After Getting Fired
5/6/4 Senryu for the Haiku Club Event19 total reviews
Comment from Sherry Asbury
I am blessed to have never been fired but this is a great senryu! My glass has, though, often been filled with empty sky and for me, that is when I turn to the Lord and ask Him to fill it with His wondrous love.
we all have our ways...
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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I am blessed to have never been fired but this is a great senryu! My glass has, though, often been filled with empty sky and for me, that is when I turn to the Lord and ask Him to fill it with His wondrous love.
we all have our ways...
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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Comment from Paul McFarland
Again, a short one that grabs my attention. The last line did it. Empty Sky ought to be the name of a wine. There's a winery just up the road from me. I think I'll run that by them.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Again, a short one that grabs my attention. The last line did it. Empty Sky ought to be the name of a wine. There's a winery just up the road from me. I think I'll run that by them.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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Comment from Gert sherwood
5/6/4 Senryu for the Haiku Club Event
After Getting Fired
Senryu I found no joy drinking air from an empty wine glass
after finding I'm not wanted.
Gert
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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5/6/4 Senryu for the Haiku Club Event
After Getting Fired
Senryu I found no joy drinking air from an empty wine glass
after finding I'm not wanted.
Gert
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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Comment from royowen
I guess there's nothing we can do but fill our glasses with empty sky anyway, we need to keep something in reserve to live on after all, beautifully written senryu dear Gypsy, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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I guess there's nothing we can do but fill our glasses with empty sky anyway, we need to keep something in reserve to live on after all, beautifully written senryu dear Gypsy, blessings Roy
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you, Roy. I appreciate you took the time to read and review my poem.
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Most welcome
Comment from Dr. Nad
Life takes on many different forms of tragedy. What I take from this poem is that in spite of being ripped from a job and vocation that has provided financial backing for such pleasures is drinking wine, the recipient has just been invited to check out the wide open skies that light above and beyond the old stagnant sense of security. How's that for one ridiculously long sentence?
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Life takes on many different forms of tragedy. What I take from this poem is that in spite of being ripped from a job and vocation that has provided financial backing for such pleasures is drinking wine, the recipient has just been invited to check out the wide open skies that light above and beyond the old stagnant sense of security. How's that for one ridiculously long sentence?
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
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LoL
Thank you, Dr nad. I appreciate you took the time to read and review my poem.
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You are so welcome!
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Very fine poem catching the emotions of being fired. If fired or laid-off you have to examine your situation carefully of what you need to do until you get a job. Also being fired can leave you empty and vacant before the emotions of sadness, anger, or doubt about what to do next.
Very well said and written.
Regards,
Mary
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Very fine poem catching the emotions of being fired. If fired or laid-off you have to examine your situation carefully of what you need to do until you get a job. Also being fired can leave you empty and vacant before the emotions of sadness, anger, or doubt about what to do next.
Very well said and written.
Regards,
Mary
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much, Mary. I appreciate your exceptional review.
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Comment from lyenochka
That is thought-provoking! I like the contrast of "fill" with "empty sky." I wonder if the glasses were full of wine at one point and by drinking it all, the glasses reflect the sky, which is empty of future dreams because of the loss of work. Great senryu!!
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That is thought-provoking! I like the contrast of "fill" with "empty sky." I wonder if the glasses were full of wine at one point and by drinking it all, the glasses reflect the sky, which is empty of future dreams because of the loss of work. Great senryu!!
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much, Helen. I appreciate your exceptional review.
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Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, After Getting Fired, has the right set up and fills this long-stemmed glass with the sarcasm left to the unemployed. Hopefully the sky has body and a fine bouquet.
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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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This 5-7-5, After Getting Fired, has the right set up and fills this long-stemmed glass with the sarcasm left to the unemployed. Hopefully the sky has body and a fine bouquet.
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Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much, Bill. I appreciate your exceptional review.
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Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy--"Empty Sky" isn't a very good product name in my opinion; better something like "Crockolia Vineyards," or something like that; just a suggestion. Something that let's the consumer one hell of a buzz is coming!
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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Another fine poem, Gypsy--"Empty Sky" isn't a very good product name in my opinion; better something like "Crockolia Vineyards," or something like that; just a suggestion. Something that let's the consumer one hell of a buzz is coming!
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Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much, Mike. I appreciate your exceptional review.
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