Complicated Lives of Teenagers
Senryu 5-7-5 (broken promises)15 total reviews
Comment from Beejay
I think you've covered everything, you've said it all in your three lined Senryu. Being a teenager is awkward, difficult, frustrating and at times sad...but we ' all been there!! Great entry..
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I think you've covered everything, you've said it all in your three lined Senryu. Being a teenager is awkward, difficult, frustrating and at times sad...but we ' all been there!! Great entry..
Comment Written 10-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2021
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Yes, we have been there! To be honest, I did not suffer, but at one period I did have acne LOL
Thanks for your support for my contest entry. I prefer the 5-7-5 style poems. Longer ones are not in my poetry wheelhouse.
Comment from Raul1
I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. It is interesting and unique. I like your poem. The sentences flow with clarity. Excellent work! Best wishes in the contest!
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I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. It is interesting and unique. I like your poem. The sentences flow with clarity. Excellent work! Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 10-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2021
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Raul,
I like the 5-7-5 poem style. Either I am too lazy, not skillful enough, or whatever to create longer verses. (-;
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Complicated Lives of Teenagers
Nice entry for the Write a Senryu writing prompt. Good syllables count and connection between lines. Teenagers are very moody. Good topic. Good luck in the contest.
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Complicated Lives of Teenagers
Nice entry for the Write a Senryu writing prompt. Good syllables count and connection between lines. Teenagers are very moody. Good topic. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2021
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Thanks for your support Gypsy for this Senryu contest entry.
Comment from jenintorre
It's not easy being a teenager I wouldn't want to go back to that stage again. I like your Senyru and your very good presentation. I wish you lots of luck in the vompetition. Jen.
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It's not easy being a teenager I wouldn't want to go back to that stage again. I like your Senyru and your very good presentation. I wish you lots of luck in the vompetition. Jen.
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Comment Written 10-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2021
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Jen,
We have all been there and done that LOL. I don?t recall that it was a terrible time for me, except for some acne episodes (-;
Comment from dellsworthpoet
Very true. I sometimes think the phrase "it's complicated" was written specifically for teens.
The statements are concise and cutting.
The one suggestion I would put forward is to change "typical" to "clues of" or "points to". A fine line, but angst is the reaction to these things. (Sorry for being nit-picky.)
A good read. Thanks for sharing.
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Very true. I sometimes think the phrase "it's complicated" was written specifically for teens.
The statements are concise and cutting.
The one suggestion I would put forward is to change "typical" to "clues of" or "points to". A fine line, but angst is the reaction to these things. (Sorry for being nit-picky.)
A good read. Thanks for sharing.
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Comment Written 10-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2021
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We all agree that teenagers are complicated, but what about our terrible twos? children. LOL
Both are good suggestions, which would not alter my syllable count, but would increase the number of words in my Senryu. I prefer fewer words so I will leave it as is (-; Do appreciate your review and stars!
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You are welcome.
