What Freedom Means
What this word means to me.5 total reviews
Comment from Sean Daily
This is a really inspiring piece. I wish you would look for a magazine interested in publishing it. It needs a broader audience. Just a thought, my friend.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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This is a really inspiring piece. I wish you would look for a magazine interested in publishing it. It needs a broader audience. Just a thought, my friend.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Point taken--you hammer too much--sugg: cut repetition of similar phrases. Your enthusiasm shines through--no need to blind us.
I practicely=>PRACTICE (what?) freely. I can write about anything. [sugg OMIT What else can I say? (you said plenty)]
[sugg OMIT sentence--it's unclear and not relevant-- It goes from telling you that I am glad to live in Miami. It is my home. It is because of that word.]
Writing is my [bread and butter=>PASSION (the expression means you make your living writing0]. I got all the freedom to write books. It gives me great pleasure to share why this word means a lot to me.
[OMIT sentence (you certainly have told us) I think that I have told you all this already.]
Just one word to spell out F. R. E. E. D. O. M. [OMIT (redundant) spells out freedom].
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2021
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Point taken--you hammer too much--sugg: cut repetition of similar phrases. Your enthusiasm shines through--no need to blind us.
I practicely=>PRACTICE (what?) freely. I can write about anything. [sugg OMIT What else can I say? (you said plenty)]
[sugg OMIT sentence--it's unclear and not relevant-- It goes from telling you that I am glad to live in Miami. It is my home. It is because of that word.]
Writing is my [bread and butter=>PASSION (the expression means you make your living writing0]. I got all the freedom to write books. It gives me great pleasure to share why this word means a lot to me.
[OMIT sentence (you certainly have told us) I think that I have told you all this already.]
Just one word to spell out F. R. E. E. D. O. M. [OMIT (redundant) spells out freedom].
Comment Written 18-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2021
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Thank you! I have fixed the mistakes. Thanks for your help!
Comment from Cogitator
Technically quite good. We all have points of view about our likes and dislikes. With freedom comes the responsibility to work and make everyone free....John
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2021
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Technically quite good. We all have points of view about our likes and dislikes. With freedom comes the responsibility to work and make everyone free....John
Comment Written 18-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from Versch
You are absolutely right about what freedom means. Freedom to do everything you want as long as it doesn't harm anyone. Fantastic writing.
Good luck in the contest!
Just a typo?
birds siging - (I think you mean) -> birds singing
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2021
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You are absolutely right about what freedom means. Freedom to do everything you want as long as it doesn't harm anyone. Fantastic writing.
Good luck in the contest!
Just a typo?
birds siging - (I think you mean) -> birds singing
Comment Written 17-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2021
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Thank you! I have fixed the mistake. Thanks for your help!
Comment from kahpot
Very well said, Freedom has so much power in so many different ways, and yes we all should have our freedom as long as it does not harm anybody else, an excellent read, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2021
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Very well said, Freedom has so much power in so many different ways, and yes we all should have our freedom as long as it does not harm anybody else, an excellent read, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 17-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2021
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Thank you!
