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Football - A Novel

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A mother faces life's struggles.

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Comment from tfawcus
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You've certainly given us a hood hook to hang onto at the end of this one, Barabara!
I enjoyed the way you built up the suspense preceding the contest and the attention Katherine gives to every detail.
Another enjoyable chapter spiced with crisp dialogue.

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Barb,
when I finished reading this chapter, I was wondering what in the world was in the letter to make Katherine tears streamed down her cheeks as she held up the letter she revived from a well dressed man in a gray suit handing her envelope, said, "You have been served".
Gert

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
    You will find out very soon. Well, next Sunday. It's horrible news. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
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So what on earth was in that letter? Now, growing up in Europe, I don't know much about the rules of the game or the game at all, but that doesn't stop me from loving this story. Now what? Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
    Thank you for the kind review. We'll discover next Sunday about that letter.
Comment from AJ McCall
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Oh, man. What was on the letter? I bet Frost is still behind it. Sorry I haven't been keeping up with the past chapters. Been a little busy. But I can't wait to see what happens. I GOTTA KNOW WHAT HAS KATHERINE IN TEARS!!

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
    Her tears are real. We'll find out next Sunday. I have missed you. I'm glad you're back. Thank you.
reply by AJ McCall on 01-Aug-2021
    Aww, you're welcome! Ugh, I don't like waiting LOL.
Comment from nomi338
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Katherine's in laws will not prevail. The best laid plans of evil men and women will look good to them at first, but the reality of God's goodness will win out in the end. You cannot steal a woman's children whose children will fight against it time and time again. Those boys love their mother enough that they will fight tooth and nail to prevent being stolen by people they already know do not love them and only want the money they can generate.

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
    You have nailed it. Thank you for the kind review.
reply by nomi338 on 01-Aug-2021
    Very good. I am personally offended by the lengths some greedy people will go to just for money.
Comment from Judy Lawless
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Great chapter, Katherine. I like the new story line and how it's progressing. We can guess what the legal document is, but we'll have to wait for confirmation in the next chapter. Well done.

One little spag: "when I blew(blow) the whistle the race begins.

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 Comment Written 01-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
    Thank you for the catch. I will fix it immediately.
Comment from Begin Again
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Awesome cliff hanger....

Leave the reader wondering what's in that letter and who's doing what. Terrific job. Also, the girls did an awesome job in the race...though it didn't look like the boys put in too much effort.

Smiles, Carol

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 Comment Written 01-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
    Linemen rarely do when it comes to running. LOl Thank you for the kind review.
reply by Begin Again on 01-Aug-2021
    I know nothing about football and their players other than what the ball looks like and they scramble on top of each other trying to stop the other team. lol
Comment from Ben Colder
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Paul laughed. "Of course, Coach Riley. I wouldn't want any cheaters. You'll have to give me a few minutes to get up that thing."

It would take more than a few minutes for me. LOL.
You got some competition going and it will be interesting the outcome.

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 01-Aug-2021
    Thank you for the supportive review.