haiku (two butterflies)
haiku contest29 total reviews
Comment from Eternal Muse
It was a gorgeous haiku. I love butterflies and have a little portfolio on them. Alas, these creatures have a short life span. They are graceful and airy and I love watching them fly.
The satori was stunning - "their last waltz".
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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It was a gorgeous haiku. I love butterflies and have a little portfolio on them. Alas, these creatures have a short life span. They are graceful and airy and I love watching them fly.
The satori was stunning - "their last waltz".
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you for your lovely review
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
haiku (two butterflies), is short, succinct and more than a little heart-breaking. With a minimum of words this talented poet has told it as it is.
Good luck in the contest. Please let me know how you get on?
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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haiku (two butterflies), is short, succinct and more than a little heart-breaking. With a minimum of words this talented poet has told it as it is.
Good luck in the contest. Please let me know how you get on?
Comment Written 26-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you so much for the lovely review
You're more than welcome!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your haiku is in great form. Your word choices are perfect. The words paint their own image, but your picture choice is appropriate. Great job with the style of haiku. I could see this unfold as I read.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Your haiku is in great form. Your word choices are perfect. The words paint their own image, but your picture choice is appropriate. Great job with the style of haiku. I could see this unfold as I read.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 26-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you, Jan.
Comment from zanya
Yes this Haiku paints a picture of late summer season as butterflies begin to disappear from the landscape - they seem to be forming part of yet another species in decline- thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2021
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Yes this Haiku paints a picture of late summer season as butterflies begin to disappear from the landscape - they seem to be forming part of yet another species in decline- thanks for sharing
Comment Written 26-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the lovely review.
Comment from Chrissy710
Yes a very good haiku with a fitting satori. A worthy entry to this contest, good interlocking first two lines, and overall meets haiku requirements I like this one Good luck in the contest Cheers Christine
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2021
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Yes a very good haiku with a fitting satori. A worthy entry to this contest, good interlocking first two lines, and overall meets haiku requirements I like this one Good luck in the contest Cheers Christine
Comment Written 26-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2021
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Thank you for understanding haiku, Christine, so few do.
Comment from Paul McFarland
Another great Haiku. The second one I have seen today. Capturing the fate of the butterflies with beautiful words. I think you will do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2021
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Another great Haiku. The second one I have seen today. Capturing the fate of the butterflies with beautiful words. I think you will do well in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the lovely review.
Comment from Jasminium
Love the concept..just amazing!!
However hard to identify the structure in accordance with haiku..Could have been more visually presentable...
But I love the simplicity of this poem ..creates visual for me ..good luck and keep writing !!
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Love the concept..just amazing!!
However hard to identify the structure in accordance with haiku..Could have been more visually presentable...
But I love the simplicity of this poem ..creates visual for me ..good luck and keep writing !!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2021
Comment from T B Botts
Nice poem. You said a lot with very little. It's somewhat sad that such beautiful things have such a short life span. I guess they performed the duty they were put here for and expired. Good job.
Blessings.
Tom
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2021
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Nice poem. You said a lot with very little. It's somewhat sad that such beautiful things have such a short life span. I guess they performed the duty they were put here for and expired. Good job.
Blessings.
Tom
Comment Written 25-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2021
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Thank you for taking the time to review this haiku
Comment from Mary Shifman
I like your poem. It encapsulates the plight of butterflies today in a poetic and dreamy fashion. As I mentioned to someone else earlier who wrote about butterflies, we live on a farm and we used to have hordes of them every summer. We have patches of milkweed and we never spray, but I haven't seen a single butterfly this summer. It is a sad thing that some only live such a short time and we have so few in this area now.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2021
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I like your poem. It encapsulates the plight of butterflies today in a poetic and dreamy fashion. As I mentioned to someone else earlier who wrote about butterflies, we live on a farm and we used to have hordes of them every summer. We have patches of milkweed and we never spray, but I haven't seen a single butterfly this summer. It is a sad thing that some only live such a short time and we have so few in this area now.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2021
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Thank you for the beautiful review. Here in Coronado, where we live, there are an abundance of them. Wish I could share them with you.
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You are so lucky. Here in Maine there doesn't seem to be,
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
It always amazes me how so few syllables can say so much. I have never given the fact much though but I do know butterflies have such short lives. Very well done with a pretty picture.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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It always amazes me how so few syllables can say so much. I have never given the fact much though but I do know butterflies have such short lives. Very well done with a pretty picture.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much for the lovely review
