Senryu You
A fun entry for this contest6 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This senryu, Senryu You, presented with a 5-7-5 formatting, attempts the oxymoron, but misses slightly. The oxymoron would be better used as a two-word phrase -- seriously funny. Still, the point is a senryu, not an oxymoron. Nice job.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2021
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This senryu, Senryu You, presented with a 5-7-5 formatting, attempts the oxymoron, but misses slightly. The oxymoron would be better used as a two-word phrase -- seriously funny. Still, the point is a senryu, not an oxymoron. Nice job.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2021
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Hi Bill Yes I agree it missed the mark ha ha win some lose some the intent was there bit delivery a bit ordinary Needs a tweeks or two Like me lol
Cheers Chris
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
So much creativity in this short poetry form. Enjoyed the colorful artwork and fonts. Very clever wording with the oxymoron being 'funny, seriously'.
A great contest entry!
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2021
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So much creativity in this short poetry form. Enjoyed the colorful artwork and fonts. Very clever wording with the oxymoron being 'funny, seriously'.
A great contest entry!
Comment Written 13-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2021
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Hi C Gale Burnett Thanks for your review and glad you like my presentation Yes I am a bit of an oxymoron at times hopefully less serious and more funny ha ha Cheers Chris
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You are so welcome :)
Comment from Zoë Ricard
This was cute, funny and it lightened the mood of the past few days. I may just be missing it, but I don't see the 5/7/5 being followed - but I enjoyed reading it!
Thank you for sharing!
Zoë x
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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This was cute, funny and it lightened the mood of the past few days. I may just be missing it, but I don't see the 5/7/5 being followed - but I enjoyed reading it!
Thank you for sharing!
Zoë x
Comment Written 12-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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Hi Zoe Thank you for your review and had 8 syllables in the second line which the committee alerted me to they said I had 5.8.5 so my other lines are correct
I have now made line 2 onto 8 syllables
Sometimes it depends on the particular syllable counter you use some are different and will give you a different count which is annoying at times
However the FS committee have allowed my entry now as is
Cheers Christine
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Oh good!! I'm so glad you were able to keep it in. You're right - the counters vary sometimes. I try to write a couple of haiku every day - and have found the syllable counter on google the best (for me, anyway).
Good luck, Christine! I look forward to reading more of you!
Zoë x
Comment from Pam (respa)
-I totally agree with your notes.
-I like the artwork and presentation.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic.
-Good description and
word choices to show
how this poem is an
oxymoron. It was fun.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2021
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-I totally agree with your notes.
-I like the artwork and presentation.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic.
-Good description and
word choices to show
how this poem is an
oxymoron. It was fun.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2021
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Hi Pam Thanks for your review. This one was a bot of my attempt to incorporate me onto the senyru and I am a bit of an oxymoron Cheers
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You are welcome, Chris, and thanks for sharing. Maybe many of us are an oxymoron and never thought about it:)
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ha ha yes me thinks so ha ha
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😊😊
Comment from SHABAMO
Well written and clever, and indeed an oxymoron as that is not at all what I would expect out of this type of poem. Nice work on the graphics and word emphasis with different colors.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2021
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Well written and clever, and indeed an oxymoron as that is not at all what I would expect out of this type of poem. Nice work on the graphics and word emphasis with different colors.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2021
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Hi SHABAMO Thanks for your review like me an oxymoron at times ha ha I though this might go OK
Cheers Christine
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A contradiction in terms here for your Senryu for the contest and you made me smile with your clever invention and I wish you luck with it, a fun post, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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A contradiction in terms here for your Senryu for the contest and you made me smile with your clever invention and I wish you luck with it, a fun post, love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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Thanks Dolly Ha ha it?s not far from the truth
Cheers
