Secrets in the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Secrets in the Wind - Chap 38"A story of loss, deceit, murder and crime
18 total reviews
Comment from karenina
That bang you hear is my heart poundng. At last Mary and Cassidy have come together.
I'm gearing up for a pick up truck full of emotions shared soon...
And Annie!
Miguel! So he's Mason's main man!
The tumblers are turning...no amount of clandestine activity will be left in the "safe."
You've held your stride throughout...and now you've picked up the baton and are sprinting to the finish line!
I would like to fill out an application to be president of your fan club!
Position taken? Maybe VP? PR person?
Floor sweeper!--I have experience in that!
Holy cow Carol....
Karenina
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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That bang you hear is my heart poundng. At last Mary and Cassidy have come together.
I'm gearing up for a pick up truck full of emotions shared soon...
And Annie!
Miguel! So he's Mason's main man!
The tumblers are turning...no amount of clandestine activity will be left in the "safe."
You've held your stride throughout...and now you've picked up the baton and are sprinting to the finish line!
I would like to fill out an application to be president of your fan club!
Position taken? Maybe VP? PR person?
Floor sweeper!--I have experience in that!
Holy cow Carol....
Karenina
Comment Written 02-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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What you talking about???? You are my fan club! Especially when I get emotional over things...you set my head back on straight! Love you...smiles, Carol
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YAY! I can be president and vice president and treasurer...and biggest fan too!
Karenina
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
This chapter is a kind of cliffhanger! We don't know the outcome of Mary and Cassidy's meeting, nor do we know what Emmy's investigation has led to. But it does look like drugs had also leaked out of the truck, in a previous accident involving the wine barrels and Miguel.
It had been thirty years, people change.
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It had been thirty years; people change.
"I thought that at first till I read one of the witness reports.
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"I thought that at first, till I read one of the witness reports.
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Maybe Jack had learned something about the illegal drug trade going on at his winery, and that's what got him killed.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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This chapter is a kind of cliffhanger! We don't know the outcome of Mary and Cassidy's meeting, nor do we know what Emmy's investigation has led to. But it does look like drugs had also leaked out of the truck, in a previous accident involving the wine barrels and Miguel.
It had been thirty years, people change.
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It had been thirty years; people change.
"I thought that at first till I read one of the witness reports.
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"I thought that at first, till I read one of the witness reports.
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Maybe Jack had learned something about the illegal drug trade going on at his winery, and that's what got him killed.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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Sorry for the cut and paste but I am now currently 158 responses behind. I want to make the changes, thank everyone and start fresh. Wishing you a great day.
Please forgive me for being so far behind on answering reviews, fixing suggestions, and thanking everyone for their kindness. Good thing a birthday only comes once a year. I posted to my family that I was cooking and for the first time in years, my house was over flowing for two days after two days of cooking. Now in three days, Matthew starts filming again and I must cook for them. This woman is tired. Thank you for all your support and kindness.
Smiles, Carol
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Happy Cooking! God bless you and the crew. Love, Mary Kay xoxo
Comment from ShirleyT1
What a well-written chapter! You did a fantastic job of taking the lid of some of the hidden secrets, and the reunion between Cassidy and Mary is heart warming. I can't wait to see where all this leads.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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What a well-written chapter! You did a fantastic job of taking the lid of some of the hidden secrets, and the reunion between Cassidy and Mary is heart warming. I can't wait to see where all this leads.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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Sorry for the cut and paste but I am now currently 158 responses behind. I want to make the changes, thank everyone and start fresh. Wishing you a great day.
Please forgive me for being so far behind on answering reviews, fixing suggestions, and thanking everyone for their kindness. Good thing a birthday only comes once a year. I posted to my family that I was cooking and for the first time in years, my house was over flowing for two days after two days of cooking. Now in three days, Matthew starts filming again and I must cook for them. This woman is tired. Thank you for all your support and kindness.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from robyn corum
Carol,
So they were able to get some info from the scene of the kidnapping - very cool. Not that it matters much because I would think we know who's behind it. Although you are good at surprises. Hmmm...
Okay - good chapter - now, on to more!
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021
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Carol,
So they were able to get some info from the scene of the kidnapping - very cool. Not that it matters much because I would think we know who's behind it. Although you are good at surprises. Hmmm...
Okay - good chapter - now, on to more!
Comment Written 29-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021
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Hurrah! You are about to move on to the two chapters that really got under my skin. I hope the emotions came through and you too will feel the moment. I must rush to see what you've written.
smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Clark2
Great reunion between Mary and Cassidy. I like how you brought that about very naturally. Can't wait to find out what they talk about. But I will wait! Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021
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Great reunion between Mary and Cassidy. I like how you brought that about very naturally. Can't wait to find out what they talk about. But I will wait! Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 29-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021
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Thanks so much for continuing to read and follow the story. These three chapters meant so much to me and I wanted the reader to feel the emotions behind it. I see you have read Chapter 40. thanks you...Smiles, Carol
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I was surprised to see you had written 3 chapters in a short time frame. This segment was very emotional.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I would love to be fly on the wall and hear what Cassidy and Mary are discussing. I know how hard that information must be. I'm glad more information about the case slowly coming out. I love the story.
Cassidy turned toward the window, "How do I tell her about Jon?" (period needed after 'window')
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021
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I would love to be fly on the wall and hear what Cassidy and Mary are discussing. I know how hard that information must be. I'm glad more information about the case slowly coming out. I love the story.
Cassidy turned toward the window, "How do I tell her about Jon?" (period needed after 'window')
Comment Written 29-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021
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thanks, Barbara. I am thrilled that you love my story because I have great respect for what you write. I appreciate all your help and comments. Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from lancellot
A very well crafted chapter. For a second I thought Mary and Cassidy would not speak at this point, but then I figured you wouldn't do that to us. I guess we will have to wait for the next chapter to see what took place from their points of view.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021
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A very well crafted chapter. For a second I thought Mary and Cassidy would not speak at this point, but then I figured you wouldn't do that to us. I guess we will have to wait for the next chapter to see what took place from their points of view.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021
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Yes...39 and 40 covers most of it. It took two chapters for me to spill out the emotions and wouldn't you it... Liz stumbles out and fireworks explode! LOl Another chapter to mop up that floor again.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Susan Newell
The writing in this chapter is generally very good. The revelation of mysteries is still advancing. I'm still having trouble connecting who was informed about how much and when, and I find it unlikely that local police would have ignored a witness report about the white powder being hidden. You might accomplish the same thing by having Miguel hurriedly close-up and secure the doors that popped open when he was hit. Not quite as suspicious to the locals, but still a clue for detectives. ? ? ?
I think they would have taken a photo of the tire marks (if there were any, since he laid rubber when leaving) and a cast of the footprint.
Notes:
Each step was heavier and heavier to take as he proceeded -- suggest: each step became heavier and heavier as he proceeded
After thirty years of marriage, she -- suggest Emmy vs. she -- antecedents are Garth and Emily = they
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The writing in this chapter is generally very good. The revelation of mysteries is still advancing. I'm still having trouble connecting who was informed about how much and when, and I find it unlikely that local police would have ignored a witness report about the white powder being hidden. You might accomplish the same thing by having Miguel hurriedly close-up and secure the doors that popped open when he was hit. Not quite as suspicious to the locals, but still a clue for detectives. ? ? ?
I think they would have taken a photo of the tire marks (if there were any, since he laid rubber when leaving) and a cast of the footprint.
Notes:
Each step was heavier and heavier to take as he proceeded -- suggest: each step became heavier and heavier as he proceeded
After thirty years of marriage, she -- suggest Emmy vs. she -- antecedents are Garth and Emily = they
Comment Written 29-Aug-2021
Comment from Ric Myworld
Every chapter you write deserves a six, but I'm happy I just happen to have one for this loaded chapter. Now, I'll be waiting all day to read the conversation between Cassidy and Mary. Thanks for sharing and I hope you're having a wonderful weekend! :-)
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021
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Every chapter you write deserves a six, but I'm happy I just happen to have one for this loaded chapter. Now, I'll be waiting all day to read the conversation between Cassidy and Mary. Thanks for sharing and I hope you're having a wonderful weekend! :-)
Comment Written 29-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021
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My weekend has been at this computer but it's where I am the happiest when the story wants to roll off my head like it did. Of course, I am flattered and thrilled for your kindness and the stars. You are very special. Smiles, hugs and lots of love, Carol
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The feelings are mutual, Carol, my dear! Sending all those hugs and slobbers back at cha!
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Just the way I wanted to end my evening...with slobbers! thanks! Now the pups who saw the groomer today (she comes to the house) are going to cuddle and say goodnight to the computer. Oh yeah, good night to you...
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Good night, Carol, and sleep tight! Ric
Comment from BethShelby
I'm dying to know how the conversation is going with Cassady and Mary and also what is happening with the kidnapped child. There are so many angles of this story to keep our minds going in every directions. You have a gift of writing mysteries and crime stories.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021
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I'm dying to know how the conversation is going with Cassady and Mary and also what is happening with the kidnapped child. There are so many angles of this story to keep our minds going in every directions. You have a gift of writing mysteries and crime stories.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021
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by now you know about Cassidy and Mary and suddenly the entrance of Liz. As for Annie, we don't know anything yet. Soon I hope.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
