Shape Shifter
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Shape-Shifter Part Five"A Detective John Dutton Novellette
13 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
You have pulled the reader in with this phrase:" For Dutton, they brought back way too many memories of another time, another life he once lived." Room for a 'backstory'. An interesting conclusion: "The first thought that entered Dutton's mind was Adler's heart wasn't into striking out at young targets." So now the reader will want to return.
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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You have pulled the reader in with this phrase:" For Dutton, they brought back way too many memories of another time, another life he once lived." Room for a 'backstory'. An interesting conclusion: "The first thought that entered Dutton's mind was Adler's heart wasn't into striking out at young targets." So now the reader will want to return.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Much appreciate the review.
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Comment from Pearl Edwards
I enjoyed reading more about Dutton, his sixth sense in regards to crime scenes, a bit more of the person he is. Another good chapter Brett, enjoying it.
Cheers
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2021
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I enjoyed reading more about Dutton, his sixth sense in regards to crime scenes, a bit more of the person he is. Another good chapter Brett, enjoying it.
Cheers
Comment Written 09-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2021
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Appreciate the sixer and the review. Glad you enjoyed this portion.
Comment from Judy Lawless
I'm still committed to following this mystery, Brett. You're doing a great job of creating scenes and building up the suspense. I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
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I'm still committed to following this mystery, Brett. You're doing a great job of creating scenes and building up the suspense. I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
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Glad you are enjoying this novelette. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Brett:
Who can explain extra-sensory perceptions they possess, especially if they have not always had them? In many cases, why would it matter if you put them to good use as Dutton apparently does. Maybe this attack on the teen is a look-alike by someone who desires the same notoriety that Adler is getting.
jan
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
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Brett:
Who can explain extra-sensory perceptions they possess, especially if they have not always had them? In many cases, why would it matter if you put them to good use as Dutton apparently does. Maybe this attack on the teen is a look-alike by someone who desires the same notoriety that Adler is getting.
jan
Comment Written 01-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
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Glad you enjoyed this part of the novelette. Much appreciate the review.
Comment from Jay Squires
Hi, Brett. It's been a while. I enjoyed this chapter, though of course, I flailed around a bit getting to know what was happening. I know you suggested the reader catch up on past chapters, but we both know that's not gonna happen, LOL. In all sincerity, I would suggest a paragraph summarizing the previous chapter. It takes 5 minutes. Anyway, just a thought.
Only one thing I found that could use attention:
a badly beaten young male laid on the pavement next to the Renegade. [The past tense is "lay", not "laid", unless some one placed him there, then he WAS LAID there.]
I like Dutton. I like rogues.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
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Hi, Brett. It's been a while. I enjoyed this chapter, though of course, I flailed around a bit getting to know what was happening. I know you suggested the reader catch up on past chapters, but we both know that's not gonna happen, LOL. In all sincerity, I would suggest a paragraph summarizing the previous chapter. It takes 5 minutes. Anyway, just a thought.
Only one thing I found that could use attention:
a badly beaten young male laid on the pavement next to the Renegade. [The past tense is "lay", not "laid", unless some one placed him there, then he WAS LAID there.]
I like Dutton. I like rogues.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
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Appreciate the insightful and helpful review. Glad you like rogues. They make interesting characters most of the time.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is a very good addition to the previous posts and we get more insight into Dutton. We now and an additional body. I thought most serial killers work alone. Hmm, an interesting thought. I really like this story and can't wait for more.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
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This is a very good addition to the previous posts and we get more insight into Dutton. We now and an additional body. I thought most serial killers work alone. Hmm, an interesting thought. I really like this story and can't wait for more.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
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Thanks. Appreciate the insightful review.
Comment from J Patience
I like the idea of detectives that can sense more than the typical human can simply by observation. The twist of an unexpected accomplice in any crime story puts a good layer on what could be possible in the future of the story. The fact that it's called "shape shifter" also suggests that this is going to be a very tough case. Nice, short chapter, well written with no grammerical distractions or unneeded descriptions. That's refreshing.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
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I like the idea of detectives that can sense more than the typical human can simply by observation. The twist of an unexpected accomplice in any crime story puts a good layer on what could be possible in the future of the story. The fact that it's called "shape shifter" also suggests that this is going to be a very tough case. Nice, short chapter, well written with no grammerical distractions or unneeded descriptions. That's refreshing.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
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Appreciate the thoughtful review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Dutton's sixth sense is a valuable tool, probably the most beneficial other than straight out facts. But, who knows how criminals really think, or even if they do. It all becomes a guessing game against Adlers. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
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Dutton's sixth sense is a valuable tool, probably the most beneficial other than straight out facts. But, who knows how criminals really think, or even if they do. It all becomes a guessing game against Adlers. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
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Always a pleasure to receive your thoughtful reviews. Much appreciated.
Comment from Sankey
Great chapter and a good insight into Dutton's character and ability. Keep me posted on these. You are still one of my favourite prose writers.
clairsentient ...interesting word never seen it before??
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
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Great chapter and a good insight into Dutton's character and ability. Keep me posted on these. You are still one of my favourite prose writers.
clairsentient ...interesting word never seen it before??
Comment Written 30-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
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Glad you enjoyed this part of the story. Hope all is well in your world these days.
Comment from royowen
There's something strange that has added to the story, although the boy was attacked he still lived, and Dutton figured that if Adler had wanted to, the boy would be dead. So there's another variable that doesn't quite fit, obviously Adler has an agenda, a reason to kill, and why he is as he is. Well done Brett, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
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There's something strange that has added to the story, although the boy was attacked he still lived, and Dutton figured that if Adler had wanted to, the boy would be dead. So there's another variable that doesn't quite fit, obviously Adler has an agenda, a reason to kill, and why he is as he is. Well done Brett, blessings Roy
Comment Written 30-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
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Appreciate the insightful review.
