A Sheep, Sheeplike, or A Wolf!
A Wolf in Sheep's Clothing!31 total reviews
Comment from royowen
Unfortunately this is becoming an all to often occurrence, there was someone who tried to rip $15000 out of my account, somehow they had managed to hack my credit card details, but fortunately they had been foiled, beautifully written RP, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Unfortunately this is becoming an all to often occurrence, there was someone who tried to rip $15000 out of my account, somehow they had managed to hack my credit card details, but fortunately they had been foiled, beautifully written RP, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 20-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Hello Roy,
Thank you very much for your morale boosting comments backed by Good Luck and Blessings.
With best wishes,
~ RP
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Bless you RP
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It's so nice of you, Roy.
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A pleasure RP
Comment from karenina
Ah, so yes. You present the common image of a wolf in sheep's clothing....and then flesh it out (as it were) to reveal a devious human
--just as Aesop intended us to comprehend! Don't trust appearances!
The philanthropist you see may indeed be merely a conniving scam artist!
Nice... Good luck in the contest!--Karenina
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Ah, so yes. You present the common image of a wolf in sheep's clothing....and then flesh it out (as it were) to reveal a devious human
--just as Aesop intended us to comprehend! Don't trust appearances!
The philanthropist you see may indeed be merely a conniving scam artist!
Nice... Good luck in the contest!--Karenina
Comment Written 20-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Hello Karenina
Thank you very much for your morale boosting comments backed by Good Luck.
With best wishes,
~ RP
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You are most welcome!
Karenina
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It's so nice of you, Karenina.
Comment from lancellot
I think the theme is a solid one to write about, but the actual execution and the way this short tale is written doesn't feel or rad like a story. It reads like two different incident spliced together and told to us. Like a report. I would recommend rewriting this one.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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I think the theme is a solid one to write about, but the actual execution and the way this short tale is written doesn't feel or rad like a story. It reads like two different incident spliced together and told to us. Like a report. I would recommend rewriting this one.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Hello Lancellot,
Thank you very much for your comments/suggestions.
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Sherry Asbury
I am so glad to have read this great story. Good luck in the competition.
I love wolves, but not those in sheep's clothing. Straight-up honesty suits every situation. You told this story in a fine way and your artwork is excellent.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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I am so glad to have read this great story. Good luck in the competition.
I love wolves, but not those in sheep's clothing. Straight-up honesty suits every situation. You told this story in a fine way and your artwork is excellent.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Hello Sherry Asbury,
Thank you very much for your morale boosting comments backed by Good Luck.
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Magpiemazy.
Loved the artwork and the story after reading it three times to understand what was happening. Flash fiction can be difficult at best. Not certain how to make the transition smoother between daydream and reality.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Loved the artwork and the story after reading it three times to understand what was happening. Flash fiction can be difficult at best. Not certain how to make the transition smoother between daydream and reality.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Hello Magpiemazy,
Thank you for reading and reviewing.
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Wendy G
An interesting story highlighting what so often happens in the corrupt corridors of power. Smiling and pretending to work for the common good they are deceptive and cunning in seeking to fill their own pockets.
Wendy
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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An interesting story highlighting what so often happens in the corrupt corridors of power. Smiling and pretending to work for the common good they are deceptive and cunning in seeking to fill their own pockets.
Wendy
Comment Written 20-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Hello Wendy G,
Thank you very much for your morale boosting comments.
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Eternal Muse
This was well written and I like your touch of humor.
Excellent imagery and visuals. Great narrative, kept my attention from the first line. I like the image of a wolf in sheep's clothing (lol).
Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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This was well written and I like your touch of humor.
Excellent imagery and visuals. Great narrative, kept my attention from the first line. I like the image of a wolf in sheep's clothing (lol).
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Hello Eternal Muse,
Thank you very much for your morale boosting comments backed by Best of Luck.
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
In general I like your story; the juxtaposition of the dream and the so-called philanthropist. Paragraph 5, however, confuses me. How can a locality be invalid? And what clued you as to the secretary's crookedness? I think with a little more explanation and some words cut (as you have so few to use), this could be a great story.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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In general I like your story; the juxtaposition of the dream and the so-called philanthropist. Paragraph 5, however, confuses me. How can a locality be invalid? And what clued you as to the secretary's crookedness? I think with a little more explanation and some words cut (as you have so few to use), this could be a great story.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Hello Carol Hillebrenner,
Thank you for reading, reviewing, and suggestions.
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good artwork and your
notes are appreciated, RP.
-You developed your story well,
beginning with the opening dialogue.
-I like how you include the word
"flashed" as your dream was broken.
-Good descriptive detail about the
committee and the water problem.
-A very good ending connecting
the title, the saying, and the situation.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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-Good artwork and your
notes are appreciated, RP.
-You developed your story well,
beginning with the opening dialogue.
-I like how you include the word
"flashed" as your dream was broken.
-Good descriptive detail about the
committee and the water problem.
-A very good ending connecting
the title, the saying, and the situation.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Hello Pam,
Hello Mike,
Thank you very much for your morale boosting comments backed by Good Luck.
With best wishes,
~ RP
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You are very welcome, RP. Did you mean to send a reply to Mike? You have his name listed here, too.
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Hi Pam,
It's so nice of you.
No Pam, not all! I've already sent a reply to Mike. It may be due to typographical error.
With best wishes,
~ RP
~ RP
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Thanks for the reply. Sometimes weird things happen on computers!
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Welcome! Pam.
With best wishes,
~RP
Comment from Janetsue
Dishonesty is eventually caught out. Your flash fiction contest entry points this out very well. The picture is eye-catching and connects perfectly to the message of your story. Best wishes!
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Dishonesty is eventually caught out. Your flash fiction contest entry points this out very well. The picture is eye-catching and connects perfectly to the message of your story. Best wishes!
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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Hello Spangle,
Thank you very much for your morale boosting comments backed by Best wishes.
With best wishes,
~ RP
