Looking for Demons
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Names"An Investigator needs to find a demon
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Comment from Adri7enne
Yep. There are days when it feels like the gods are out to get you. Now he has to get mice again, and he's not in very good shape to go shopping. Dealing with old style gods would definitely be exhausting. Patience will only stretch so far. Makes for a creative write, though. I must check out Ashur as an Assyrian god. Fun stuff, Bob.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2021
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Yep. There are days when it feels like the gods are out to get you. Now he has to get mice again, and he's not in very good shape to go shopping. Dealing with old style gods would definitely be exhausting. Patience will only stretch so far. Makes for a creative write, though. I must check out Ashur as an Assyrian god. Fun stuff, Bob.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2021
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What? You think I would just make up stuff about Assyrian gods? I am shocked! Shocked, I tell you. Thanks for the review
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Yeah? Blow it out your hat! Lol! I know the Assyrians were very creative at inventing gods. The Sumerians, with their cuneiform writings. Isn't there a famous poem that speaks of their exploits? I must check that out.
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The Assyrian descended like a wol on the fold,
His cohorts all gleaming in scarlet and gold.
Read this poem as a child and was convinced cohort was a piece of armour
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Lol! I intended to check out that old poem. That's about all I remembered of it too, "like a wolf on the fold." I must get to it and read it again. I love when I'm reminded of my old high school English class. Such fun!
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Why else would it gleam, right? Lol!
Comment from Mary Shifman
You have interesting characters and excellent dialogue. In spite of the fact that it's mostly dialogue, it's very action driven. Personally, I would like a little more description but I enjoy reading this genre and you left me wanting more. Nicely done. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2021
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You have interesting characters and excellent dialogue. In spite of the fact that it's mostly dialogue, it's very action driven. Personally, I would like a little more description but I enjoy reading this genre and you left me wanting more. Nicely done. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2021
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Thank you. An author can only want a reader to want more.
Comment from Jay Squires
You have quite a story going here, Snodlander. I'm impressed by your storytelling skills. It seems evident to me you're not a seat-of-the-pants writer. Am I right? You have things well planned out, not leaving many loose ends. Joel is well-developed. He thinks on his feet and has contingency plans, like getting Ashur's wife's "real" name after he surmised her gain by having Asher controlled by the Croatian.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2021
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You have quite a story going here, Snodlander. I'm impressed by your storytelling skills. It seems evident to me you're not a seat-of-the-pants writer. Am I right? You have things well planned out, not leaving many loose ends. Joel is well-developed. He thinks on his feet and has contingency plans, like getting Ashur's wife's "real" name after he surmised her gain by having Asher controlled by the Croatian.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2021
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Honestly? It's mostly seat of my pants. I had no idea where this was going when I wrote chapter 1. Now I know what's going to happen, I just have to let the characters get there.
Thanks for the review and the flattery.
