Comment from Liz O'Neill

Excellent

Your onomatopoetic choice of words seems to have more than one purpose: "crackle" tires on gravel? or bones? "Sharpened" we can hear it happening with those letters. Clever for the word count regulations.

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2023

Short and sharp so to speak. I have been thinking about extending this piece to a much larger work. Do you think it might work?.Regards
Barry Penfold.

reply by Liz O'Neill on 15-Sep-2023

Yes, lots more fodder for more onomatopoetic words too...moo haha. Do you see how those words bring the reader through a visceral experience. I look forward to what your muses come up with.

Comment from writer723

Excellent

I really enjoyed your spooky and creepy tale. It fits the Halloween theme perfectly in my opinion. I found myself instantly drawn in and on the edge of my seat. You skillfully wove this tale together with cleverness and perfect pacing. Thank you for providing such an intriguing read.

 Comment Written 06-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021

Thanks for your review and I am glad you enjoyed the read. Take care.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I guess there must be people like this, I'm so glad I'm not one of them, I discovered on a hunting trip with my dad when I was 14 that I had no stomach for it, this is a well written entry in this contest, well done, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2021

Roy I am also glad you are not like Arthur. Thanks for your review and glad you enjoyed .Cheers

reply by royowen on 05-Sep-2021

Bless you

Comment from Mary Shifman

Excellent

This is very creepy. I will never stop to buy eggs along the road again! How did you manage to tell a complete story in so few words? It takes me 50 words just to get started! Well done.

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2021

Thanks Mary for your review. Yes I get a little creepy about it as well. Have a good day.

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi there,

Flash horror is one of the trickiest things to pull off but you did a good job with this one.

crackle is an interesting choice.

A collection of knives had been sharpened this morning. - I would maybe change this to that.

All the best
GMG

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2021

Thanks for your review and comments. Have a good day.

Comment from Eternal Muse

Excellent

Short and sweet. Actually, not so sweet (lol), but filled with horrific imagery. I don't envy anyone on the other end of this- looks that someone is getting killed today.

A very good entry - good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2021

Thanks for taking time to review and your good wishes. Take care.

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This OCT Wk 1 - Horror 50 Words or Less Contest Entry speaks why Arthur was happy when killing, expressed orderly; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2021

Thanks for taking the time to review .Take care .

Comment from lancellot

Good

Hmm, I'm a little confused. Maybe if we knew what the sign said or who or what Arthur was happy killing. Who or what is the victim? Is it people, animals, monsters. I think you need a bit more to get the horror element and fear that is needed.

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2021

thanks for the feedback. I guess the title has to be brought into the substantive wording? Thanks again.