Enchanter
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Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
A lovely romantic work which should melt her heart Please forgive my printing, I use predictive text or my microphone mossy times > I liked The poem very much and will read your work, again. Giddy.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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A lovely romantic work which should melt her heart Please forgive my printing, I use predictive text or my microphone mossy times > I liked The poem very much and will read your work, again. Giddy.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much and thank you for saying you will.read my works again.
Comment from JanPerry
I don't think a girl can be blamed for looking sexy, however, men take advantage of this. Not many women in history have been labelled a "siren". Thank goodness the term is used exclusively for those that deserve it.
Lovely imagination and painting.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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I don't think a girl can be blamed for looking sexy, however, men take advantage of this. Not many women in history have been labelled a "siren". Thank goodness the term is used exclusively for those that deserve it.
Lovely imagination and painting.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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I just wanted a role reversal
They are always talking about gender equality.men too should be given a chance to be sirens smile
Comment from MissMerri
Well, Sanku, when it is your fantasy, the siren can be anything you want it to be. LOL I found this poem most enchanting and unique. I enjoyed the three-line stanzas with the three end-rhymes in each. I adore creativity and you've exhibited it here in several ways. The picture fits your words perfectly. MM
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Well, Sanku, when it is your fantasy, the siren can be anything you want it to be. LOL I found this poem most enchanting and unique. I enjoyed the three-line stanzas with the three end-rhymes in each. I adore creativity and you've exhibited it here in several ways. The picture fits your words perfectly. MM
Comment Written 09-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Yes
For once I thought poor men let us make them sirens too thank you for stopping by
Comment from royowen
There's absolutely no reason on God's good earth that males couldn't be sirens, but temptress doesn't sit well with the male gender, perhaps that's the reason. Beautifully written Sanku, the rhyming couplets are classy, concise, language rich and super, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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There's absolutely no reason on God's good earth that males couldn't be sirens, but temptress doesn't sit well with the male gender, perhaps that's the reason. Beautifully written Sanku, the rhyming couplets are classy, concise, language rich and super, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 08-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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One person has pointed out that those days women sailors were rare.so the seduction from.females.!thank you very much for stopping by.
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Some good female and brave ones too
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a good suite of mono-rhyme treated that tell of how enticing a siren was. I like the switch.
I think at one time ther we're male sirens. But the Greeks changed that when they decided to make them the three daughters of a god.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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This is a good suite of mono-rhyme treated that tell of how enticing a siren was. I like the switch.
I think at one time ther we're male sirens. But the Greeks changed that when they decided to make them the three daughters of a god.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 08-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much for stopping by.Oh that story I have not heard
Faith Hope and Charity?
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You are most kindly welcome, Sanku.
Joan
Comment from karenina
Sirens! An equal opportunity employer? Probably not, according to mythology but hey, it's a whole new world! Guess we should never say never, right?
Karenina
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021
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Sirens! An equal opportunity employer? Probably not, according to mythology but hey, it's a whole new world! Guess we should never say never, right?
Karenina
Comment Written 08-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much .I just wondered .Were sirens always mermaids? In that case i just remembered a poem by Mathew Arnold 'Forsaken Merman" ...
Comment from lyenochka
I like your thinking! Yes, it isn't always the female that lures the man to some other place. Although I think sirens actually were more destructive after they lured their male prey. But your poem has a more pleasant end in a "fantasy land." Great job telling this story in your mono-rhymed tercets.
My favorite lines were:
"from it sailed out a song of sigh"
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"a soft breeze cradled her at his command"
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021
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I like your thinking! Yes, it isn't always the female that lures the man to some other place. Although I think sirens actually were more destructive after they lured their male prey. But your poem has a more pleasant end in a "fantasy land." Great job telling this story in your mono-rhymed tercets.
My favorite lines were:
"from it sailed out a song of sigh"
and
"a soft breeze cradled her at his command"
Comment Written 08-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much for these words Helen.Some one said it was unwise to attempt mono rhymes and he particularly thought 'sigh' was a forced rhyme...
I wrote it two weeks back ,but was unsure of posting it....
Comment from Paul McFarland
Good subject matter. Rewrite this poem. It seems a little awkward to me. The rhyme is a little forced. I think it would help to establish the gender of the person in the canoe a little earlier.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021
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Good subject matter. Rewrite this poem. It seems a little awkward to me. The rhyme is a little forced. I think it would help to establish the gender of the person in the canoe a little earlier.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021
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Thank you for stopping by .i will think about your suggestion
Comment from Boogienights
Legend has it that there are mermen but I'm not sure if they have the siren call. It's an interesting idea, I can't see why it can't work both ways. Thanks so much for sharing. :)
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021
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Legend has it that there are mermen but I'm not sure if they have the siren call. It's an interesting idea, I can't see why it can't work both ways. Thanks so much for sharing. :)
Comment Written 07-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021
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Yes .I remembered yesterday a poem I have llearned in college 'Forsaken Merman' But were the sirens always mermaids?
Comment from Wendy G
A little reversal of normal roles in this well written and quite captivating poem. It has a gentle air of fantasy and magic as he lures her away. Wonder how long the fantasy lasted.
Wendy
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021
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A little reversal of normal roles in this well written and quite captivating poem. It has a gentle air of fantasy and magic as he lures her away. Wonder how long the fantasy lasted.
Wendy
Comment Written 07-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much for your kind words.Whether the fantasy lasted ,or not is a mute question
