Haiku (light from harvest moon)
A haiku for the contest6 total reviews
Comment from Debbie Pope
Judging from my own personal haiku rules, this is absolutely perfect. You are really getting good with your Japanese format practice.
You give us a simple description of the moon's light and a humorous closing line that also serves as a double entendre. It's hard to keep the words as simple as you do. Yet they still are beautiful and create a picture in my mind.
It's clever. It's beautiful. Thanks so much for sharing this one.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Judging from my own personal haiku rules, this is absolutely perfect. You are really getting good with your Japanese format practice.
You give us a simple description of the moon's light and a humorous closing line that also serves as a double entendre. It's hard to keep the words as simple as you do. Yet they still are beautiful and create a picture in my mind.
It's clever. It's beautiful. Thanks so much for sharing this one.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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I am so happy this delighted you! Wasn?t sure if my closing line would detract from the beauty of the piece. Not many haikus are humorous. Thanks for the encouraging feedback and generous rating!
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Personally, I think that the double entendre works well. You are describing the scene--spotty lighting.
I'll be watching the leaderboard for this one. It's a winner to me anyway.
Comment from juliaSjames
Gorgeous haiku June
Love the image of the moonlit pond with the frog hiding under the lotus leaves.
Subtle metaphor for spiritual enlightenment especially with the double meaning of "left in the dark".
Stunning illustration to accompany your well chosen words.
Best of luck in the contest.
Stay safe
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2021
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Gorgeous haiku June
Love the image of the moonlit pond with the frog hiding under the lotus leaves.
Subtle metaphor for spiritual enlightenment especially with the double meaning of "left in the dark".
Stunning illustration to accompany your well chosen words.
Best of luck in the contest.
Stay safe
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 25-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2021
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I'm glad you enjoyed this haiku and could see the double meaning. People who choose to stay in the dark will never be enlightened. Ignorance is not always bliss - thank you for sharing your insightful comments.
Comment from Mark D. R.
yep, this my style too June!
concise phrasing, a little alliteration with the l-letters, a catchy last line, and a good choice for your artwork
Mark
P.S. Not a fan of italic font for all the text, but I accept/respect your poetic and artistic choice.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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yep, this my style too June!
concise phrasing, a little alliteration with the l-letters, a catchy last line, and a good choice for your artwork
Mark
P.S. Not a fan of italic font for all the text, but I accept/respect your poetic and artistic choice.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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I'm glad you enjoyed this haiku - since it is your favorite form of poetry!
Comment from Sally Law
Stunning presentation in haiku form for the contest, dear June. Unique and creative with nature's drama enfolding. Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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Stunning presentation in haiku form for the contest, dear June. Unique and creative with nature's drama enfolding. Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal XOs
Comment Written 24-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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Thank you for stopping by to share your thoughts on this haiku. Glad you enjoyed it. Always happy to hear from you.
Comment from Eternal Muse
I wish I had a six for this gorgeous haiku. The presentation is stunning, including the picture and font.
The haiku is beautiful and true to form.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2021
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I wish I had a six for this gorgeous haiku. The presentation is stunning, including the picture and font.
The haiku is beautiful and true to form.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2021
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Thank you! I appreciate the positive feedback! Always happy to hear your thoughts.
Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku, Light from Harvest Moon, presented with a 5-7-5 formatting, creates a scene which one could easily extrapulate into a suggestion that greatest illumination is received by those who stand in its glow.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2021
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This haiku, Light from Harvest Moon, presented with a 5-7-5 formatting, creates a scene which one could easily extrapulate into a suggestion that greatest illumination is received by those who stand in its glow.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2021
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I like your interpretation of this haiku! Those who choose to stay in the dark will remain ignorant. Thank you for sharing your insights.
