Tangled in Silence
5/7/5/7/7 Waka Poem for the Japanese Poetry Club18 total reviews
Comment from ESOSTINE
I found the poem a romantic piece that expressed the feelings we go through when our love is not reachable, memories overtake our thoughts. It could be painfully sweet a feeling. Well done, dear Gypsy.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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I found the poem a romantic piece that expressed the feelings we go through when our love is not reachable, memories overtake our thoughts. It could be painfully sweet a feeling. Well done, dear Gypsy.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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Comment from Mark Schardine
I can't catch my breath
as moonbeams press on my chest
my lips remember your kiss
No once else notices anything, but you are fully aware of it, and notice nothing else.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2021
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I can't catch my breath
as moonbeams press on my chest
my lips remember your kiss
No once else notices anything, but you are fully aware of it, and notice nothing else.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2021
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Thank you, Mark :)
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Comment from royowen
Such a poignantly penned waka/tanka poem that is so poignant and very well written, the sadness leaks from every fragment of the narrative, well done Gypsy, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2021
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Such a poignantly penned waka/tanka poem that is so poignant and very well written, the sadness leaks from every fragment of the narrative, well done Gypsy, blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Roy. It's always good to hear from you.
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Well done
Comment from Gloria ....
Some wonderfully fresh imagery here, and particularly the moonbeams pressing "on my chest" which of course they don't in reality do, maybe, but when feeling wistfully blue, they most certainly can. :))
An excellent contribution to your club.
Gloria
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2021
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Some wonderfully fresh imagery here, and particularly the moonbeams pressing "on my chest" which of course they don't in reality do, maybe, but when feeling wistfully blue, they most certainly can. :))
An excellent contribution to your club.
Gloria
Comment Written 15-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much, Gloria. It's always good to hear from you. I appreciate your review.
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Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
I find it very romantic. I am learning to write poetry, Haiku, Tana and a couple of others. I would very much like to add this to the list. Thank you for sharing an intensely emotional poem.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
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I find it very romantic. I am learning to write poetry, Haiku, Tana and a couple of others. I would very much like to add this to the list. Thank you for sharing an intensely emotional poem.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much, Seshadri_Sreenivasan. I appreciate your review and kind words.
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Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Tangled in Silence", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. It was a privilege to read and review this talented poet's work. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
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"Tangled in Silence", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. It was a privilege to read and review this talented poet's work. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much, duchess. I appreciate your review and kind words.
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Gypsy you're very welcome. You definitely deserved the review and kind words.
God bless and hugs,
the Duchess
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Feeling the atmospherics here in profound and ambient way as we miss someone deeply, their caress and kiss, much enjoyed, well chosen words, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
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Feeling the atmospherics here in profound and ambient way as we miss someone deeply, their caress and kiss, much enjoyed, well chosen words, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much, Dolly. I appreciate your review and kind words.
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Comment from Katie Mae Dead
Wow. Very potent and well written Gypsy
The imagery is spectacular....tangled in silence and embraced by memories"
Even without a picture I can envision this.
The poem just reeks with feelings.
Awesome work!
Katiemae
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
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Wow. Very potent and well written Gypsy
The imagery is spectacular....tangled in silence and embraced by memories"
Even without a picture I can envision this.
The poem just reeks with feelings.
Awesome work!
Katiemae
Comment Written 15-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much, Katie Mae, for your exceptional review, six stars, and kind words.
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Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is an incredibly romantic poem, full of sensation and emotion. You have made it flow very regularly by careful balance and use of imagery. I love it! Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
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This is an incredibly romantic poem, full of sensation and emotion. You have made it flow very regularly by careful balance and use of imagery. I love it! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much, Katherine, for your exceptional review, six stars, and kind words.
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Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Breathtaking! Startling, fresh imagery--tangled in silence--Brilliant: can't catch breath--moonbeams press on chest. As always, an elegant piece in fine form.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
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Breathtaking! Startling, fresh imagery--tangled in silence--Brilliant: can't catch breath--moonbeams press on chest. As always, an elegant piece in fine form.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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