Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 54 "Football Chapter 28 part 1"A mother faces life's struggles.
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Comment from Pam (respa)
-It is a good photo and
story to go with it, barbara.
-But first, I am sorry about your
fall and not being able to see your family.
-Take care of yourself and hope you
are better very soon.
-I enjoyed this chapter because it
focused on the good things in the
lives of these characters. Just like
us in the real world, they needed it.
-I like the closeness developing between
Gabe, Katherine, and her family.
-The scene with Jeremy was very
good, and I could relate to it from
a teacher's perspective as well as a parent.
-The last section was also good, showing
the developments in the upcoming case
and in Katherine and Gabe's relationship.
-It was a tender moment between them.
-Well done!
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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-It is a good photo and
story to go with it, barbara.
-But first, I am sorry about your
fall and not being able to see your family.
-Take care of yourself and hope you
are better very soon.
-I enjoyed this chapter because it
focused on the good things in the
lives of these characters. Just like
us in the real world, they needed it.
-I like the closeness developing between
Gabe, Katherine, and her family.
-The scene with Jeremy was very
good, and I could relate to it from
a teacher's perspective as well as a parent.
-The last section was also good, showing
the developments in the upcoming case
and in Katherine and Gabe's relationship.
-It was a tender moment between them.
-Well done!
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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You are very welcome, barbara.
Comment from Sanku
I am sorry about your fall. I will pray that your wrist will soon be better so that you can type your awesome stories without discomfort. Get well soon.
A smooth continuation of the novel .I like the way the two of them are very careful about their feelings.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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I am sorry about your fall. I will pray that your wrist will soon be better so that you can type your awesome stories without discomfort. Get well soon.
A smooth continuation of the novel .I like the way the two of them are very careful about their feelings.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Barbara.Wilkey,
LOVELY piece of Romance Fiction having lucid as well as PERFECTLY matching the theme phraseology, CAPTIVATING flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and beautifully depicting its theme, especially Gabriel's character magnifying him as caring, patient, and balanced in all respects.
Your LITERARY STYLE is highly commendable and worth following: To convey the message without speaking such as, "He matched the kiss...He stood."
Entertaining as well as Educative!
Superb!!
"Hello Barbara.Wilkey,
LOVELY piece of Romance Fiction having lucid as well as PERFECTLY matching the theme phraseology, CAPTIVATING flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and beautifully depicting its theme, especially Gabriel's character magnifying him as caring, patient, balanced in all respects.
Your LITERARY STYLE is highly commendable
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Hello Barbara.Wilkey,
LOVELY piece of Romance Fiction having lucid as well as PERFECTLY matching the theme phraseology, CAPTIVATING flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and beautifully depicting its theme, especially Gabriel's character magnifying him as caring, patient, and balanced in all respects.
Your LITERARY STYLE is highly commendable and worth following: To convey the message without speaking such as, "He matched the kiss...He stood."
Entertaining as well as Educative!
Superb!!
"Hello Barbara.Wilkey,
LOVELY piece of Romance Fiction having lucid as well as PERFECTLY matching the theme phraseology, CAPTIVATING flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and beautifully depicting its theme, especially Gabriel's character magnifying him as caring, patient, balanced in all respects.
Your LITERARY STYLE is highly commendable
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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barbara.wilkey, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from tfawcus
You blend the everyday routines and problems of family life with this burgeoning romance in a most believable way. Another chapter with an easy flow, and a good balance between action and humour.
So sorry to hear about your fall. Wishing you a speedy recovery.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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You blend the everyday routines and problems of family life with this burgeoning romance in a most believable way. Another chapter with an easy flow, and a good balance between action and humour.
So sorry to hear about your fall. Wishing you a speedy recovery.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Ricky1024
"Football Chapter 28 part 1"
Even though this is the first time I've read your chapter book it was very well written.
Also, rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing and have a blessed week Barbara.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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"Football Chapter 28 part 1"
Even though this is the first time I've read your chapter book it was very well written.
Also, rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing and have a blessed week Barbara.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Jay Squires
I'm so sorry to hear about your accident, Barbara. I know you were really looking forward to your vacation time.
I'm looking forward to the trial phase. That should be the final obstacle to their intimacy.
A few notes:
Jeremy handed the folder to Gabriel. "Mom doesn't trust me."
"Why not?" [I'm curious who said the "Why not?" Katherine? It wasn't Gabriel because he answers the question in the next line of dialogue. I would suggest a tag for "why not?"
I was at practice, so didn't have time to ask questions." [... so {I} didn't have time to ask questions."]
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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I'm so sorry to hear about your accident, Barbara. I know you were really looking forward to your vacation time.
I'm looking forward to the trial phase. That should be the final obstacle to their intimacy.
A few notes:
Jeremy handed the folder to Gabriel. "Mom doesn't trust me."
"Why not?" [I'm curious who said the "Why not?" Katherine? It wasn't Gabriel because he answers the question in the next line of dialogue. I would suggest a tag for "why not?"
I was at practice, so didn't have time to ask questions." [... so {I} didn't have time to ask questions."]
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement. I made the corrections.
Comment from pookietoo
A very very wonderful story. I am glad I had the chance to read it. Keep up the great work writing your stories. Have a wonderful night and keep smiling.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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A very very wonderful story. I am glad I had the chance to read it. Keep up the great work writing your stories. Have a wonderful night and keep smiling.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Welcome.
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Welcome.
Comment from Wendy G
Thank you so much for writing this chapter, especially under such difficult circumstances. What a shame about your holiday - as well as the pain and difficulty of trying to type with a broken wrist. I hope you will be able to heal as quickly as possible. Thank you for another interesting chapter.
Wendy
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you so much for writing this chapter, especially under such difficult circumstances. What a shame about your holiday - as well as the pain and difficulty of trying to type with a broken wrist. I hope you will be able to heal as quickly as possible. Thank you for another interesting chapter.
Wendy
Comment Written 26-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ben Colder
You have eased these two people together. I can see this unfolding into a delighted ending, and that's a good thing. I know we have a dirt pile to climb over, but we will make it. Good one, Barb.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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You have eased these two people together. I can see this unfolding into a delighted ending, and that's a good thing. I know we have a dirt pile to climb over, but we will make it. Good one, Barb.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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sure will
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It takes about 1000 copies sold for breaking even with most self-publishers. Then thirty books per year to keep it listed. These people have listened to steal.
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true
Comment from Anne Johnston
Thanks for sharing another chapter. Sorry you had a fall and missed part of your vacation. It must be hard to type with a broken wrist. Hope you get the cast on and that it heals quickly.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thanks for sharing another chapter. Sorry you had a fall and missed part of your vacation. It must be hard to type with a broken wrist. Hope you get the cast on and that it heals quickly.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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You are welcome
