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Football - A Novel

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A mother faces life's struggles.

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Comment from robyn corum
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Barbara!

Oh, my stars! I'm so sorry you were hurt! BUT I thank heavens that you weren't hurt any worse than you were. I know that's sad comfort at the moment. Bless your heart!!! I'm surprised you're able to still keep to this regular schedule. You're such a trooper. Wow.

I do like this couple - I know I keep saying that - but I just do. They are so good together. I'm just worried that something bad is about to happen to spoil all this goodness!!!

Notes:
1.) "I didn't get to kiss Mom, good night."
--> no comma

2.) I don't want your mom, waking up and having to do it.
--> no comma

3.) Jeremy handed the folder to Gabriel. "Mom, doesn't trust me."
--> no comma

4.) "Because she's a mom, and that's what (moms) do."

5.) This being a Mom's a never(-)ending process, isn't it?"

6.) during his lunch period and told me. I guess it(')s fine.

Still doing a great job. Thank you!



 Comment Written 26-Sep-2021


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2021
    Commas get me every time. I also tend to leave out the little words. LOL Thank you fir the help.
Comment from Begin Again
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"I'll try to I wait 'til Sunday."

Oh, Barbara...I am so sorry that you fell, but relieved it's a wrist and not your hip. I hope it's taken care of soon and you can get on with your plans,

I loved this chapter as usual. Gabriel and Katherine are getting to know and trust each other little by little. The kids seem to get the "situation" far better than Katherine does...but she has a lot to deal with.

Hugs, Carol

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2021


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2021
    Thank you for the kind review. I think Katherine is careful because of the kids and doesn't want to make another mistake.
Comment from Zhen Xuan Liu
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This is a great chapter! I am totally intrigued and was just into it. Conversations are nicely and link very well with the previous one. Thank you for listing all the characters in the end for clarification purposes! Keep up the great work!

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2021


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
reply by Zhen Xuan Liu on 26-Sep-2021
    No problem.
Comment from nomi338
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Please take care of yourself. I could not stand to lose another treasured author. It is totally heartbreaking to lose any of our authors, but when it is one that you particularly enjoy reading it is even more devastating. Until the next episode, take care.

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 Comment Written 26-Sep-2021


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2021
    Thank you for the well wishes. I'm not planning on going anywhere. I'm sure my little pity party will end soon.