Comment from C. Gale Burnett

Excellent

I really like this 5-7-5, especially the open-endedness of the last line, 'the poem begins'. I feel such emotions as comfort, sweetness, hope, companionship. A great contest entry!

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021

Thank you for your read, review and comments.

reply by C. Gale Burnett on 01-Sep-2021

You're welcome!

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Very nice image and
presentation.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic.
-The imagery shows the
tender beginnings of
a relationship.
-I like the concluding line, too.
-Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2021

Thank you for taking the time to read, review and comment.

reply by Pam (respa) on 29-Aug-2021

You are welcome.

Comment from Eunice Amero

Good

This poem is good but I think you have too many syllables in the second line and 3nd. Fix before the contest ends. Thank you for sharing. Hope you win. Have a good day and when you fix it I will rate you better.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2021

I believe the count is correct. Checked on syllable counter at https://syllablecounter.net/count
I reach for her hand 5
she smiles, our fingers entwine 7
the poem begins 5
Thanks for the read.

reply by Eunice Amero on 29-Aug-2021

maybe I was mistaken sorry. You are welcome.

reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021

Never be sorry for trying to help. I appreciate your attempt.

reply by Eunice Amero on 29-Aug-2021

Well thank you I am sorry because I don't want you thinking I think I know it all. I'm full of mistakes. Thanks again.

reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021

You are not the only one.