn sixes when I need one most. Thanks for sharing another fine story.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2021
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Hi, Ric. Thank you for your kind words and the thought of a 6!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from country ranch writer
verynicely put together it was nice ofthe cafe to kend a hand andpitch into helpthe man and his girls. everyone gets down on their kucck and deserves a second chance.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2021
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verynicely put together it was nice ofthe cafe to kend a hand andpitch into helpthe man and his girls. everyone gets down on their kucck and deserves a second chance.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2021
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Hello, my friend. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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hugs for my desr friends.🐕🐾🐕🐾
Comment from Jay Squires
Hey, Mike, it's so good to read your warm, down-home stories again. This is among your best. You painted the characters with such individual colors, I swear I could walk into the Round Up and pick them out by description. Add the authentic drama at the ending gave your story a very tender touch. You keep writing them, I'll keep reading them.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2021
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Hey, Mike, it's so good to read your warm, down-home stories again. This is among your best. You painted the characters with such individual colors, I swear I could walk into the Round Up and pick them out by description. Add the authentic drama at the ending gave your story a very tender touch. You keep writing them, I'll keep reading them.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2021
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Hi, Jay. Wow, what a great review. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Hitcher
Well that would be a sight to behold if one were ever lucky enough to see something like that. Your story definitely held my attention with relative ease and entertained me at the same time, Yeah I enjoyed it : ))
question for ya, what are biscuits and gravy, I live in NZ, never heard of anyone being served them : ))
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2021
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Well that would be a sight to behold if one were ever lucky enough to see something like that. Your story definitely held my attention with relative ease and entertained me at the same time, Yeah I enjoyed it : ))
question for ya, what are biscuits and gravy, I live in NZ, never heard of anyone being served them : ))
Comment Written 05-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2021
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Hello, my friend. Biscuits and gravy are a Southern delight for breakfast. You crumble a biscuit on a plate, break up a piece of breakfast sausage, then scatter the pieces on the biscuit and pour white pepper gravy over it all. My wife's favorite. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
