New Life
Ode Poem11 total reviews
Comment from Mia Twysted
This is a cute piece that brings the reader into nature. Something we should all be aware of so that we can heal the world.
I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
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This is a cute piece that brings the reader into nature. Something we should all be aware of so that we can heal the world.
I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2021
Comment from Laurie Holding
I so love this artwork, and you have my vote in today's contest. It's more difficult than it looks, squeezing your whole message into these syllables, and I tip my hat at this piece. If I could offer any sort of critique, it would be that punctuation is allowed, here, and might offer fluidity. Taking their first breath, tiny squeaks as life begins, hungry for the world. Or even put an ellipsis at the end of that first line. Either way, it's beautiful, and good luck to you in the contest!
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I so love this artwork, and you have my vote in today's contest. It's more difficult than it looks, squeezing your whole message into these syllables, and I tip my hat at this piece. If I could offer any sort of critique, it would be that punctuation is allowed, here, and might offer fluidity. Taking their first breath, tiny squeaks as life begins, hungry for the world. Or even put an ellipsis at the end of that first line. Either way, it's beautiful, and good luck to you in the contest!
Comment Written 05-Aug-2021
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
New rabbits? Good thing you explained in your author notes. We have several of those creatures in the yard. I think they are born in the neighborhood and when they get courage, they run everywhere.
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New rabbits? Good thing you explained in your author notes. We have several of those creatures in the yard. I think they are born in the neighborhood and when they get courage, they run everywhere.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2021
Comment from tempeste
Ciao mystery poet,
You now have 3 votes.
I just felt an overload of cuteness seeing the picture.
I hope they grow healthy and have a good life .
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Ciao mystery poet,
You now have 3 votes.
I just felt an overload of cuteness seeing the picture.
I hope they grow healthy and have a good life .
Comment Written 05-Aug-2021
Comment from Wendy G
Lovely poem in 5-7-5 format. Your syllables are right, and it is a sweet image to accompany. Yours is an ode to new life, as the little ones begin their adventure of life. Well done.
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Lovely poem in 5-7-5 format. Your syllables are right, and it is a sweet image to accompany. Yours is an ode to new life, as the little ones begin their adventure of life. Well done.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2021
Comment from Patty Palmer
As all newborns, taking their first breaths, tiny squeaks as life begins. Hungry for the world. The miracle of life is still a miracle of life no matter what kind of baby it may be. Great job!
Patty
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As all newborns, taking their first breaths, tiny squeaks as life begins. Hungry for the world. The miracle of life is still a miracle of life no matter what kind of baby it may be. Great job!
Patty
Comment Written 04-Aug-2021
Comment from Eternal Muse
Oh, this is so adorable! These rabbits look like angels.
Great descriptive imagery. I liked "Tiny squeaks of life anew." Amazing visuals and presentation.
Good luck in the contest. It should do very well.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2021
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Oh, this is so adorable! These rabbits look like angels.
Great descriptive imagery. I liked "Tiny squeaks of life anew." Amazing visuals and presentation.
Good luck in the contest. It should do very well.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2021
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Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Like your picture and your poem. I do however question the word "anew." Yes, they are new but anew means they are repeating something. Perhaps you mean arise. Best of luck with this.
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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2021
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Like your picture and your poem. I do however question the word "anew." Yes, they are new but anew means they are repeating something. Perhaps you mean arise. Best of luck with this.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2021
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Thanks for your review. I have altered where you suggested.
Comment from Bonnie Seach
A delightful poem "book-casing" a delightful encounter in the Author's backyard. Thank you for your notes.
The visual presentation is appealing and endearing. The poem follows the 5-7-5 syllable contest requirements.
Thanks for sharing.
Best wishes for the contest
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2021
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A delightful poem "book-casing" a delightful encounter in the Author's backyard. Thank you for your notes.
The visual presentation is appealing and endearing. The poem follows the 5-7-5 syllable contest requirements.
Thanks for sharing.
Best wishes for the contest
Comment Written 03-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2021
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Thanks for your review and the six stars. Much appreciated.
Comment from Carmen Ducharme
What a lovely poem and your picture matches it perfectly !! Oh to be born and for the first time smell and feel .I love your poem .Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest !
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2021
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What a lovely poem and your picture matches it perfectly !! Oh to be born and for the first time smell and feel .I love your poem .Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest !
Comment Written 03-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2021
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Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.
