Secrets in the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 57 "Secrets in the Wind - Chap 57"A story of loss, deceit, murder and crime
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Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Finally, a light at the end of the tunnel. This latest action was superb. Cassidy can take full credit if they successfully find Annie and the kidnappers in time.
Ralf
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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Finally, a light at the end of the tunnel. This latest action was superb. Cassidy can take full credit if they successfully find Annie and the kidnappers in time.
Ralf
Comment Written 18-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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Thank you for reading, enjoying and for the review. I apologize for the short cut-and-paste response but it's all lI can manage right now. Please know that I care.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Finally, a light at the end of the tunnel. This latest action was superb. Cassidy can take full credit if they successfully find Annie and the kidnappers in time.
Ralf
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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Finally, a light at the end of the tunnel. This latest action was superb. Cassidy can take full credit if they successfully find Annie and the kidnappers in time.
Ralf
Comment Written 18-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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Thank you for reading, enjoying and for the review. I apologize for the short cut-and-paste response but it's all lI can manage right now. Please know that I care.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
Woohoo! A great scene and acting job by Cassidy! It's good she has that hidden talent! Hopefully, Sofia is scared enough to lead the crew to where Annie is. They'll get Mason, too!
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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Woohoo! A great scene and acting job by Cassidy! It's good she has that hidden talent! Hopefully, Sofia is scared enough to lead the crew to where Annie is. They'll get Mason, too!
Comment Written 18-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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Thank you for reading, enjoying and for the review. I apologize for the short cut-and-paste response but it's all lI can manage right now. Please know that I care.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Judy Lawless
Oh this was a good one, Carol! Cassidy sure got into the act once she realized how much her appearance would scare Sofia. Now, will they get to Miguel and the others before it's too late? I think I have to go back to the last chapter to remember where things were at the end. Great job.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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Oh this was a good one, Carol! Cassidy sure got into the act once she realized how much her appearance would scare Sofia. Now, will they get to Miguel and the others before it's too late? I think I have to go back to the last chapter to remember where things were at the end. Great job.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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Thank you for reading, enjoying and for the review. I apologize for the short cut-and-paste response but it's all lI can manage right now. Please know that I care.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This Chapter 57 of the Mystery and Crime Fiction speaks minutely and expressively about Voodoo takes centre stage, eventfully; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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This Chapter 57 of the Mystery and Crime Fiction speaks minutely and expressively about Voodoo takes centre stage, eventfully; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 18-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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Thank you for reading, enjoying and for the review. I apologize for the short cut-and-paste response but it's all lI can manage right now. Please know that I care.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
Excellent chapter and funny too. I'm glad this worked and I hope they get to the cabin soon. You are doing a fantastic job iwith this story I'm sure we are all waiting to see what happens next.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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Excellent chapter and funny too. I'm glad this worked and I hope they get to the cabin soon. You are doing a fantastic job iwith this story I'm sure we are all waiting to see what happens next.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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Thank you for reading, enjoying and for the review. I apologize for the short cut-and-paste response but it's all lI can manage right now. Please know that I care.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
SSSSSStupendous! Ingenious device--brilliantly executed. Sofia's terror is made manifest in this delightful exchange--love how they're trying to keep from laughing. You nailed it. Cheerssssss. LIZ
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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SSSSSStupendous! Ingenious device--brilliantly executed. Sofia's terror is made manifest in this delightful exchange--love how they're trying to keep from laughing. You nailed it. Cheerssssss. LIZ
Comment Written 18-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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Liz,
Thank you from the bottom of my heart. This deserves so much more but my heart is empty. Hugs, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I love it. It's good writing. I couldn't help but smile and laugh as I read.
Alerted by Cassidy's small, quick gasps, Allie asked, "Cassidy, are you okay?" (In natural dialogue, I don't believe Allie would use "Cassidy, are you okay?" I think she would say, "Are you okay?")
Allie chuckled, "Oh my God, I forgot. You are going to give this woman a heart attack." (chuckled isn't a speech tag, it's needs a period not a comma.)
"Payback! She deserves it," Allie grinned. "Let's go play ghost." (Grinning isn't a speech tag so a period needs to be after 'it')
Allie pushed the wheelchair through the gates while Cassidy took a deep breath and exhaled. "You've got this, Cassidy." (Again, in natural dialogue, I don't feel she'd use Cassidy's name, I think it can be omitted.)
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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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I love it. It's good writing. I couldn't help but smile and laugh as I read.
Alerted by Cassidy's small, quick gasps, Allie asked, "Cassidy, are you okay?" (In natural dialogue, I don't believe Allie would use "Cassidy, are you okay?" I think she would say, "Are you okay?")
Allie chuckled, "Oh my God, I forgot. You are going to give this woman a heart attack." (chuckled isn't a speech tag, it's needs a period not a comma.)
"Payback! She deserves it," Allie grinned. "Let's go play ghost." (Grinning isn't a speech tag so a period needs to be after 'it')
Allie pushed the wheelchair through the gates while Cassidy took a deep breath and exhaled. "You've got this, Cassidy." (Again, in natural dialogue, I don't feel she'd use Cassidy's name, I think it can be omitted.)
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Comment Written 18-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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Thank you for reading, enjoying and for the review. I apologize for the short cut-and-paste response but it's all lI can manage right now. Please know that I care.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was hilarious!! Well done, Cassidy. Now to get to the cabin before Mason gets there and kills the lot of them. He'll go batty when he finds Annie is still alive and more so, that she's in his cabin!! This was a brilliant part, Carol, I really enjoyed the spookie bits. Well done!! Love and hugs, Sandra xxxx
How are you? xxx
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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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That was hilarious!! Well done, Cassidy. Now to get to the cabin before Mason gets there and kills the lot of them. He'll go batty when he finds Annie is still alive and more so, that she's in his cabin!! This was a brilliant part, Carol, I really enjoyed the spookie bits. Well done!! Love and hugs, Sandra xxxx
How are you? xxx
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Comment Written 18-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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Thank you for reading, enjoying and for the review. I apologize for the short cut-and-paste response but it's all lI can manage right now. Please know that I care.
Hugs, Carol
