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Football - A Novel

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A mother faces life's struggles.

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Comment from Sankey
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This was a good read again. Funny how it takes so long to pick up on particular student's problems? A couple of small spags. "Sorry. Thank you (for)starting practice."

"Good. I'll ask the girls (to) line up across from you."

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
    Thank you for the catches. I made the corrections.
Comment from royowen
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Isn't it funny? Jimmy Rollins answered the math questions verbally, but because he has a problem reading and writing somehow couldn't put the answers on paper. But verbally he knows the answer, he gets an A. Perhaps dyslexia? Beautifully written dear Barbara, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : Thank you (for) starting practice...2 : one of you knuckle(d) heads.

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
    I have made the corrections. I doubt if it's dyslexia, the extra help through the years would have forced improvement. Thank you for the kind review.
reply by royowen on 15-Aug-2021
    Well done
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hello Barb
I enjoyed reading this chapter. I can see that Gabriel is getting
(to me) serious and concerned about Katherine. I liked the part you wrote about one of her students not able to read, but knowing how to answer verbally.
Gert

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
    Thank you for the kind review. There are students like that out there.
reply by Gert sherwood on 15-Aug-2021
    Barb you are so welcome
    Gert
Comment from Judy Lawless
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You're developing some good sources of conflict between Katherine and Gabriel, Barbara. This makes the story more real, and interesting. I look forward to seeing it all unfold. Good read.

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 Comment Written 15-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
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I still, like this story very much, Barbara. I'm glad that Kathrine retested the boy and found out that his problem is his difficulty to read and write. So Gabriel is as interested as ever. Can't wait to reading on. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from BethShelby
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This is interesting. It make sense for Katherine to retest the student orally who knows math. I'm wondering how his English teacher can okay him to play for the game. It looks like Gabriel is standing by Katherine for everything she needs. He is in love with her, so she is lucky. I'm enjoying this story and always looking forward for more.

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 Comment Written 15-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
    I never thought of the English teacher. LOL He may be in special ed for that, and can't be failed. Thank you for the kind review.