Linda And Tom
How They Became Friends6 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
A very nice story about two writers that had much in common. I can see where a writer feels more comfortable if they are in the same field of expertise. But do they compete with each other then?
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2021
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A very nice story about two writers that had much in common. I can see where a writer feels more comfortable if they are in the same field of expertise. But do they compete with each other then?
Comment Written 12-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2021
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Thank you.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed reading your contest entry, Mystery Author. You did a good job with the prompt. I could see this as I read, and believe it is a real possibility. I like the happy ending for Tom and Linda.
Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
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I enjoyed reading your contest entry, Mystery Author. You did a good job with the prompt. I could see this as I read, and believe it is a real possibility. I like the happy ending for Tom and Linda.
Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 08-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much!
Comment from Begin Again
It's nice to imagine a friendship helping each other because they were shy, and then expanding and blossoming into something bigger than they could ever have imagined. Love blooms in strange places.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
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It's nice to imagine a friendship helping each other because they were shy, and then expanding and blossoming into something bigger than they could ever have imagined. Love blooms in strange places.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 07-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
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Thanks very much.
Comment from royowen
Isn't that a lovely story, fiction or not, these things happen, my kids weren't shy, but they were good girls and now mums themselves, this is beautifully written and I comments you for it. Well done, good lick, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
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Isn't that a lovely story, fiction or not, these things happen, my kids weren't shy, but they were good girls and now mums themselves, this is beautifully written and I comments you for it. Well done, good lick, blessings Roy
Comment Written 07-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much for your kind words.
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Most welcome
Comment from Beejay
I want this to be true, but it's only fiction..?
It's adorable and shows that the pen is definitely mightier than the sword...A lovely, creative account on writing. It was a delight to read.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
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I want this to be true, but it's only fiction..?
It's adorable and shows that the pen is definitely mightier than the sword...A lovely, creative account on writing. It was a delight to read.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
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Thanks very much!
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Whilst there is nothing wrong with the story here, the writing is a little flat and feels perfunctory. A bit pedestrian. There's no real description or emotion to the piece.
I think you could improve upon the readability of this a little by separating it into paragraphs. the single block is a bit unappealing.
to have a pen pal to write / enjoyed having Tom as her penpal - I think pen pal is two words but either way, it's best to just use one presentation.
he enjoyed having Tom as her penpal At first she didn't know what to write. - need a period / full tops before At.
At first she didn't know what to write. she just said,- the period after write should probably be a comma. Either that or She needs capitalised.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
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Hi there,
Whilst there is nothing wrong with the story here, the writing is a little flat and feels perfunctory. A bit pedestrian. There's no real description or emotion to the piece.
I think you could improve upon the readability of this a little by separating it into paragraphs. the single block is a bit unappealing.
to have a pen pal to write / enjoyed having Tom as her penpal - I think pen pal is two words but either way, it's best to just use one presentation.
he enjoyed having Tom as her penpal At first she didn't know what to write. - need a period / full tops before At.
At first she didn't know what to write. she just said,- the period after write should probably be a comma. Either that or She needs capitalised.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 07-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
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Thanks. I did capitalize she. I put paragraphs in the story, and pen pal is two words.
