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Comment from Patricia McPike
Truly an enjoyable piece of work. The cadence is wonderfully rhythmic
and it is thought provoking too. I liked the use of figurative language - making "a stew" as a creative way to describe the misinformation so prevalent today on social media, both
"truth and lies".
I also liked the use of the phrase to "host" regret. To host means we are inviting and welcoming someone (something) into our lives. It is a good reminder of the futility of entertaining thoughts of one's past mistakes
And then summing it up - we need for a guide to sort through truth and lies.
Very well done.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Truly an enjoyable piece of work. The cadence is wonderfully rhythmic
and it is thought provoking too. I liked the use of figurative language - making "a stew" as a creative way to describe the misinformation so prevalent today on social media, both
"truth and lies".
I also liked the use of the phrase to "host" regret. To host means we are inviting and welcoming someone (something) into our lives. It is a good reminder of the futility of entertaining thoughts of one's past mistakes
And then summing it up - we need for a guide to sort through truth and lies.
Very well done.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Thank so much Patricia, for these magical and beautifully written and uplifting thoughts and supportive comments and empathy, blessings Roy
Comment from l.raven
WOW Roy, I am so glad I went back and read this one...twice...this took work my sweet friend...
CONGAULATIONS on a new form...I'm so sorry I have no more sixes left...******...
and you are so right...when you say...a good soul dies without a guide...I choose to let God be mine...
I love your poem...and what a picture...so very well written
sweet guy...love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2021
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WOW Roy, I am so glad I went back and read this one...twice...this took work my sweet friend...
CONGAULATIONS on a new form...I'm so sorry I have no more sixes left...******...
and you are so right...when you say...a good soul dies without a guide...I choose to let God be mine...
I love your poem...and what a picture...so very well written
sweet guy...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 05-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2021
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Thanks again Linda, for these fantastic comments and review, blessings Roy
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your so very welcome my sweet friend...love xxoo
Comment from Jarvis Popovich
I'll give you a six on this one. You did a good job with this style. Truly, I agree with all of the message, as we are to be free of those things that interfere with our salvation.
We'll done Roy!
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2021
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I'll give you a six on this one. You did a good job with this style. Truly, I agree with all of the message, as we are to be free of those things that interfere with our salvation.
We'll done Roy!
Comment Written 04-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2021
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Thanks Jarvis for these fantastic comments and a kind review, and wonderful stars, blessings Roy
Comment from karenina
OH my! I love the Pantoum so! (I find it gives me a migraine at times, but well worth the effort!)--THIS, though... I will bow deeply and praise your effort and also take your advice for surely my little brain would explode were I do dare try to incorporate a swap quatrain with a pantoum! (I am still suffering poetic PTSD and a pulled brain ligament from my one and only attempt at a Sestina but that's another lament....)
Everything to admire about this poem! Nothing I could ever do better...just as well, since it's WAY over my pay grade!
Kudos!
Karenina
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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OH my! I love the Pantoum so! (I find it gives me a migraine at times, but well worth the effort!)--THIS, though... I will bow deeply and praise your effort and also take your advice for surely my little brain would explode were I do dare try to incorporate a swap quatrain with a pantoum! (I am still suffering poetic PTSD and a pulled brain ligament from my one and only attempt at a Sestina but that's another lament....)
Everything to admire about this poem! Nothing I could ever do better...just as well, since it's WAY over my pay grade!
Kudos!
Karenina
Comment Written 02-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Thanks Karen, but I?m sure you could, but it was a bit headachy for me, this could be the first and last, you feeling better, or is Jess still doing the business, (dear girl) thanks love, blessings Roy
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She is patiently typing away for me, along with a million other things! I am blessed to have such a fine daughter!
Karenina
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She?s a wonder, and I?m impressed, and so is God
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Children are our angels on earth! Truly!
Comment from Paul McFarland
Great job using a very difficult format. I love the message. Usually poems in a format such as this one are a little rough, but you have done a great job in creating a poem that flows very nicely.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Great job using a very difficult format. I love the message. Usually poems in a format such as this one are a little rough, but you have done a great job in creating a poem that flows very nicely.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Thanks so much Paul, for your most terrific comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from scongrove
Fantastic writing, my friend :)
So glad to see you posting more again. I enjoy reading what you've created. The artwork you placed with this is captivating. It's very eye catching.
The last paragraph really caught my attention. I liked how you worded it. The first line has a lot of meaning in itself. "Without a guide the good soul dies."
Always your fan,
Shana :)
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Fantastic writing, my friend :)
So glad to see you posting more again. I enjoy reading what you've created. The artwork you placed with this is captivating. It's very eye catching.
The last paragraph really caught my attention. I liked how you worded it. The first line has a lot of meaning in itself. "Without a guide the good soul dies."
Always your fan,
Shana :)
Comment Written 02-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Thanks Shana, you are such a loyal friend and companion on life?s journey, bless you
Comment from pookietoo
Excellent! I think it is very interesting that you put the line: they make a stew both truth and lies twice. You did a great rhyming job. Keep up the great work! Good luck in any contests that you enter.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Excellent! I think it is very interesting that you put the line: they make a stew both truth and lies twice. You did a great rhyming job. Keep up the great work! Good luck in any contests that you enter.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Thanks so much for your most terrific comments and a great review, blessings Roy
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You are welcome.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
To host regret, it wouldn't do.
that is the line that speaks to me in your well rhymed poem Roy. I often find myself thinking about things, should I, could I have done them differently, better, but then I realise, that doesn't help anyone, certainly not me. I love the artwork you've chosen, and enjoyed your poem Roy.
valda
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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To host regret, it wouldn't do.
that is the line that speaks to me in your well rhymed poem Roy. I often find myself thinking about things, should I, could I have done them differently, better, but then I realise, that doesn't help anyone, certainly not me. I love the artwork you've chosen, and enjoyed your poem Roy.
valda
Comment Written 02-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Thanks so much Valda, for your most terrific comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from MissMerri
Such a difficult form you've created here, and I must say, you've done what seemed impossible to me. This is a marvelous accomplishment and speaks of a great truth in the process. "The good soul dies without a guide." It is always important to ask for guidance, to be honest about our shortcomings and to admit wrongs. I think you've given us a beautiful little sermon in this poem. I like the repeating lines which seem to emphasize what is important. Well done, Mr. Roy.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Such a difficult form you've created here, and I must say, you've done what seemed impossible to me. This is a marvelous accomplishment and speaks of a great truth in the process. "The good soul dies without a guide." It is always important to ask for guidance, to be honest about our shortcomings and to admit wrongs. I think you've given us a beautiful little sermon in this poem. I like the repeating lines which seem to emphasize what is important. Well done, Mr. Roy.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Thanks so much Adonna, for your most terrific comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Roy:
Normally I use someone's template if I want to try to write a new poetic form, but I'm not sure that would help me in this case. While I got a sense of the format as I read, I was thinking I was glad you wrote it and not me. More than that, I love the message your pantswap quatrains shared with us.
jan
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Roy:
Normally I use someone's template if I want to try to write a new poetic form, but I'm not sure that would help me in this case. While I got a sense of the format as I read, I was thinking I was glad you wrote it and not me. More than that, I love the message your pantswap quatrains shared with us.
jan
Comment Written 01-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Thanks so much Jan, for your most terrific comments and a great review, blessings Roy
