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Staysafe Insurance

A phone call

15 total reviews 
Comment from Father Flaps
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Hi Jen,
No, he just sits on the hood and blocks my view! The artwork fits your dialogue story very well. You did a great job with this entry... I see you won the contest! Congratulations!
Does an insurance company actually do that?... insure animals? ~just wondering
I remember when I bought a 1994 Pontiac Sunbird in 1996. I had two kids just getting their driver's license at the time, so I had to get a quote from my insurance company. The woman told me (over the phone), "You might want to sit down." I knew that bad news was coming. When she told me the figure, which was around $2400/year, I couldn't even speak.
"Mr. McAdam?........ Mr. McAdam?"
Still, I couldn't speak.
"Perhaps you want to talk it over with your wife, and call me back?"

Hugs, and Merry Christmas!
Kimbob

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 23-Dec-2021
    Thank you Kimbob so much for reviewing my little story. Merry Christmas.Jen
Comment from LJbutterfly
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Congratulations on your 'Dialogue Only Contest' win. I enjoyed the idea of a short telephone conversation. Within the dialogue, the story was clear, and the twist at the end was hilarious. Great job.

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
    Many thanks. Jen
Comment from Mary Shifman
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This is a very cute story. I like the picture, too. It's not easy to write an all dialogue story and have it make sense. You did a good job. No wonder you won the contest!

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 26-Aug-2021
    Thank you so much. Jen
Comment from Ric Myworld
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What a great way to start off my day! There's nothing better than a reason to smile! I wish I had a six, but glad you don't need it since you already have a chartreuse plus sign. Thanks for sharing and congratulations on the well deserved win!

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 26-Aug-2021
    Thanks Ric. X
Comment from robyn corum
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Jen,

hahahahahahaha! There were several things that struck me as quite, quite funny, here, my funny friend. (Congrats on the win, btw!)

First of all, all the insurance companies want you to bundle, bundle, BUNDLE, so this did seem very realistic, right??? hahahaha

But - and this may just show how weird I am - Of COURSE Mr. Brown had a dog!! Do you remember Dr. Seuss's book, 'Mr. Brown Can Moo'? For whatever reason, I immediately thought of that and had a good silly laugh to myself.

I also saw one tiny little nit:
--> (You're) very welcome, it is a pleasure

Thanks for sharing. What fun! Congrats, again!

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 26-Aug-2021
    Thanks for the great review Robyn. So glad you liked it. Love Jen x
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2021
    Thanks for the great review Robyn. So glad you liked it. Love Jen x
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2021
    Thanks for the great review Robyn. So glad you liked it. Love Jen x
Comment from Versch
Exceptional
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It is just like an insurance person to sell their policy, even for a dog. The part about the agent asking to insure the dog made me giggle.

The dialogues are realistic, even without the aid of narratives, descriptions or sentence tags, it is clear who is speaking because both speakers have mentioned the name of the other in the dialogue. Cleverly done!

Congratulations for winning the writing prompt!

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021
    So glad uou liked it. Thanks. Jen
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
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I like the statement...my dog doesn't drive....so very true. If we saw a dog behind the wheel of a car I think we would perhaps drive into a ditch. That would be an accident in the making....

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021
    Many thanks
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021
    Many thanks
Comment from J.R. Michael
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Hahaha. This gave me a nice chuckle. In my head I heard the drum beats and cymbal at the last line. Nice job meeting the requirements with the competition. I find dialogue only challenging but you made it look easy. Good luck!

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 Comment Written 25-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021
    Many thanks
Comment from Patty Palmer
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LOL That was very cute! I love the picture of the dog sitting on the car. The story was simple and fast easy to read. I really didn't expect that outcome until I actuallty read the last line. Very funny. You gave a laugh for the day! Good luck with the contest!
Patty

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021
    Thanks Patty
Comment from Wendy G
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Short, but very clever. A nice twist at the end. You have taken a realistic situation, and spoken with authentic dialogue, and built up well to your final line. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021
    Thanks Wendy