Senryu (invasion of space)
Wide open spaces make me feel vulnerable40 total reviews
Comment from l.raven
I love wide open spaces...my only fear of them...
would be Tornados...I live in a corn belt...there is open land all around me...we have Tornados that come down all around us...but I love the beauty of the land...and I guess the suspense as well...
I love your poem...and wish I had a six for it...******...
very well written...picture...perfect...love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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I love wide open spaces...my only fear of them...
would be Tornados...I live in a corn belt...there is open land all around me...we have Tornados that come down all around us...but I love the beauty of the land...and I guess the suspense as well...
I love your poem...and wish I had a six for it...******...
very well written...picture...perfect...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 21-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Hi Linda,
Oh thank you for such a wonderful review!
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Hi Linda,
Oh thank you for such a wonderful review!
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sooooooo welcome....love xxoo
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are descriptive, interesting and creative. Thank you
so much for the author's notes they compliments the words of this poem. I didn't know about Kenophogia - thank you for the detailed definition. The artwork is perfect and compliments the words of this poem.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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The author's words are descriptive, interesting and creative. Thank you
so much for the author's notes they compliments the words of this poem. I didn't know about Kenophogia - thank you for the detailed definition. The artwork is perfect and compliments the words of this poem.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Hi Harmony,
Thanks for your wonderful review! :-)
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Hi Harmony,
Thanks for your wonderful review! :-)
Comment from Mrs. KT
Kudos, Senyai, for penning a particularly delightful and insightful senryu.
And, of course, there is the added benefit of sharing with readers the definition of kenophobia!
I love the sentiments expressed!
Thank you for sharing!
And Best Wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Kudos, Senyai, for penning a particularly delightful and insightful senryu.
And, of course, there is the added benefit of sharing with readers the definition of kenophobia!
I love the sentiments expressed!
Thank you for sharing!
And Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 21-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Hi Diane,
Thank you so much for such an encouraging review and wonderful comments!
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Hi Diane,
Thank you so much for such an encouraging review and wonderful comments!
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I find your commentary and research in your author's notes interesting and intriguing. Putting on your hat triggers comfort with wide-open spaces, huh? I was not aware of that and, of Kenophobia, either. I knew about Agoraphobia, but only slightly, so thank you for informing me of the condition many people find themselves in. I like the picture you chose for this piece. I imagine you standing outside somewhere feeling overwhelmed and anxious. And putting on your hat to help solve the uncomfortable situation. Good luck with the contest and may you have a wonderful weekend,
Jesse
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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I find your commentary and research in your author's notes interesting and intriguing. Putting on your hat triggers comfort with wide-open spaces, huh? I was not aware of that and, of Kenophobia, either. I knew about Agoraphobia, but only slightly, so thank you for informing me of the condition many people find themselves in. I like the picture you chose for this piece. I imagine you standing outside somewhere feeling overwhelmed and anxious. And putting on your hat to help solve the uncomfortable situation. Good luck with the contest and may you have a wonderful weekend,
Jesse
Comment Written 21-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Hello Jesse,
So appreciate your fine review and encouraging words. Also for your interesting thoughts.
Have a wonderful weekend :-)
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Hello Jesse,
So appreciate your fine review and encouraging words. Also for your interesting thoughts.
Have a wonderful weekend :-)
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Good morning, oh anonymous one.
I am happy you liked my review.
Have a great day,
Jesse
Comment from Wendy G
An unusual fear. Your detailed notes explain your poem. The third line was otherwise a little startling. But an original and creative 5-7-5 and an excellent one, so very best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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An unusual fear. Your detailed notes explain your poem. The third line was otherwise a little startling. But an original and creative 5-7-5 and an excellent one, so very best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 21-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Hello Wendy, So appreciative of your really nice words on my poem. Thanks!
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Hello Wendy, So appreciative of your really nice words on my poem. Thanks!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image
and presentation.
-Thanks for sharing the notes.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic.
-Effective imagery and connection
between the opening line and
the closing line.
-A good entry; good luck.
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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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-Very nice image
and presentation.
-Thanks for sharing the notes.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic.
-Effective imagery and connection
between the opening line and
the closing line.
-A good entry; good luck.
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Comment Written 21-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Hello Pam,
Thank you for a very supportive review and encouraging thoughts on my work :-)
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Hello Pam,
Thank you for a very supportive review and encouraging thoughts on my work :-)
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Pantygynt
Thank you for the interesting note, I had not come across kenophobia before so I learned something new. Your hat is acting as a border - the edge of you so it protects you from being swallowed up by the vast outdoors,
From the point of view of a senryu this is almost verbose:
'(Out) onto distant vistas --
I (put on) don my hat'
would make a tighter senryu but with this prompt you are restricted to the 5-7-5 form.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Thank you for the interesting note, I had not come across kenophobia before so I learned something new. Your hat is acting as a border - the edge of you so it protects you from being swallowed up by the vast outdoors,
From the point of view of a senryu this is almost verbose:
'(Out) onto distant vistas --
I (put on) don my hat'
would make a tighter senryu but with this prompt you are restricted to the 5-7-5 form.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Hello Pantygynt,
Thank you for a detailed and helpful review. Good to know. I appreciate your time to assess my work :-)
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Hello Pantygynt,
Thank you for a detailed and helpful review. Good to know. I appreciate your time to assess my work :-)
Comment from LisaMay
Your senryu is very well written, linking the wide-brimmed sky with wearing a hat.
Thanks for your illuminating posting. I did not know about kenophobia; I know about agoraphobia and explaining the difference was helpful. I can see how wearing a hat would be helpful in providing security, a border to the space you are in. Luckily for me, I don't suffer from these as I love wide open spaces - I got used to them in Australia.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Your senryu is very well written, linking the wide-brimmed sky with wearing a hat.
Thanks for your illuminating posting. I did not know about kenophobia; I know about agoraphobia and explaining the difference was helpful. I can see how wearing a hat would be helpful in providing security, a border to the space you are in. Luckily for me, I don't suffer from these as I love wide open spaces - I got used to them in Australia.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Hi Lisa May,
Oh thank you for such an interesting review and thoughs. Australia is full of wide open spaces, so you?re lucky they don?t bother you LOL.
I appreciate your time to critique and assess my work. Thank you :)
Have a great weekend,
Senyai
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Hi Lisa May,
Oh thank you for such an interesting review and thoughs. Australia is full of wide open spaces, so you?re lucky they don?t bother you LOL.
I appreciate your time to critique and assess my work. Thank you :)
Have a great weekend,
Senyai
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Hi Lisa May,
Oh thank you for such an interesting review and thoughs. Australia is full of wide open spaces, so you?re lucky they don?t bother you LOL.
I appreciate your time to critique and assess my work. Thank you :)
Have a great weekend,
Senyai
Comment from karenina
Thanks for the education! My son has agoraphobia and can not function outside his home. Kenophobia is something I'd never heard of! (I kind of wish he could experience any wide open spaces!)
Karenina
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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Thanks for the education! My son has agoraphobia and can not function outside his home. Kenophobia is something I'd never heard of! (I kind of wish he could experience any wide open spaces!)
Karenina
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Comment Written 21-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Hi Karenina!
How are you doing these days? Hope you are improving. Thinking of you every day.
Oh no, poor guy. My mother had a slight bit of agoraphobia and it got worse as she got older. I hope your son tries desensitization therapy, I hear it has been helpful for some that will commit to it.
I found I must have a tad of kenophobia, when our family was on a vacation years back while visiting the Navajo Indian Pueblos in New Mexico. We could see for miles. We could see ground to sky lightning from great distances and the thunderstorms brewing for miles. Really beautiful but I felt strangely vulnerable out there ? like I was naked or something. LOL I thought, if I can see for miles, so can all the other eyes out there see me for miles. Yikes!
When we got into Albuquerque I was fine. Oh well, I love the country with sheltering trees and such, but wide flat lands as interesting as they are leave me a bit exposed.
Take care, dear Karenina. Know you are in my prayers.
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Hi Karenina!
How are you doing these days? Hope you are improving. Thinking of you every day.
Oh no, poor guy. My mother had a slight bit of agoraphobia and it got worse as she got older. I hope your son tries desensitization therapy, I hear it has been helpful for some that will commit to it.
I found I must have a tad of kenophobia, when our family was on a vacation years back while visiting the Navajo Indian Pueblos in New Mexico. We could see for miles. We could see ground to sky lightning from great distances and the thunderstorms brewing for miles. Really beautiful but I felt strangely vulnerable out there ? like I was naked or something. LOL I thought, if I can see for miles, so can all the other eyes out there see me for miles. Yikes!
When we got into Albuquerque I was fine. Oh well, I love the country with sheltering trees and such, but wide flat lands as interesting as they are leave me a bit exposed.
Take care, dear Karenina. Know you are in my prayers.
Senyai
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Hi Karenina!
How are you doing these days? Hope you are improving. Thinking of you every day.
Oh no, poor guy. My mother had a slight bit of agoraphobia and it got worse as she got older. I hope your son tries desensitization therapy, I hear it has been helpful for some that will commit to it.
I found I must have a tad of kenophobia, when our family was on a vacation years back while visiting the Navajo Indian Pueblos in New Mexico. We could see for miles. We could see ground to sky lightning from great distances and the thunderstorms brewing for miles. Really beautiful but I felt strangely vulnerable out there ? like I was naked or something. LOL I thought, if I can see for miles, so can all the other eyes out there see me for miles. Yikes!
When we got into Albuquerque I was fine. Oh well, I love the country with sheltering trees and such, but wide flat lands as interesting as they are leave me a bit exposed.
Take care, dear Karenina. Know you are in my prayers.
Senyai
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Thanks for sharing these experiences! My son has tried all kinds of therapy and has not (yet) come to one that helps him. I'm praying... I've asked several in my family what "kenophobia" was and none of them know so thanks for making me the smartest one (for a brief moment!)
Karenina
Comment from Carmen Ducharme
God Bless You! I feel the same I was once in the mountains in New Hampshire and I had an anxiety attack I felt so afraid to be Surrounded by mountains being in the city everything is around us being in the mountains was a whole new experience .Good luck with the contest !
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God Bless You! I feel the same I was once in the mountains in New Hampshire and I had an anxiety attack I felt so afraid to be Surrounded by mountains being in the city everything is around us being in the mountains was a whole new experience .Good luck with the contest !
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Comment Written 21-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Hi Carmen,
Oh, glad I?m not the only one then. Whew ? I could not understand my strange reaction to a beautiful outdoor vista. I felt like a rabbit or some prey that at any moment some hawk might swoop down and get me. It was ridiculous but disturbing. I thought I would love the great outdoors :-(
Thank you for your marvelous review. I appreciate the well wishes too.
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Your not the only one but your words might have been the best I have heard to make a scary situation so beautiful
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Thank you :))
